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Congratulations Royver and Krystalxxx, you guys are amazing.

Analysis of Synergy O'frustration.

Analysis/ Theme:
The dominant themes are the Aftermath of a war, suffering, displacement and hopelessness.
A boy, Audu Okoro's family and home is destroyed in a battle, leaving him with no identity and home as he only remembers his family in nightmares that are constant. He doesn't know where he is from or where he is going. He has no helper and he is left between live and death, between his past and future, hence he says, "I am dangling on a fence"

Poetic devices: IMAGERY: The poem contains lines that are picturesque in the reader's mind. Examples: Line 2, line 7, line 13, line 22.

Diction: The poets' choice of words are simple, comprehensive words that triggers imagery.

Structure: The poem consists of five stanzas with five lines in each stanza. Stanza 1,3,5 are written with an alternate rhyming scheme.

Repetition: A line is repeated at the end of stanza 1 and stanza 5. It may also serve as a refrain.

Tone: The tone is that of frustration.
Mood: The poem evokes sadness and pity.

Figures of speech:
Pathos: Line 2 ( battered shoes worn on shivering shrivelled legs)

Onomatopoeia: words like battered, shrivelled, bangs, flutters explains itself with the sound.

Alliteration: Shoes worn on shivering shrivelled legs.

Personification: Weeping flames.

Simile: Like chicks, I craved for crumbs.

And many more figures of speech.

Contestants 8 (MIDASBLISS & PUREIVORY)

SYNERGY O'FRUSTRATION.

PUREIVORY.

I am lost!
Battered shoes worn on shivering shrivelled legs
My life has no cost.
Echoes of bangs weakens my legs
I am Audu Okoro.

MIDASBLISS

Spills of blood designated me.
My humble home in weeping flames.
Bones of my family,
Pleading to rest
Hearts of stone; Adolf like!

PUREIVORY

My family;
Which is it that it is?
My dark lids flutters open; not humbly
I assure, this nightmare is no thesis.
I wish to know me...

MIDASBLISS

I was derailed by thorns of the soil.
A mutated sojourner,
Like chicks, I craved for crumbs.
My agility, malformed by deviation.
I was an illusion, life and death I knew not where I stand.

PUREIVORY & MIDASBLISS

I am dangling on a fence,
Vultures swaying high.
My whole being sleeps dense.
I screeched like a bear for it is nigh.
I am Audu Okoro.

midasbliss:
haven't heard from my partner @pureIvory

sweedy maybe I should add you on some social network for effective communication or should we stick to the PM?

I think it's time for me to start commenting on great pieces like this one.

I'm more interested in their past than present.

Zinny all the way!

All my life I've seen a man whose face
holds a smirk.
I know not what I mean to the crook
Ma says the man is just too meek
To me he is one horrible punk
An everlasting puck


I choose 16.

OMA4U:
This is the maiden edition of Nairaland Collaborative Poetry Competition. To keep this part of literature section alive and to enhance team work among poets, we have come up with this challenge. We promise it's going to be interesting.

Suggestions are welcome.

PLS WE NEED PUBLICITY. POST THE LINK ON OTHER LITERARY THREADS.

To be updated....

Are you in?

Tag: samflexxy, pure Ivory AD30LA, deejaybond07
tag:

Wow! just seeing this now.

I'm totally in.