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merit12:
I will kiss you with the kisses of age,
Filled with French fantasies;
A lamina of Latin language,
With a cistern of English love,
And the saplings of truth.

This first lines means the writer is very happy with his new found love that's a hyperbole an exaggeration poetic device which is an overstatement.

Let me behold your blindness,
And protect your virginity,
Your sword sharpen will I,
And your laundry man, I will be,
With this, your scale will be balanced.

Still in his happy state ready to do anything for the fondness and love he has found still using hyperbole. ..blindness can't be hold neither virginity can be protected ..laundry man and scale will be balanced represents he is ready to any thing for his love ..

Your temple will I clean,
The “minister of truth,” my aim,
So that the saplings will grow,
And the sword of justice be safe.

Also this is hyperbole also using metaphor.cool

But now, my love is in shackles,
My truths are now lies,
My holiness is dizziness,
My tears are changeless,
And my hope is hopeless.

Now the mood of the writter has changed to sad state he seem hurt and betrayed.he is expressing how he felt now discovering using shackles lies dizziness change less hopeless this are sad words.truly hurt metaphor he uses very well when you using a word to compair other but not using but as is a metaphor for example my holiness is dizziness it compare holiness to dizziness but didn't us as or Like .that's metaphor well done ..

My love has become hatred,
For my love can now see,
Her blindfolding, removed it is,
And her sword, slighted,
Her robe sowed with blood,
And her scale useless!

Placing her as virgin from the previous lines now he discover her clothes is not white now it stain meaning he though she was clean and holy but she is not .....maybe she has been pretending too to be perfect now the writer hate her more


Her temple, a brothel;
And a plague for righteousness,
The death of the truth saplings:
The fortress of the corrupt.

He goes as far to describe her as a prostitute. After the discovering it really hurting when you think some one is perfect good and all that and later discover she was just pretending

I hope my explanation is correct

Well done love this poem it opens my heart looking at it literally

©Emaculate Ife 2016

Alanjeffy:
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End time love....
End time writer failing in end time love since 1760..

emaculate99:
It is about the Nigerian justice system

Psalm18:
You were more interested in words that ryhme and not the depth of emotions which poetry is meant to convey.

These are rhymes not poetry

Psalm18:
You were more interested in words that ryhme and not the depth of emotions which poetry is meant to convey.

These are rhymes not poetry

holyFRED:
If not for you,i for no know wetin i dey fine for this thread.

I'm not really a fan of poetry

Sparklesebony:
Pls, has the dictionary & literary definition of ryhme changed? Because, in the whole verses/stanzas of the poem, it's only two stanzas that have two lines each having end rhymes. If you see any other, pls enlighten the house.

merit12:
I will kiss you with the kisses of age,
Filled with French fantasies;
A lamina of Latin language,
With a cistern of English love,
And the saplings of truth.

This first lines means the writer is very happy with his new found love that's a hyperbole an exaggeration poetic device which is an overstatement.

Let me behold your blindness,
And protect your virginity,
Your sword sharpen will I,
And your laundry man, I will be,
With this, your scale will be balanced.

Still in his happy state ready to do anything for the fondness and love he has found still using hyperbole. ..blindness can't be hold neither virginity can be protected ..laundry man and scale will be balanced represents he is ready to any thing for his love ..

Your temple will I clean,
The “minister of truth,” my aim,
So that the saplings will grow,
And the sword of justice be safe.

Also this is hyperbole also using metaphor.cool

But now, my love is in shackles,
My truths are now lies,
My holiness is dizziness,
My tears are changeless,
And my hope is hopeless.

Now the mood of the writter has changed to sad state he seem hurt and betrayed.he is expressing how he felt now discovering using shackles lies dizziness change less hopeless this are sad words.truly hurt metaphor he uses very well when you using a word to compair other but not using but as is a metaphor for example my holiness is dizziness it compare holiness to dizziness but didn't us as or Like .that's metaphor well done ..

My love has become hatred,
For my love can now see,
Her blindfolding, removed it is,
And her sword, slighted,
Her robe sowed with blood,
And her scale useless!

Placing her as virgin from the previous lines now he discover her clothes is not white now it stain meaning he though she was clean and holy but she is not .....maybe she has been pretending too to be perfect now the writer hate her more


Her temple, a brothel;
And a plague for righteousness,
The death of the truth saplings:
The fortress of the corrupt.

