Oh! They are feeling so dejected
For they have been to ridicule subjected
People treat them like lepers
And but God,they lack helpers

They were only victims of circumstance
But people don't about this think for once
They had suffered enough of stigmatisation
And had endured a lot of discrimination

People are reluctant to offer tham aids
All because they have HIV/AIDS
Why should we kill them with our actions?
When anyone can be in their conditions

The stigmatisation let us stop today
to make these poor people feel gay.

(c) A. Adeola Toriola
2006.

This is also good,
itz good when we feel concern for the less priviledged

Nice effort.

Hmmmm, It's a beautoful poem. Reminds me of how I like it, end rhyme!
But it sounds quite unlike you, KT, I guess you know what I am talking about.

Anyway, this is a very brilliant poem and it's really very uncommon to find Nigerians engage in social responsibility works such as this. It reminds me of Niyi osundare's "they too are the earth"
Good work!

dammyboy:

Hmmmm, It's a beautiful poem. Reminds me of how I like it, end rhyme!
But it sounds quite unlike you, KT, I guess you know what I am talking about.

@dammyboy,What exactly are you talking about? I don't understand.

Basic:

Dammyboy:
But it sounds quite unlike you, KT, I guess you know what I am talking about.

@dammyboy,What exactly are you talking about? I don't understand.

Basic, don't mind him jare. He's talking to somebody else there.

Nice seeing some efforts for those who have HIV/AIDS, by the way. But what do you wish to express with the last sentence?

Basic: The stigmatisation let us stop today
to make these poor people feel gay.

Also, since otherwise you have a very clear aabb rhyming scheme: "circumstance" and "once" don't correspond in the same way as the other lines do since the final vowels are not the same (/ə/ or /æ/ in circumstance and /ʌ/ in once). It might not be a problem but I think you should be aware of it.


I prefer poems with less rhyme,
Surely, now you wonder why,
Maybe it is because their mind is free,
To wander wherever they see delight,
Taking tiny steps with their little feet,
They outrun you no matter how fast you might be.

Basic, I meant no harm whatsoever. I thought the poem was written by one of my friends and I had posted the comment before I realised my mistake. It was really a great write and like i said in my forst comment, I love it this way! Keep writing!

*Somegirl, pls note this!

Dammyboy, note what?

And I thought you meant KT's praising words had been quite unlike him since compliments out of his mouth are rare. Maybe, this means he really loves Basic's poem.

Btw, Dammyboy, did I ever have the pleasure to meet you in real life?

ur poem is good.most people castigate those living with HIV/AIDS which is unfair.Well I wont blame those Castigating them because the way the diseases was introduced to us and hyped really scared us.Any how it is hard time will start encouraging these patients and preached abstinence,the surest well to fight this epidermic.

well somegirl, I don't think you know me, ! But I know you. At least I have spotted you once or twice in the company of your German friend and some of my friends, Did you just ask "where?" I will leave that out to you to find out!

Thanks all for your replies.Dammyboy,be careful next time.You accused me wrongly of plagiarising. Be careful!

@Dammyboy: I see. Your friend actually told me later that he thinks we never met. But I seem to know your roommate! Please greet him from me o!

Btw, your signature has a broken link. I think you need to add a <y> at the end: http://allpoetry.com/poets/princedammy