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Please intellectual Nairalanders, I really need a sincere criticism of this poem before it's published. It's actually based on real life experience. IT’S NEVER MY CHOICE Poverty is a curse, But in a way It’s a choice, so I was taught. Born in a hurt like house full of holes, So was my abode, though the choice was never mine. The express for a lizard, a rat and a shrew, Such serves the holes, in the walls of my abode A good neighbor they’d serve, If only they mind their business. The mistake of leaving food open is a grievous offence for the unwanted neighbors would devour without a consent. Sharing a space with a rodent can be condole, but allotting a portion of meal to it is unacceptable. The quiet night is troubled by the gnawing of the rat, With the tips of my toes partly gnawed, So I’d wake to discover at times. . The food was indeed covered, but my toes were barred. The stench of the pile dirty wears, such is no difference from that of a shrew or cockroach. The air that is never fresh in my abode but we have live to ignore such. The weather is never fair, only when it rained at night As the space for sleeps are sacrificed to bowls in the house. Each is positioned to a fixed point, To catch the droplet from the opened roof. It’s never my fault, so its sounds and seems But that life is a choice is an obvious truth A glance at the past and how distance it is now, Arose the feelings that I stoop to conquer. U. N. Edwin. |
I was from one, it was while thinking about my Genesis that this poem emanated. Kindly follow the link to make a comment as it would be published soon. https://www.nairaland.com/2860531/it-never-choice IT’S NEVER MY CHOICE Poverty is a curse, But in a way It’s a choice, so I was taught. Born in a hurt like house full of holes, So was my abode, though the choice was never mine. The express for a lizard, a rat and a shrew, Such serves the holes, in the walls of my abode A good neighbor they’d serve, If only they mind their business. The mistake of leaving food open is a grievous offence for the unwanted neighbors would devour without a consent. Sharing a space with a rodent can be condole, but allotting a portion of meal to it is unacceptable. The quiet night is troubled by the gnawing of the rat, With the tips of my toes partly gnawed, So I’d wake to discover at times . The food was indeed covered, but my toes were barred. The stench of the pile dirty wears, such is no difference from that of a shrew or cockroach. The air that is never fresh in my abode but we have live to ignore such. The weather is never fair, only when it rained at night As the space for sleeps are sacrificed to bowls in the house. Each is positioned to a fixed point, To catch the droplet from the opened roof. It’s never my fault, so its sounds and seems But that life is a choice is an obvious truth A glance at the past and how distance it is now, Arose the feelings that I stoop to conquer. U. N. Edwin. |
Please intellectual Nairalanders, I really need a sincere criticism of this poem before it's published. It's actually based on real life experience. IT’S NEVER MY CHOICE Poverty is a curse, But in a way It’s a choice, so I was taught. Born in a hurt like house full of holes, So was my abode, though the choice was never mine. The express for a lizard, a rat and a shrew, Such serves the holes, in the walls of my abode A good neighbor they’d serve, If only they mind their business. The mistake of leaving food open is a grievous offence for the unwanted neighbors would devour without a consent. Sharing a space with a rodent can be condole, but allotting a portion of meal to it is unacceptable. The quiet night is troubled by the gnawing of the rat, With the tips of my toes partly gnawed, So I’d wake to discover at times . The food was indeed covered, but my toes were barred. The stench of the pile dirty wears, such is no difference from that of a shrew or cockroach. The air that is never fresh in my abode but we have live to ignore such. The weather is never fair, only when it rained at night As the space for sleeps are sacrificed to bowls in the house. Each is positioned to a fixed point, To catch the droplet from the opened roof. It’s never my fault, so its sounds and seems But that life is a choice is an obvious truth A glance at the past and how distance it is now, Arose the feelings that I stoop to conquer. U. N. Edwin. |
I was to attend a friend's wedding coming up morrow here in Aba... I got to the town by 4pm but couldn't get to my friends house until about 7.30 due to the dilapidated nature of roads in Aba. I was so angry with everything; the government, the bus driver and his conductor, and most of all my friend who couldn't find any other place to live but this kind of town. However, my mood was brightened when my attention was called to this poster of APC church organizing a program... Please see pics below.
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I was to attend a friend's wedding coming up morrow here in Aba... I got to the town by 4pm but couldn't get to my friends house until about 7.30 due to the dilapidated nature of roads in Aba. I was so angry with everything; the government, the bus driver and his conductor, and most of all my friend who couldn't find any other place to live but this kind of town. However, my mood was brightened when my attention was called to this poster of APC church organizing a program... Please see pics below.
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