POETIC DUEL


Laveda vs Jigsawkillah


Theme: Enemies


Judges:
Suigeneris93
Yuzjet
Qaisar1
Donifez
Timpaker
lLaykorn
Firestar
Pdizzle
and every other poet on this forum

First to 5 votes wins

Friends warned me about you.
Monster in human flesh that leaves people feeling blue.
Crafty minion, my actions towards you I rue,
But I'll get justice once I've the chance to sue.


Your presence irritates me, your existence annoys me.
I'll derive Joy in your tears,
An inexplicable pleasure in your fears.
You are miserable with a heart as dark as coal,
And once your transgressions takes its toll on your soul,
Your insecurity I'll plough.

Enemy? Wish there's was a better word to describe this evil
You prodigal son of the devil
Heart devoid of peace or tranquil,
Its civil shattered on an anvil.


when the grim reaper comes to get you.
Your legs will be too feeble to help you. No need to cry foul, Nemesis is on its way to wound your soul.
This is just the beginning of your descent to gaol.

You Juggled with my heart,
You tossed it like a hat.
Do you think you shall escape the claws of karma? it is a very merciless bitçh,
It will dump your filthy body in a ditch.

I'm happy you shall shrink and rot in hell.
That burning furnace shall be your new cell.
Where your body will be impaled,
While you burn from a fire started from a diesel.


Laveda.

Takes first sit

Dear Jigs

I hate the man you've become
You hated insincere people, how could you be one
Drinking with reckless abandon
Who'd now play role model to your son?

Burning away your wealth with the ganja
Don't ask why you're broke, you know the answer
It's either you're getting high
Or after the waist of a good dancer

See your love life is shattered
How long will you keep telling Hannah
That you love her when you're lying
You smile when talking to her? no, you're trying

You don't have a heart, you've become a monster
And just last month, you became a fraudster
Your love for money is overwhelming
If I wasn't you, you'd jump at a chance to sell me

I'd blame it on rap, but I've seen other rappers
Boogey doesn't smoke, still has a dozen chapters
MI never had to steal, albeit forming gangsta
And when I show you these, I hear your horrid laughter

I stare at the mirror, I see your bulgy eyes
I see your goatee, and my rage would rise
I see your ugly face, it's you I want to slap
I bring out the dagger, but can't freaking stab

You used to be better than this
Until you knew the world exists
Worse after you saw your dad drag a spliff
Worst after George became deceased

You used to be a friend, not anymore
How could you call my life a bore?
I hate that you became my enemy!
I hate that you're me



From Jeffery

JigsawKillah, hope you know 'Pen' is a metaphor for dick? LOL. In our world, that is. Lol.

The first poem was so sincere that I could hear my tummy murmuring.

The second poem however, was so dope that I could see my head nodding.

But neither of the poem didn't splash any blood as the titled portrayed because all I wanna do is to fvcking splash the blood of my enemies.

But here, I go for brevity and the sincerity that comes with the first poem.

Laveda, u've this!

Waoh... Lol

Ishilove ,Creamish, FirstEva ,come and see

Brb, let me get my maltna ist.... Laveda seems to be full of it, it flows naturally from her thoughts. Jigsawkillah seems to be more *penful* n absurd with words. Both r good sha but I can only vote for one..... LAVEDA gets my vote

Beautiful pieces, kudos to the both of you, you're great wordsmiths

It'll be tough to choose one over the other because you both have your unique styles which is just amazing, I'm speechless

Laveda, your piece is wonderful, I could feel the hurt and anger flowing from your pen, your enemies are in real trouble, lol.

Talking about man being his worst enemy, Jigsawkillah your piece is profound and thought provoking.

After all that's said and done, my vote goes to Jigsawkillah. Like I said, profound

Laveda that was deep..... Nice!

Laveda's was lucid. You could actually see the words being formed. The hurt and sorrows expressively made.

Jigsaw rhymes was coruscating. It portrayed deep things.

Tough one though, but I go with Laveda

Oh boy laveda did someone offend you nii?
Please tell me you didn't picture anyone when writing o.

Wonderful piece I must say.


Jigsawkill your love for money is overwhelming lol. I love that line jawe. Nice one.

My vote goes to laveda, lines are so real and spiteful

Both are wonderful, but none really charters my cheers.

Okay. I think writing poems in free verse form is becoming over use here in this section. Why don't you guys try other poetic form, like blank verse for instance.

