Hello nairalanders. This is the first time I am putting this story down which began as an idea. I also wish that no aspect of the story be copied for any purpose. I will be posting every three(3) days because it will be written in several episode. Its a fictional story with a large sci-fi concept but I hope you all like it. The names will be African and the culture African. Pls enjoy, I am open to constructive criticism.
EPISODE 1: Into the dark world.
Akira Ki-Wa was racing into the Mother-Hub, struggling hard to breathe in her heavy costume. Racing across the decorated halls, she could see the look on her father's face and it was quite difficult to read. She had just passed her 20th star and was now "worthy" to join in the 100th gathering of the keepers of the 7 realms, only that 4 keepers were attending out of 7. She never fancied a meeting were irrelevant matters about organizing troops or exchange of IMMADI were discussed for days.
Akira was a herald. The daughter of Lord Musa Ki-Wa, keeper of the Huntu Realm. Raised by her father who is now worn out by years of endless campaign trying to prevent the entire realm from slipping into anarchy, her only joy was riding across the green lands of the Huntu realm into the golden sun. But those days are now gone. She is now a lady. Her duty was to partake in fierce diplomacy and someday be the Lord and Keeper of the Huntu realm. She had been a loner,father's only bond with dear Akira was telling her stories of 'THE FALL' and how the Huntus had gained control of the largest IMMADI port.
"Akira! Hurry! No more time for foolish behaviors!" Yelled Lord Musa who was flanked by guards and councilors.
"Sorry my Lord" Akira replied.
Lord Musa never joked with time but honest. He had not always been like that though. Once a carefree Writer and madly in love with Kambilli, his entire world was changed when the Nomads attacked the Huntu realm and it was his ability to raise an army out of mere air-riders and farmers to defend the realm and won the heart of the councilors. Years later, he was elected keeper. But it all came at a price.
Aboard the mother-hub which was set to carry over 20 councilors and the Keeper for the 100th gathering of the keepers, Akira never was comfortable. She remembered the dreams she had 3 days before of the sun falling on TERRA and the entire planet disappearing out of the stars.
"Father, I do not believe this year's gathering should be attended" said Akira to her father who was sitting by her side.
"Hush little girl! Our very existence and future depends on this gathering. The IMMADI is becoming unstable and the Lords no longer abide by the sacred acts of our fathers"replied Musa
"But father only 4 Lord are going to be there, the Nomads continue their campaign to penetrate the Lands and the Bantus have left the gathering..."
"Those are what will be addressed little one, the Nomads are outcast, the Bantus claim Lord Savage...."
"Lord Savage cannot be trusted father, you said so yourself and yet we will be guest under his house and hold the gathering with him as Keeper of the Lords? His sight alone...."
"Someday you too will keep a realm and then know how to trust your enemy. Lord Savage is a Krain, because he looks different from us and his people are different from us means nothing. He has provided a thousand ships to rebuild the IMMADI ports and soon the gathering will regain it's honor. Terra will become united again my child".
"Father...."
"No more child. Pay attention to little details in the gathering. No mare air-riding. You will someday represent the realm and protect the millions at home. Akira we are safe. Lord Savage knows about the sacred act of ensuring your guest are safe with you. Be good Akira!", commanded Lord Musa who suddenly left his daughter's presence to join the councilors. The mother-hub had reached it's destination in light speed. They were now in the Hinterlands. The hinterlands was ruled by Lord Savage, the councilors were no more and now the hinterlands now manufacturers of battleships and all sorts of terrifying weapons. Lord Savage was a Krain. Covered with scaly skin and bald all through. They needed carbon to breathe but the laws of Terra and life on Terra forbids it. Carbon could kill all life on Terra.
As the ship landed and Lord Musa alongside his terrified daughter and councilors step foot on ground, a long dark figure emerge from the darkness ahead, they could see 3 terrifying figures accompanying him in the dark, the hinterlands was a dark realm, the only light appearing came from the mother-hub. Akira felt in her heart that truly something more lied within the darkness that was the Hinterlands.
"Welcome Lord Ki-Wa, the darkness welcomes you..."while he bow his head with a sinister smile on his face. As the mother ship is guided to a parking space all that was left around Akira was a dark world and a figure which gave no hope......
To be continued.....
Pls people, I will continue tomorrow, it is really short and I apologize but I will post more tomorrow. Good night

