D9ty7: Thank God Jumizie is back. Dancing skelewu to while away time befor u update.
Events that took place while you are away.
1. The preacher's son two made the frontpage.
2. Loss of dignity by clemzy made front page.
3. I walked into the rock's thread and saw Winnie sitting on Uduak's laps. I will still punish the both of them tho.
All am saying is that you are welcome back where you belong.

Lol u no well, no worry n aur story nxt for FP

buoye1: I been dey Ffl silently na wen suspense wan kiLl me na him make me comment nw...Jumizie abeg he don do.....ROCK555 don teach u dis bad tin

I no teach her ooo, no worry she go update.

@Jumizie abeg come na, abi u wan come slack for us, abeg try type 5k words jare

Jumizie wetin remain again...atleast ur hubby don plead on our behalf.!

Dis ur short update na wa oh

*following*

buoye1: Jumizie wetin remain again...atleast ur hubby don plead on our behalf.!

hubby keh.
Na E-hubby o

adegwurulez: *following*

you are welcome boss.

The rock5555:

I no teach her ooo, no worry she go update.

@Jumizie abeg come na, abi u wan come slack for us, abeg try type 5k words jare

habaa! M just recorvering ni.

tmamuda: Dis ur short update na wa oh

hmmmm

D9ty7: It iz update we need.

lolz

Jumizie13: Its (It was) break time. The students of A.M.C were scattered all over the school compound. Various activites were going on.
Sandra, popularly called Sandie, and her other two notorious friends, Patricia and Margaret, were walking majestically to a tree so as to sit under its shady branches (with the intention of sitting under its shady branches) . As the junior students saw them, they took to their heels.
"See these ('these' is a pronoun that signifies nearness, therefore, the fact that the boys had taken to their heels make the pronoun selection inappropriate. 'those', granted, but 'these', wrong. You can rather use 'the' ) bastards," Maggie said, laughing as they settled at the foot of the tree.
"Where are the girls carrying our snacks and drinks?" asked Pactricia, but she loved being called Pattie.
"Those ones? They dare not run away with it. Have u guys forgotten?" Sandie asked, in more of a statement. "That we are The Great Trio." They all said in unision (unison), laughing. "Besides, their bags are with me," Maggie said in assurance.
Just then, they sighted (saw) the two girls walking towards them, each of them (student) carrying a tray of snacks and three bottles of soft drinks. On getting to where the Trio sat, they knelt down to give their packages to them.
"Seniors, our b-a-gs, " one of the juniors asked. Fear and panic written all over their faces.
"Go to the back of the poultry farm, your bag is waiting for you there," Maggie said.
"Ha, poultry farm!" the other girl exclaimed.
Twack! Twack!! ('Twack' is never the sound of a slap. It is rather the sound of a gunshot, with silencer attached) Pattie slapped her. "are you crazy, who are you to querry our authority?
"Get lost!!!" She screamed.
"We are sorry ma," they both chorused.
"My friends, use your ears for what it is (they are) meant for, she said GO!!!" Maggie said. The juniors sprang up as if a bee had just stung them and they ran to the poultry.
While the event unfolded, Eniola, a (an) s.s.s. (S.S.S) 2 girl stood a distance to (from) them and watched. She was filled with fury and hatred, but what could she do[b]?[/b] Nothing. she[b] is[/b] (was) just a mere s.s.s 2 girl. Even the school authority could do nothing to The Trio.
"Cross my heart, I'll make sure I show you guys that "the opperessor of today might (may) be the opperessed of tomorrow", she said aloud, but not too loud for The Trio to hear her.

Rough review.

Space out your paragraphs.

Develop your sentence constructions, punctuations, grammar and spellings.

In my opinion, the story seems rather predictable. Introduce some edge-of-the-seat suspense.

The more you write, the better you become. Never stop writing.

Indulge me by writing absent-errors.

Weldone.

Corrected sir. Thanks so much.

Larry-Sun:
Rough review.

Space out your paragraphs.

Develop your sentence constructions, punctuations, grammar and spellings.

In my opinion, the story seems rather predictable. Introduce some edge-of-the-seat suspense.

The more you write, the better you become. Never stop writing.

Indulge me by writing absent-errors.

Weldone.

Guy you're good. You should be working as an editor in a newspaper company. Jummy, feed me more!!!

Good evening all
M sorry, i wunt be able to update 2nyt cos of an uncalled for problem. I promise u guys 3 updates tomorrow.
Shallom

Jumizie13: Good evening all
M sorry, i wunt be able to update 2nyt cos of an uncalled for problem. I promise u guys 3 updates tomorrow.
Shallom

okay o...

*Jumps into the train*,never knew Jumizie is writing a story............ Hope I'm not late sha?well,better late than never............btw welldone Larry-sun,doing a good job here............following seriously............the Lord is your strength@op.

still following oh dearie

Still waiting tonight.....

I'm sorry 4 d delay

Jumizie13: I'm sorry 4 d delay

apology accepted............update nko?

Jumizie13: I'm sorry 4 d delay

d accept b say lets see n read d update

CHAPTER 3.
Dedicated to 360prince. Wishing him a speedy recorvery.
********************
8 years later.
Eniola sat at the back of Safua's house, thinking about what she witnessed eight years ago. She found it difficult to forget it. Each time she remember, she do make a vow to bring down the killer of her parents.
"Eniola, Eniiiii!" Safua called from inside.
"Yes mummy" Eniola replied with a shaky voice.
"You this girl, when will you stop all these rubish? You refused to eat since daybreak." She moved closer to her and use the hem of her wrapper to wipe of Eniola's tears.
Eniola, when the time comes, you will avenge the death of your parents.

M very busy dis days due to my skul registration stuff. I hope u guys would bear with me for the main time.

Ofcourse jummy,tk ur tym

Jumizie13: M very busy dis days due to my skul registration stuff. I hope u guys would bear with me for the main time.

No P,

to say the fact, this is not encouraging at all. why not relax urself and finish up d story sonewhere instead of giving this kind of update. this is nt suppose to be called update, it should be upd!

C mon it is nt interestin wit dis kind of update. Since u r biz, jst finished ur stuff n gve da best.

Jumizie13: Dedicated to Prof. Larry Sun.
Chapter 2
11 years ago........
Oladimeji ( We both know the story behind the name) and his wife, Josephine, with their little girl of 6 years old, were having a nice time in their sitting room.

"Darling, pls get me a chilled glass of water," Oladimeji said.

"No no, mummy stay. Daddy, let me get it for you."

"Dats (That's) my baby girl," Dimeji said while he started singing 4 her (Poor grammatical construction) . Ola, Ola, Olami. (Unnecessary)

The little girl was always happy whenever any of her parents sing with her name (Songs sung by her parents in praises of her name always filled her with glee) .

She replied her dad,
Daddy daddy daddy mi. Josephine was laughing heartly at their childish play. Hmmmmmm, what a happy family. Ola went to the kitchen to get the water (Puerile. Please rewrite) .

Suddenly, a masked intruder barged into the room. The couple was afraid, ( ; ) fear and shock was (scratch this out) written all over their faces because, the intruder was pointing two guns at them.

Rough review.

Illogical dialogues. Learn to use the quotation marks. And again, space out your paragraphs. Wishing you a quick recovery.

Thanks for the dedication.

Larry-Sun:


Rough review.

Illogical dialogues. Learn to use the quotation marks. And again, space out your paragraphs. Wishing you a quick recovery.

Thanks for the dedication.

Larry sun always on point. Jummy i'm enjoying the story, please come and update. You promised us three updates but i only saw one.