Hi guys I'm a new poster in this section. I dig literature something fierce. Love prose, just fell in love with poetry too. Enjoy drama as well. I just love the breath-taking wonders of the world of words.

The following is my a poem I crafted some time ago. It's my baby, so please be nice when you criticize. But I'd like to entertain and be corrected wherever necessary.

Have fun!

The Bonds of Freedom

A sweet kiss
Burns into the soul.
In his arms
She gently trembles.
Where is home
If it's not Him?
Can she breathe
Without his breath?

What a thing
That she can't sleep
If his arms
Cradle her not.
When did bonds
Become such freedom?
Or an arrow
make a heart beat so?

Is this love?
A wolf seeks a leash?
Deep in her eyes
His own being stirs.
He hungers,
But in truth for what?
Is it not
For marvellous bonds?

His heart calls
Her heart rejoices.
For her he yearns,
In him she's free.
Bound to him
She spreads her wings.
One with her
The wolf runs free.

NWOKE!!!!

You try. I will still come back to comment,I'm blushing

Ishilove: NWOKE!!!!

You try. I will still come back to comment,I'm blushing

Now, I'm blushing

Blush not, it is well

A work of art tells a lot about its creator, and what it told me was Subdued Passion. That's the vibe I got when I read your creation. I have a feeling you are a very passionate and sensitive and creative person,capable of so much more if only you will just let go.

So simple,so subdued...sorta like you're testing the waters...

Good attempt,very romantic,but there's room for improvement.

Unleash the power; its in you

@ op - The talented Mr Ripley...nice

Are 2 writers Ishi n Ihedinobi permitted to fall in luv re the numerous blushings, hmmm

Gloriagee: @ op - The talented Mr Ripley...nice

Are 2 writers Ishi n Ihedinobi permitted to fall in luv re the numerous blushings, hmmm

Do not inspire me to dedicate a thread to the two sexy writers

Cuddlemii:

Do not inspire me to dedicate a thread to the two sexy writers

The chemistry's so thick...u can literally cut with a knife!!! Ah ah

*huff* I don't know what you two are going on about

@Gloriagee and Cuddlemii, .......and the matchmakers roll their tapes and scissors out....... Oh God! What is not fun these days? lol Before we know it ni we'll be married off to each other without knowing our parents' names hehehehe

Easy o.......our aunty dem

hmph!

Ihedinobi: @Gloriagee and Cuddlemii, .......and the matchmakers roll their tapes and scissors out....... Oh God! What is not fun these days? lol Before we know it ni we'll be married off to each other without knowing our parents' names hehehehe

Easy o.......our aunty dem

Don't worry loverboy2man, I am planning a getaway haven for both of you. Its called, "kinky Breakfast".

BoboYekini: hmph!

uh oh! its the scorned ex, gotta run!

Cuddlemii:

uh oh! its the scorned ex, gotta run!

lol

Cuddlemii:

Don't worry loverboy2man, I am planning a getaway haven for both of you. Its called, "kinky Breakfast".

See me o abeg, my teeth and nails no de o

Lwkmd!!!

NL is one wacky place

Ihedinobi,what goes around comes around. It is now my turn to be mercilessly teased

BoboYekini: hmph!

Olowo ori mi, they are lying on my head o !!!!

Ihedinobi:

See me o abeg, my teeth and nails no de o

Dem no fit dey na. Dem dey busy else where. Sha sofly make u no wound. Ishilove is a stunner

Ishilove: Lwkmd!!!

NL is one wacky place

Ihedinobi,what goes around comes around. It is now my turn to be mercilessly teased

Ishilove:
Olowo ori mi, they are lying on my head o !!!!

rotfl......yo somethin else jọọ

Cuddlemii:

Dem no fit dey na. Dem dey busy else where. Sha sofly make u no wound. Ishilove is a stunner

you no need to tell me o jare...d tin confirm. But you don see how many nlers wey de go buy pump-action because say una don de fix wedding date for us abi <laugh no fit kill me abeg>

Cuddlemii:

Dem no fit dey na. Dem dey busy else where. Sha sofly make u no wound. Ishilove is a stunner

Thanks,sis, i blusheth

Ihedinobi:

rotfl......yo somethin else jọọ



you no need to tell me o jare...d tin confirm. But you don see how many nlers wey de go buy pump-action because say una don de fix wedding date for us abi <laugh no fit kill me abeg>

Wow, wonders upon wonders. Why wasn't i invited for my own wedding??

Ishilove:
Wow, wonders upon wonders. Why wasn't i invited for my own wedding??

Ask dem o lol

Ihedinobi:

Ask dem o lol

Lol!

Ishilove: Blush not, it is well

A work of art tells a lot about its creator, and what it told me was Subdued Passion. That's the vibe I got when I read your creation. I have a feeling you are a very passionate and sensitive and creative person,capable of so much more if only you will just let go.

So simple,so subdued...sorta like you're testing the waters...

Good attempt,very romantic,but there's room for improvement.

Unleash the power; its in you

Thanks for the first bolded. It's a flattering mix

I'm sure there's room for improvement, per the second bolded. Just hoped you could show me. Perhaps a brief explanation of the poem will help.

The general feeling is that exclusive relationships are wont to become suffocating. The guy wonders what action he's missing, the girl wonders what better choice she'd lost in taking the guy etc etc. I described what true Love does. How, while it binds two people together, it actually sets them truly free. In a single and simple statement, the piece would be saying, "Love is the bonds of freedom." Love sets you free to be everything you can be with the one that you love. There are no limits. Love is infinity. Breaking out of the bonds of love would mean coming under terrible limitation and nothing coming to real fruition. In Nigerian francais, every go be touch and go, notin go make sense.

So, in the light of that, give me your thoughts on how to bring the meanings more powerfully through. I don't like glaringly obvious though

Ihedinobi:

Thanks for the first bolded. It's a flattering mix

I'm sure there's room for improvement, per the second bolded. Just hoped you could show me. Perhaps a brief explanation of the poem will help.

The general feeling is that exclusive relationships are wont to become suffocating. The guy wonders what action he's missing, the girl wonders what better choice she'd lost in taking the guy etc etc. I described what true Love does. How, while it binds two people together, it actually sets them truly free. In a single and simple statement, the piece would be saying, "Love is the bonds of freedom." Love sets you free to be everything you can be with the one that you love. There are no limits. Love is infinity. Breaking out of the bonds of love would mean coming under terrible limitation and nothing coming to real fruition. In Nigerian francais, every go be touch and go, notin go make sense.

So, in the light of that, give me your thoughts on how to bring the meanings more powerfully through. I don't like glaringly obvious though

Wow, all these in a few simple lines Thats why i stick to prose becos poetry is just too restricitive

i just had the impression that you were playing safe, is all

Ishilove:
Olowo ori mi, they are lying on my head o !!!!

ok, i truss u

Ishilove:
Wow, all these in a few simple lines Thats why i stick to prose becos poetry is just too restricitive

i just had the impression that you were playing safe, is all

Hehehehehehehe..........I used to hate poetry o. But somehow it suits me to a T.

lol