Nxt update coming up tomorrow...so tired

Adedayo516:
Ok... Nice lines... Needs to look more tougher though.. It's a crime story... Tough humour, tough lead roles, little bit of Wiredness, tension, and anticipation.... Remember, it's a crime story...


Big UPs though, don't think I would ever be able to do this (write stories) it's very draining.. Thumbs up..


If you can, read up MR THREE by WILLIAM BUTLER...

Noted. Tnx dear

D9ty7:
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Oga what's the blank comment na

Dopeyomi:





Sorry dear..


Whatever the condition maybe just stay calm.

Tnx yomi

This may be the worst update I hv ever had because I wrote it in bitterness..someone so special just annoyed.
I would hv updated more but I couldn't bear it any longer.
So please take the update as u see it..but that doesn't mean u should not correct or criticise, cuz that's what keeps me moving.
I love u all,
Gudnyt and sweet dreams.

NOTE: the just concluded update has been modified

Continuation...
he mumbled an unknown words within his breath as he stared at the rare mirror to take a
clear view of Dillish's body.
He could feel the animalistic nature in him arouse.
he smiled and choke his legs.
now fully focusing his attention
at the rare mirror.
The three dimensions of his humanity
dispersed.
His spirit and soul were on Dillish's unclad body,
While his body were partially focused
on the driving.
he smiled again and again,
a devilish smile.
That was the sign of a mission accomplished.
Dillish would serve as an object of celebration.
even Akboze who had been salivating at the sight of the two ripped oranges
and two ripped yellow pawpaw fruits
right beside him, knew it.
The three were one,
like the trinity.
They had earlier taken a blood pact.
Slashing their right wrist, and drinking each other's
Blood.
That had bind them together and resisted
any form of betrayal amongst them in all
their past executed missions.
All their past missions were accomplished together.
All their secrets embedded within them by a bloody pact.
One would not let the others out of a plan.
Their feelings were like a thick blood that flows from one ocean to the other.
Once one feels an urge,
like an electric current flowing through a conductor,
the others gets the same urge, and that was the case now.
Even the bed warfar were fought by the three.
they all anticipated for a s*x filled night.

***
Thud!
Dillish climbed down from an opening on the ceiling of one of the lavatories in the
main hall of Dallas paradise.
She fell and stood still on the floor,
despite the six inches high heeled shoes and
the tight hot mini gown she wore.
She went to the door of the lavatory room and
turned the door knob.
Unfortunately, it was locked.
she looked around to know if she could find a hammer or any metal,
but the lavatory room seemed bare.
she could only find a mop, a broom and some toiletries.
Of what use would those be to her?,
she hissed.
her melancholy temperament bulged out.
she felt sadness and anger at same time.
She looked around once more, no metal seemed to appear.
Her anger increased.
She looked at the opening through which she came in.
should she go back?,
Hell no!.
She had never given up on issues like this before, and this
would not be the time to give up,
not to think of the risk she took when she was climbing the roof self-handedly without a ladder.
What would she tell killer?
He must be disappointed to hear that she could not open a common door.
Her face hardened,
changing from yellow to pink and from
pink to red.
Anger soared her heart like a bitter lemon.
She would descend all her anger on the first person she would see if she finally opens
the lavatory door.
To be continued....

Typing...update coming soonest

*Barges into the thread*
D9ty7, thumbs up boss..I'm really learning from you..God bless NL.

Sorry for not updating tonight.
I'm so strong that I couldn't even attend church service today,
tried to put something down but nothing was coming forth because of the headache.
I can't update the little piece I hv here now
since it requires lengthy update.
but I promise to make it up to you,
I must update an enticing piece tomorrow.
I luv y'all

KingzPen:


You on whatzapp?

Ya but I lost the contact..will soon retrieve it tho.

Fembleez1:
Treasuregr8


"To them 'silent' and action was the best speaker"

If 'silent' isn't a character in this movie(story),I guess it should be 'silence',I.e

"To them 'silence' and action was the best speaker"


Another thing is the use of 'was' above,......

To me,I think since there is need for 'and'(silence 'and' action) should take 'were' but am not that sure,........For it involves two(2) things and assuming u are narrating(such as this,which mainly uses past tense),I think 'were' to me would make sense.