He goes as far to describe her as a prostitute. After the discovering it really hurting when you think some one is perfect good and all that and later discover she was just pretending

I hope my explanation is correct

Well done love this poem it opens my heart looking at it literally

©Emaculate Ife 2016

maiahsaiah:
Wow...I loved all my literature teachers both male and female, can I love you too?

emaculate99:
BACKGROUND:

The justice system in the country is malled with a lot of regularities. Corruption has taken over the system and this has led to a lot miscarriages of justice. Corrupt leaders can easily escape its long hands because of the bias and corruption in the system.

merit12:
yes ma but am not homesexual sweetheart


Thanks

maiahsaiah:
(Whispers): not that kind of love, was talking bout agape love.

Psalm18:
Your issue is your lack of proper education about poetry and literature.
There are over six kinds of ryhme schemes

Start from there. Read up on them
And then go back and read his verses(which is a more accurate description of what the OP wrote)

Again this (what Op wrote) is not serious poetry but verses filled with ryhmes.

I believe by putting it on front page, the OP wanted constructive criticism. I'm most times at home in the politics section and have never visited the literature board so don't know what you folks do down there.
If you don't criticize each other work, when it calls for it, then you are really not ready to move into serious literature.
Maybe the OP just wanted to show his 'skills' as a versifier, if that's the case. I apologize.

emaculate99:
I will kiss you with the kisses of age,
(He will be her first)

Filled with French fantasies;
(passion of a French kiss)

A lamina of Latin language,
With a cistern of English love,
( Shakespeare comes to mind)

And the saplings of truth.
(New born truth, baby maybe?)

Let me behold your blindness,
( She is a newbie in the game of love)

And protect your virginity,
( more proof of how innocent and pure he see her)

Your sword sharpen will I,
(He promises to strengthen and teach her new survival skills)

And your laundry man, I will be,
( letting her know that he is at her service)

With this, your scale will be balanced.
( Hahaha he thinks he can perfect her ( delusional))

Your temple will I clean,
(her temple could mean her body)

The “minister of truth,” my aim,
( He is aiming to marry her)

So that the saplings will grow,
(and have children with her)

And the sword of justice be safe.
( what's this sword a metaphor for his Dick (LOLS)or her beauty and her chastity?)

But now, my love is in shackles,
( He's somehow lost control)

My truths are now lies,
(he see the real truth, or his truth has come to light).

My holiness is dizziness,
( the new truth is a different truth to the minster of truth)

My tears are changeless,

And my hope is hopeless.
(What has he found out that has tipped his scale and truth upside down?)

My love has become hatred,

( Thin line between love and hate)

For my love can now see,
( This is interesting, which love can he see? Has he found the Truth or was he caught telling a lie?)

Her blindfolding, removed it is,
(She See's him or he finally see her eyes (the key to her soul))

And her sword, slighted,
Her robe sowed with blood,
And her scale useless!

(This part is amazing! So, Has she turned from a soft kitten (metaphor) to a Lioness or maybe she killed his Sapling truths (abortion))

Her temple, a brothel;
And a plague for righteousness,
The death of the truth saplings:
The fortress of the corrupt.

The ending is very much a Greek tragedy. (Oedipus syndrome)

One of the best poems I've read in a long time well done
©Emaculate Ife 2016

emaculate99:
It is about the Nigerian justice system

Sparklesebony:
What you just displayed is called Pride. If I'm ignorant of the types of rhymes, I wouldn't ve made mention of 'End Rhyme'. Besides, that was my first time of commenting in the Litrature section.

Just in case you didn't notice in my first comment, I politely asked you to enlighten the house on the rhymes you saw in the poem. We are all learning here. It's not enough to criticise someone's literary work as a critic; you are expected to highlight your points with references.

Thank you.

Nubian113:
Oh not to me

emaculate99:
I love your interpretation. I doff my fila for your analysis. I'm looking up to you.

JigsawKillah:
Ha-ha This man can write though

Psalm18:
What pray tell me is the word 'lamina' doing in the first stanza ?

Lamina means- a thin sheet of plate, a flat surface
It also part of the anatomy of plants: the leaves or something. Not sure again.
How does using that word help pass anything to the reader?
Was it there just because it sounded and rhymes with what came before?

emaculate99:
Thank you for critiquing the poem. There are different types of meaning- Conceptual meaning, Collocative meaning, Thematic meaning, Reflected meaning, Affective meaning, Social meaning, and Connotative meaning- it is not necessary to interpret a word with its conceptual meaning, you can employ other types of meaning too.
Moreover, poets are users of words and tend to use other types of meanings when writing poems. If you are a poet, you should know this.
Furthermore, I'm eager to know where the rhymes you said I am interested in are by pointing them to me. With this, I will not make such mistake in future. Thanks for your critique.

Uniboy1:
lng tym Jigsawkillah