The world is a stage, I am told.
You come, play ur part and leave.
Sometimes u r applauded
sometimes u r booed.
I wonder what part I have to play.
Will I be booed or applauded?
Will I affect lives?
Or will I just be an extra?
Just passing through,
Sometimes I wonder,
Who I really am.
My emotions run deep like the ocean waves,
Exploding against a rock.
It threatens to explode inside me.
Some day, I hope, I'll find out who I trully am.

Wooo! Nice! Me Likey!!!

Reminds me of the song Take a Bow by Madonna, especially this part

All the world is a stage [world is a stage]
And everyone has their part [has their part]
But how was I to know which way the story'd go

I wish you well in your discovery of self.

Nice concept, but the presentation's kinda ordinary

nice

I know who I am, I am CBase

cbase:

I know who I am, I am CBase

Very funny.

@ vini: The poem could use a little "literarizing". On the whole, though, it's a good one.

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@ vini: The poem could use a little "literarizing". On the whole, though, it's a good one.
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maybe u can do d literarizing. i won't call it plagiarism

@ vini: Sure about that? Alright, gimme a couple of days.

alrite couple of days given

@ kay9
sure. u gat ur couple of days. maybe I can learn from u

@ cbase
get of my case

ok, nothing do you, Wey the lid of the case may I comot

u r sitting on it not in it. capiche

cbase:

I know who I am, I am CBase

cbase:

ok, nothing do you, Wey the lid of the case may I comot

cbase:

alrite couple of days given

dude you are meant to be serious and make sense in this forum it is not jokes forum for crying out loud

@topic
the poem is nice and kinda of reminds me of skakespeare but if there was a little rhyme i think it would have made it better
thumbs up

@vini

Good speech,

A little file,

A little polish,

And violà!

A Masterpiece!

princesa:

dude you are meant to be serious and make sense in this forum it is not jokes forum for crying out loud

and who said I wasn't serious, I just made ma Comment to the Poem, whts wrong with that?

@vini
alrite am off the case, so I'll standby and just watch, wish you luck as u discover who u really are.

@ princesa & firestar
tks u guys. i think i'll add a little bit of polish and don't worry about
cbase he's just clowning

nice piece,
hope u dont mind if i critique it, tho:

i must admit it sounds kinda simple, basic,
like rhapsody from a naive innocent mind,
utterances from someone who is yet to even take the first step towards self-discovery.

a liitle polish tho and it becomes a masterpiece
ok, lets see wot kay9 will make of it

@ spicy007

i think dat's d idea behind d poem. sm1 trying 2 taking dat first step towards discovery.
If I change that, then it wouldn't b "who am i?" it will be something like
"I am"

Hi Vini, sorry it took so long. My desk job had me occupied. Anyway, here it is (the remixed version, that is ):

The world is just a stage
Enter at your scene - read your lines -
And exit at your life's end.
Mayhap you'll be applauded;
Mayhap, unapplauded.
Pray, tell, thou that seeth tomorrow
What part I shall have to play.


Shall I, at the curtain's fall
Get the old gladiator's thumbs-up
Or the deadly boo?
Will Time's indelible sands
Remember my name, or shall I fall
An extra in the Iliad:
An unknown, un-mourned Trojan soldier?


Who am I, I wonder
Who am I?
My emotions run deep, so deep
Like the waves of the Atlantic. . .

Exploding against a rock.
It threatens to explode inside me.
Some day, I hope, I'll find out who I trully am.

I left the last three lines untouched - thought you might wanna do those ones yourself.

@ spicy007: I hope I didn't botch the assingment.

thanks kay9. let's c what i can come up with