"To them,silence and action 'were' the best speaker"


Dear,why don't we look it at this end

"To them,silence and action 'is' or('are' if we assume silence and action are 2 different things acting together) the best speaker"

If we are not to get each other confused,I would say "To them,silence and action is the best speaker",.........since it is their mission,what they've and still believed in, and ur use of 'To them' shows they've always believed in actions not words and still they do believe in it,so I will just have u say "To them,silence and action is the best speaker"

Don't see me as a pharisee who often finds fault in others when I haven't attended to mine.


Am also learning through ur writings


Keep it coming dear,I must tell u this story don start to make brain

Luv u

Just checked my English rules of Concord and I learnt that the right verb is 'are' since the singular nouns 'silence' and 'action' are joined together with the conjunction 'and'. But the problem here is that I'm not sure if the verb should be in past tense since I'm already making use of the past tense of verbs in the story.
For the 'silence', I thought as much,
tho I would say it's a typographical error.
The gurus in the house should please
explain more abt the 1st paragraph.
I always appreciate it when I'm being corrected
do not feel reluctant to air your views..
tnx a lot, luv u too.

KingzPen:
Keep The Flag Flying Boss...

So Learning Some New Stuffs From You...

RESPECT!

KUDOS!!

FOLLOWING!!!

Who do I have here...'Da KIIINNGGZZ Pen'
Yuppie!
Welcome boss...

I love this thread..learning..

Onemansquad:
woo tnx 4 kipin 2 ur promise despite d dificulties u pased tru
waitin patiently 4 d next update #gud monin

Tnx dear

Next update coming up tomorrow..
Hv an awesome night pals..
Luv y'all

Note: I will modify the last update and continue the story. This is my new strategy of avoiding a typed update being erased, so bear with me

A black lexus LX 570 with a dark glass drove into dallas paradise,
Its sparkling silver coloured tires screaching on the tired floor.
It halted as it reached the gate security checkpoint.
"your identity card sir?"
One of the security men dressed in a dark green uniform,
with an AK 47 hung across his chest asked as he
bent a bit over the car.
Killer wind the glass and handed him a white plastic card with a green bolded inscription
"SPECIAL FORCE"
written horizontally at the top.
At the left side was a fifteen centemeter passport photograph with control no:
4285 written in red block underneath.
At the right side was written:
NAME: Ashley Nicolas
RANK: Rare admiral
Served with honor, a member of,
special force.
SERVICE FROM: 1987--1994
then a signature with "Authenticating official"
Underneath.
The security man glanced at the ID, then swiftly at the man in the car,
so as to make sure the face in the passport photograph was same as that in the car.
He was skeptical about the look and attire of the man.
"you're a corp?", he asked.

Killer feigned a smile and nodded.
The security man handed him a tag no 422,
then he threw the ID into a grey basket behind the gate entrance,
nodded, and with his hand, he signaled him
to move on.

"Bloody bast*rds"
Killer muttered as he forcefully drew off the plastic face mask he wore.
The plastic mask was a human face.
It was the face he used in the passport photograph on the ID.
even the signature was falsified.

"Dillish, you know the next move"
He asked rather rhetorically, with a deep voice reminding Dillish she was the next of action.
Dillish who sat beside Akboze at the back seat row kept silent as if she heard nothing.
That was what was expected of her.
Killer did not expect any reply either.
To them, silence and action were the best speaker.
They understood themselves in the world of silence than that of speech.
Perhaps, that was why silencing human beings were their occupation.

Dillish slowly undressed in the car,
Pulling off her black polo, trousers, jackboot e.t.c
She took a black mini-gown which hung on a hanger at the side of the captain seat,
which was at the back seat row.
Killer slowed down and made a T-turn,
The tip of his eyes took a glimpse of dillish's unclad body.
To be continued....

Typing...

Gosh! All I typed just erased now..I feel like crying right now

Just came back from work..typing....update landing in the next 1 hr, 25 min

Onemansquad:
d9ty7 nd fatalveli ah sight una so una dy here dy eat dis fud alone *diaris God oo*
Ma'am treasuregr8 wat a nice piece u gat here.. u ar good mehn kip dm cumin

Tnx dear