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My Amateur Writing Compilation / The Dying Poet / IT IS You...a Love Poem By Jerrywill Da Poet (2) (3) (4)
Amateur Poet,help Me Rate It by Tonia500(f): 8:32am On Feb 13, 2016 |
i submitted this poem for a contest,am i good.
oh my love,my pillar,my foundation.
thank God you came to me.
you Change my life and made me better
i think God thought of me when he
created you
oh my jewel,my Diamond
you are incompareable and irreplaceable
you are the star i see among stars
the moon that brightens my night
oh how i love to be loved by you
they say you are the one for me
but what do they know
i will always love you |
Re: Amateur Poet,help Me Rate It by Springz(f): 9:18am On Feb 13, 2016 |
Hope you laid it out in lines and stanzas? This one here looks jumbled up. |
Re: Amateur Poet,help Me Rate It by Tonia500(f): 1:45pm On Feb 13, 2016 |
Springz:yeah |
Re: Amateur Poet,help Me Rate It by joseph1832(m): 7:32am On Feb 14, 2016 |
Tonia500:Not bad. Learn to structure your poems, just like someone said. You can restructure it and post it again by modifying the post. Thanks |
Re: Amateur Poet,help Me Rate It by SEUJ(m): 5:34pm On Feb 17, 2016 |
And also learn use of words because that is what differentiates poetry from prose. God bless.. |
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