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When The One U Love Does Not… by thimbook2(m): 3:43pm On Oct 23, 2006
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Prologue
How does life feel when The One you're loving is out of reach
No! not out of sight but simply out of reach!
Like the goldfish would not marry the gold-finch
not because of their unwillingness to go hand in hand in love
but a difference of worlds pulling them farther and farther apart;

Verse I

How does the heart fare when the one you’re needing doesn’t know
maybe couldn’t know, see, feel or worse still couldn’t care?
much like walking by the restaurant’s  glassed fronts and staring in through the glass
seeing sparkling glasses clinking and rings slipping coyly into fingers
watching destinies defined, futures refined in moments of loving gestures
and you turn only to stare at your boots with a hopeful sigh…
yes, a hope that one day will surely come soon
when the light, surely, will turn your way in full brightness
and love’s sweet dews will refresh your spirit and warm your heart.

But how does it sound when the one you’re loving couldn’t hear you anyway,
maybe you’re that pauper loving the princess, or the underling 'crushed' on her liege or u're caught in one
of such one thousand and one other narrowed straits;
Or are you that Coca Cola Guy who surmised that “guys like me don’t get girls like her”
why? ‘Cos she’s chic, she’s cute, she’s just the smartest brightest coolest gyrl in the world!”
and more? She’s fun but what is not funny is that she’s not looking ur way now…

So how does it feel when the gist right now’s not about how to get her heart, no, not yet
but just to linger on in the halfway span of how it feels
when she dances right past and your heart gets caught in your throat
or he flashes his ’32 gleaming ones’ and the world stops for a second, time freezing into eternity
and to say ‘hi’ you sputter and choke out “he-he-hello” like a jump-started ride
eyes popping when you wipe your sweaty palms again and again to be sure she’s right there before you
and when she turns and smiles, “ha!” the sleepy butterflies in your tummy start playing ball
so how does it feel then when the only thing she does say is “hi and bye?!”
and you’re not bold or time’s not ripe enough to spew forth the words but only to stare and only watch her fly by, ?

Verse II Coming Soon
To be Continued…


NB: Did I hear some one say "VerseII!!!!!", yep! Like writing some of this stuffs atimes, got loads of them, and they never fail to gimme a good laff later when i bump into them in some corner of my harddrive or the other,
happened i had a crush like that back in high school and couldn't quite break it into the real thing, do try sending in some of ur own "gushers" too plus a critique of this one, form style, diction, lang etc,

ciao
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Re: When The One U Love Does Not… by priscac(f): 1:28am On Oct 30, 2006
i really love that its very touching, and thank you for replying my poem
Re: When The One U Love Does Not… by chistiana(f): 12:06pm On Nov 17, 2006
I love this too not only touching,

but my spirit go along with this.
Re: When The One U Love Does Not… by amirize(m): 5:12pm On Nov 17, 2006
so perfect!!![color=#990000][/color] smiley
Re: When The One U Love Does Not… by saintsam(m): 11:29am On Nov 18, 2006
Am dieing to see the verse 11 of this poem.I love it.
Re: When The One U Love Does Not… by Adexatom: 9:56am On Nov 19, 2006
Wow, what a nice poem. Men what is the motive behinde this poem keep it up and looking forward for verse 2
Re: When The One U Love Does Not… by uzygirl(f): 6:42pm On Nov 24, 2006
Touching and sad.
Good piece
Re: When The One U Love Does Not… by franc1982(m): 6:50pm On Nov 27, 2006
It's a good creative piece,
but not perfect like someone said,
It's still a draft of ur work, i can tell from the style.
It's really fun to read,
Real fun I mean.
Hope u slapt urself for,
IMOA
stumble on some more plz,
I really can wait to read Verse II. grin
Re: When The One U Love Does Not… by marygold(f): 4:22pm On Jan 07, 2007
i love ur peom.pls can i hav it in my box .marygold_28@yahoo.com
Re: When The One U Love Does Not… by ibrahiem(m): 2:32pm On Sep 12, 2007
u did very ok in ur xpression.kip it up cus it's inspiring

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