Good Morning ppl I am kinda new here and I would need your help to improve tremendously... I know I have poor spacing method ...so pls pardon and teach me. My Poem are just drawn from Life experience and Nature...My greatest inspiration is Mother Nature. I draw my strength from its wisdom. ..
I want to officially welcome everyone to this and believe it will have impact in your Lives in Jesus' Name! ...Amen.

pls pardon my improper space method

LOVE DILEMMA

Looking up to the hill, I can see a hierarchy of
molested agonizing souls gnashing their
reminiscent of what mother Love has brought
upon them.

I threaded the same path and got to the top of
the depth of the walls of my Profound future
with a crown of pleasure. She encouraged me.

She gave me a lamp of Faith.
A wooden sword of determination and a shield of hope.

But how could you be this cruel? you never told
me the Enemies had advanced. You never
woke me from my slumber.

Now the war is over, all that you gave me has been taken away.
The only gift the enemies had left for
me is the breastplate of pain. The helmet of
frustration and the spear of anguish.

I just feel like drawing our battle lines and show you
how much I literally resent you.
But when the warm air of your breath of regrets flourish my nerves I only hear a voice screaming from
beneath the tunnel of my terrifying soul
"Forgive!!".

With a beam of smile I protrude my arm into your warm embrace Listening to your undefined Proof of Wisdom.

inspiration of this poem is from my
nairaland ladies. They too fine Jare ....The likes of misshoree,
irerony,queen jennima, misterrious and many
more..Actually I wrote this poem to a sweet
friend Scholarstica I hope to see her someday
in this forum ...its more like a Love letter than
poem BT its a poem ..... pls pardon my
improper space method..Let's Read together

SCHOLARSTICA

I have had alot of dreams about Angel but
couldn't phantom the reason they resent our
planet earth.

Well my 19th Life has brought a
miscarriage to my thoughts.

Look!! Its an angel. The once I have always dreamt of has always been males. Beautiful and wonderful
creatures.

But My reality tends to be more real
than my dreams. The most amazing part is
She's a female. Hmm my ought most
conclusion is whatever miss led this angel has
brought fortune to me.

In a voluptuous credited figure she flash her emerald
emanating perfume of beauty.
I couldn't really tell but it was real.The earth kinda spinned anticlockwisely. Time thicked faster like
rapture time. My seal mouth found its place in
ajar.
But her charming smile gave the earth's
its motion back in the right direction. Her
invincible diastema kept my eye in total
function.
With a deep courage I walked up to
the Angel and asked what could be the name?
In a fanciful automelodious tone she
whispered Scholarstica. At that point my heart
melted. Oh Scholarstica was Angel from reality
of my abode

Bros Laykorn abeg come preview this poem ooo .....na you I dey wait oo

DREAMS ARE ILLUSIONS
Dreams!! Oh my dreams!!
How much gratitude can I show you.
My hopes and faith has being compelled by
your sweet world.
The life I could never live in reality, I have
lived and died so many times in your world.
Been trapped by your fanciful gifts.
But my troubled soul keep wondering,
why torture me this way?
Haven't you derailed my aspirations enough?
Why cover thyself with the veil of Promises?
Why drown my reality?
But now I have seen how much false you are,
I have picked up my self from the ashes,
dusted my colourful linens,
Put on my shoes of determination.
Taking the cart of my tomorrow, and
Am going to ride straight to my destiny.
Don't bother convincing me to stay cus
Dreams are illusions
Cc: Texanomaly, Everestdebliu, Laykorn,
Donifez, Leki10, Cisse7575

Oga laykorn....come and review na ....or are my poems hidden?....

Livingwalker:
DREAMS ARE ILLUSIONS
Dreams Oh my dreams
How much gratitude can I show you
My hopes and faith has being compelled by
your sweet world.
The life I could never live in reality, I have
lived and died so many times in your world.
Been trapped by your fanciful gifts
But my troubled soul keep wondering,
why torture me this way?
Haven't you derailed my aspirations enough?
Why cover thyself with the veil of Promises?
Why drawn my reality?
But now I have seen how much false you are,
I have picked up my self from the ashes,
dusted my colourful linens,
Put on my shoes of determination.
Taking the cart of my tomorrow, and
Am going to ride straight to my destiny.
Don't borther convincing me to stay cus
Dreams are illusions
Cc: Texanomaly, Everestdebliu, Laykorn,
Donifez, Leki10, Cisse7575

You are a good writer,i love the way you painted Dream in a good way and also stripped it off all its colours.However i suggest in your first line there should be an interjection sign [!] to show Emotion,and also the line you wrote 'drawn my reality' it should be drown, and the last but not the least...you should crosscheck your spelling..you wrote borther instead of bother.

Nice one brother.
Just as my boss said, remember to check your work for typos sir.

Then sir, do you have a reason why the whole poem is in one long stanza?

I believe it would have been easier to read if you had decided to divide it into stanzas.
More ink to your pen sir!
Ayamlaykorn

Thanks my Bosses ...I will do as told in the spelling typos hmm as for the lengthy stanzas hmm i think I will try and shorten it but its the way inspirations comes though. All the same thanks Bosses