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| My First Poem, RANDOM EMOTIONS by princy80(op): 10:01am On Mar 27, 2017 |
RANDOM EMOTIONS Sitting on the rails of my verandah, All I keep thinking of is you, When do I get to see your face? How do I live without you? Your eyes shine so bright; they could illuminate a room Your beauty could keep eyes fixated for eternity Words simply can't explain how beautiful you are Even Lucifer might marvel at your beauty You are like sweet poison You keep pulling and pushing me out Maybe I should quit but I can't Cos it's hard to live without air What have you done to me? What have you turned me to? Why do I long after you? Why do I feel this way? I keep longing for you I keep dying for you Maybe I've lost my mind Or just maybe, this is love. RANDOM EMOTIONS |
| Re: My First Poem, RANDOM EMOTIONS by MayhorE(m): 10:08am On Mar 27, 2017 |
not bad, but as a poet you should carefully choose your words who n writing a poem and don't abbreviate, like in the last line of the third stanza. punctuations are necessary to know the flow of the poem, where to pause and where to read forward. thanks |
| Re: My First Poem, RANDOM EMOTIONS by princy80(op): 9:21pm On Mar 27, 2017 |
MayhorE:Thanks a bunch! Not a poet though, I just felt like writing one day. Thanks once more. |
| Re: My First Poem, RANDOM EMOTIONS by MayhorE(m): 9:27pm On Mar 27, 2017 |
princy80:wow, that's nice, writing is good |