TheAgba, what do you think?

JigsawKillah:
Dear Jigs

I hate the man you've become
You hated insincere people, how could you be one
Drinking with reckless abandon
Who'd now play role model to your son?

Burning away your wealth with the ganja
Don't ask why you're broke, you know the answer
It's either you're getting high
Or after the waist of a good dancer

See your love life is shattered
How long will you keep telling Hannah
That you love her when you're lying
You smile when talking to her? no, you're trying

You don't have a heart, you've become a monster
And just last month, you became a fraudster
Your love for money is overwhelming
If I wasn't you, you'd jump at a chance to sell me

I'd blame it on rap, but I've seen other rappers
Boogey doesn't smoke, still has a dozen chapters
MI never had to steal, albeit forming gangsta
And when I show you these, I hear your horrid laughter

I stare at the mirror, I see your bulgy eyes
I see your goatee, and my rage would rise
I see your ugly face, it's you I want to slap
I bring out the dagger, but can't freaking stab

You used to be better than this
Until you knew the world exists
Worse after you saw your dad drag a spliff
Worst after George became deceased

You used to be a friend, not anymore
How could you call my life a bore?
I hate that you became my enemy!
I hate that you're me



From Jeffery

Jigs you're good, wow.

Well It is a tough choice.

Laveda- Her words are like pin, when it pricks... you feel it. She also tried with her rhymes, although her lines arrangements were not that superb. It is more real with a good imagery.

Jigs- You can't take it from him,He is good. His rhymes and rhythm is top notch. Although I did not feel that real effect like Laveda lines. If it was a rap I will give it to Jigs.

MVG- To Laveda.

whizqueen:
Oh boy laveda did someone offend you nii?
Please tell me you didn't picture anyone when writing o.

Wonderful piece I must say.


Jigsawkill your love for money is overwhelming lol. I love that line jawe. Nice one.

My vote goes to laveda, lines are so real and spiteful

More like it babe..

Thanks.

Voting Closed!

Laveda wins by first to five votes!

Congrats, Lady!

ShaqFu:
Jigsaw.Killah, hope you know 'Pen' is a metaphor for dick? LOL. In our world, that is. Lol.

our world? or your world?

JigsawKillah:
Voting Closed!

Laveda wins by first to five votes!

Congrats, Lady!

It was an honour battling with the great rhymer

Thanks.

Harddon!
Mynd44!
Sigmundfreud!

I summon ye!
Blood from lavenda.
Cuts from Jigs.
This be not from
Jay-Zee, Brenda nor Briggs...

Bloody hell and Blue blazes
Lavenda's death knell
Jigs' 7 types of crazy

I no fit shout
Judge 'em fer me
I'll find my way out.

JigsawKillah:



our world? or your world?

Our world Jigs, we're poets, remember?

Soon the two of them will be like

ShaqFu:
Our world Jigs, we're poets, remember?

the world itself is a metaphor
we're poets with different levels
I am yet to reach the stage you're in, so I don't know that a pen is a metaphor for dick

JigsawKillah:



the world itself is a metaphor
we're poets with different levels
I am yet to reach the stage you're in, so I don't know that a pen is a metaphor for dick

Hmm I see Jigs. Never knew poets now have levels.

Oahray, who sayeth thou?

ShaqFu:
Hmm I see Jigs. Never knew poets now have levels.

Oahray, who sayeth thou?

lol. Yes o. Me and some other persons dey the lowest rung.

Damn! Jigsaw is a killah! Your lines mehn... Your own enemy. Totally different perspective from the norm. See flows sha... I like!

Laveda, your imagery came on very strong, although the rhyming seemed somewhat forced. Nice on the whole.

Looks like voting is over

ShaqFu:
Hmm I see Jigs. Never knew poets now have levels.

O.ahray, who sayeth thou?

seems like both I and Ray share the same views on that!

Oahray:
lol. Yes o. Me and some other persons dey the lowest rung.

Damn! Jigsaw is a killah! Your lines mehn... Your own enemy. Totally different perspective from the norm. See flows sha... I like!

Laveda, your imagery came on very strong, although the rhyming seemed somewhat forced. Nice on the whole.

Looks like voting is over

Yeah its over.

Thanks Ray.

JigsawKillah:



seems like both I and Ray share the same views on that!

yes o. The both of you are top dawgs.

Laveda wins it nice one girl.