The walk to their quarters was long and terrifying. Akira could barely see. She could only see the faint light on the pathway and she could barely see above her knee and she couldn't see the face of those around her. Apart from the darkness, the place had a irritating smell. She hated the smell. It was that of dead bodies and she felt she was the only one that could sense it. The place was poorly kept and she could hear from afar people screaming for either fear or death. The Krains were known for torturing prisoners and their cruelty, their culture was truly alien to life on Terra. Only five decade ago the Krains came down from the stars and inhabited the dark lands of Terrra. They had grew in number and the other Lords had grown suspicious of them. Rumors had circulated that the Krains would capture and eat the flesh off Terrans that walked into the dark worlds and grind their bones as powders for the women. But standing in front of Akira was a Krain who was clothed with darkness and all she could make up was it's curvy and long shadow falling on the ground.
They reached a dead end and all of a sudden the wall opened and Lord Ki-Wa and his entourage are ushered into the dark room.
''Here Lord Ki-Wa. Do enjoy your little time on our dark world, the gathering will start when the sun sets tonight",said the frail as it dissapears into the darkness.
''My Lord we have never had a gathering held after the sunsets, I do not trust Lord Savage'', said Councillor Ega, one who always insists on traditions.
"The dark world smells of death. Darkness everywhere" another Councillor replied.
"All thesame, more reason for us to be done here on time",replied Lord Ki-Wa."Akira, we have no much time left, get ready"
"Yes father", replied Akira who was already stricken with fear to speak much.
In no time they were done, the sun was setting above the dark land. Another Krain appears, this time alone and asks for the Huntu delegates to come with him. They follow, like lamb to the slaughter. They walked in fear. Darkness still covered the pathway, but from afar, they could see light coming from a hall. They couldn't wait to get there but the Krain moved so slow Akira felt like pushing him. Finally they got there but the Krain stayed in the dark and pointed the room to them.
"The gathering begins soon Lord Ki-Wa'' said the Krain as he walks away. They are taken by two guards into the hall to a place lavishly decorated where the councillors sits. On the Lord Keeper's chair is Lord Savage, the Krain Lord, flanked by Krain guards and fear burning from him. The other two Lords was Lord Amin, Keeper of the Tutsin realm and his delegates and Lord Gad Al-Affi, keeper of the Golden realm. They all can't trust the Krain but what choice do they have, the Bantus had refused to host the gathering unless the Krain leaves Terra. Lord Savage after letting reality sink into the other Lords, the Krain dancers comes out and performs a dance that was more terrifying than it was entertaining. Lord Savages takes the stage and suddenly, darkness falls over the hall....

Its a short story but that's the first chapter. I will try and submit the next by tuesday but your comments are really needed. Not just view but comment. I always wanted to write and this is my first. I had this story for over 2 years now and I made it sci-fi because I wanted to do something really different. Like I said, I am open to constructive criticism.

1. Learn to use spacing. When you jam your paragraphs together like this it is difficult to read and people will quickly get tired. Space your work.

2. Stop apologising too much

3. Your use of tenses. You alternate between present and past e.g the krain walks before me but he walked so slowly that I wanted to push him.
It should be 'the krain walks before me but he walks so slowly that I want to push him.
OR
'the krain walked before me but he walked so slowly that I wanted to push him.

Use only one tense for your entire story for it to flow properly.

I love sci-fi

5minsmadness:
1. Learn to use spacing. When you jam your paragraphs together like this it is difficult to read and people will quickly get tired. Space your work.

2. Stop apologising too much

3. Your use of tenses. You alternate between present and past e.g the krain walks before me but he walked so slowly that I wanted to push him.
It should be 'the krain walks before me but he walks so slowly that I want to push him.
OR
'the krain walked before me but he walked so slowly that I wanted to push him.

Use only one tense for your entire story for it to flow properly.

I love sci-fi

THANKS