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| Echoes Of My Voice by OMA4U(op): 9:34pm On Feb 14, 2015 |
Echoes of My Voice Rounding off the race of primordial time In a confined cell of bubbled water Knitted the fetus of an unseen soul Pulled out amid the thighs of a seamstress To the pool of crimson flooded blanket - His cradle bed clasped his tender body I echo volumes of innocent cries From the deep cosmic hard of black clay pot; In a rumpled heap of folded hot leaves A solid white pap with dazzling traits came; As though from the long cave of dark tunnel A prism of white luminous light sheds; From the thousand of barbarian voices A tiny, yet compelling voice echoes; Brimmed market of busy patronizers A buyer stood aloof in a zenith, Yet commanding the frenzied market square Through the labyrinth of clumsy voices An empire where eyes were dark as night Crystal pupils dilate and shed bright light; When storms call like a familiar stranger A glyph of stiff mast of public pole stood; In a forest of thousand wobble trees Araba's root stood firmly in the soil Like a refined gem from a filthy stream Along the subway of muddy water; Like an artifact buried in the earth when exhumed, a treasure welcome the world; Although my infant voice echoes from blues, my voice that booms is yet to get its muse. Note: Echoes of My Voice is a poem consisting of an unrhymed pentameter -there are ten syllables in each line and sestet (a six-line poem) of six stanzas Tag: Laykorn Texanomaly Timpaker Oahray Everestdebliu Krystalxxx Buqqui Firestar Gloriaz Johnbright JigsawKillah |
| Re: Echoes Of My Voice by Nobody: 8:47am On Feb 15, 2015 |
OMA4U:Read this poem once, twice , three times. I've gotta say it's deep , it really is. I can't figure out exactly what the themes are and what it's really saying though I have some ideas in my head . But I think it's dark and just awesome and full of meaning. I'd love it if you'd explain more about it to us |
| Re: Echoes Of My Voice by OMA4U(op): 3:31pm On Feb 15, 2015 |
Krystalxxx:Did you get the first stanza? It's about the birth of a boy. Second stanza elaborates the contrast between the boy and his immediate environ. Tag: Laykorn, texanomaly, timpaker |
| Re: Echoes Of My Voice by texanomaly(f): 10:31pm On Feb 15, 2015 |
I've known you were talented for some time OMA, but this and your last poem are "master poet" quality. Impressive. |
| Re: Echoes Of My Voice by OMA4U(op): 12:37am On Feb 16, 2015 |
texanomaly:Hey! Thank you, Tex. I'm so so happy for your gracious comment. |
| Re: Echoes Of My Voice by Nobody: 12:42am On Feb 16, 2015 |
OMA4U:Oma, lol. Why them no move this? Maybe they're scared people will say you pay them. ![]() Someone said it anyway and asked how much you pay them to move your threads. ![]() When next they ask, remember to tell them you're a good poet and that solves it. Ayamlaykorn |
| Re: Echoes Of My Voice by LarrySun(m): 12:47am On Feb 16, 2015 |
I hear the echoes. They reverberate through my consciousness. They speak lofty languages. They bounce off the walls, like a ball of rubbery threads. The walls are dancing. Amazing poet! He mesmerizes. He captivates. He enchants! This is socko! ![]() |
| Re: Echoes Of My Voice by Nobody: 12:49am On Feb 16, 2015 |
LarrySun:You're good around words sir. I wonder why you don't do poetry. ![]() Ayamlaykorn |
| Re: Echoes Of My Voice by OMA4U(op): 12:51am On Feb 16, 2015 |
laykorn:lol... That's why I love people because of the hysterical laughter they throw into my mouth. The fact is I never knew I made frontpage. Those poems have been lying unread on my pc for a while before I decided to share so I could get criticism. |
| Re: Echoes Of My Voice by LarrySun(m): 12:55am On Feb 16, 2015 |
laykorn:Poetry is too complex for me; it scares me, really. ![]() |
| Re: Echoes Of My Voice by OMA4U(op): 12:59am On Feb 16, 2015 |
LarrySun:Yes! You hear the echoes. It's tiny, but amazing; amidst thousand of barbarian voices, the voice is so clear and distinct. I'll eternally be grateful that I came once to the world and I fortunately met Larry Sun out of billions of buyers in this market square. |
| Re: Echoes Of My Voice by OMA4U(op): 1:03am On Feb 16, 2015 |
laykorn:LarrySun is not tantamount to words, He is words himself. If I'm good around words as he does, uhmm I will ..... |
| Re: Echoes Of My Voice by timpaker(m): 11:04am On Feb 16, 2015 |
Erm... Where is my dictionary ![]() Each line had me skimming through my dictionary. Nice poem bro. I wish I could write as good as you do. Walahi |
| Re: Echoes Of My Voice by texanomaly(f): 4:06pm On Feb 19, 2015 |
LarrySun:Oh puuleez!! The below is the voice of a romantic poet. Don't forget I know better my friend. ![]() LarrySun:@OMA You deserve all the praise and fp. |





