₦airaland Forum

Welcome, Guest: Join Nairaland / LOGIN! / Trending / Recent / New
Stats: 2,251,040 members, 4,932,301 topics. Date: Sunday, 19 May 2019 at 05:34 PM

Pharaoh’s Soldiers (poem) - Literature - Nairaland

Nairaland Forum / Entertainment / Literature / Pharaoh’s Soldiers (poem) (1302 Views)

Thorns In My Boot....a Soldiers Travail / AVAST!( A Poem For Our Brave Young Frontline Soldiers)- Overhypedsteve. / Is The Use Of Child Soldiers, A Good Phenomenon Or Not - Nigerian Online Debate (2) (3) (4)

(1) (Reply) (Go Down)

Pharaoh’s Soldiers (poem) by Ojukwursg(m): 6:57pm On Jun 16, 2008
Pharaoh’s Soldiers

From underground bunker emerged them
gritty pawns, ravenous females they are,
with nails-fitted clubs sprouting from their heads.
Marshaled by stern scouts; skirting here, there.
Screaming inaudible instructions,
soldiers with sharp pincers tipped with chemicals,
(enough to make Saddam go green, and Bush red)
led them on.

In centuries they marched, six legged beasts,
swiftly unto conquest. Clawing, gnawing, tearing,
unleashing their deadly arsenals.
I winced in my sleep, and jumped off my bed.
Intensely, I fought to shake-off scores,
gallant they are, who clung on, creating more bumps.
Pains shot up my spine, sleep escaped my eyes.
I looked down in awe,
numerous, honey-colored mass,
on white parade ground, that was my bed,
in frenzy, and unending jubilation.
Monomorium pharaonis -
Pharaoh’s Ants - have claimed another victory.

Please let me know what you think of the poem. Critique appreciated. smiley
Re: Pharaoh’s Soldiers (poem) by Nobody: 1:04am On Jun 17, 2008
Too much grammar lol
a good poet should write in words, easy to understand. I'm not saying I can't understand it, but the types of good poems are the ones you can read without having to check the dictionary on every line
dnt try to use big words too much, sometimes they might make the poem pointless and not understandable. smiley

but nice poem . . .just try to slow down on the grammar. . . smiley
Re: Pharaoh’s Soldiers (poem) by Nobody: 2:28am On Jun 17, 2008
No offense intended wink
Re: Pharaoh’s Soldiers (poem) by Ojukwursg(m): 10:20am On Jun 17, 2008
Thanks 4Her. Thats very much appreciated. Funny I didn't even realise I was using big words. Thanks again. wink wink wink
Re: Pharaoh’s Soldiers (poem) by kay9(m): 4:38pm On Oct 04, 2008
@Ojukwu: I just saw this poem. It is good - even if it was wrongly posted. And I don't think the words were too "balloony", if you know what I mean. Poems are meant to be that way. Anyone that thinks otherwise should read Soyinka and Wordsworth's.

(1) (Reply)

Katlego Africa - Buy Nigerian Books And Magazines Online / Abuja Literary Society Book Jam Features A Famous Trio / The Art Of A Hustler

(Go Up)

Sections: politics (1) business autos (1) jobs (1) career education (1) romance computers phones travel sports fashion health
religion celebs tv-movies music-radio literature webmasters programming techmarket

Links: (0) (1) (2) (3) (4) (5) (6) (7) (8) (9)

Nairaland - Copyright © 2005 - 2019 Oluwaseun Osewa. All rights reserved. See How To Advertise. 41
Disclaimer: Every Nairaland member is solely responsible for anything that he/she posts or uploads on Nairaland.