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In Sinners,Jackie Collins told the story of the life of Hollywood actors and actresses who had all they ever wanted;
money, success and loving fans.

She described the lifestyle of some famous characters :
Sunday Simmons, Charlie bricks, and Herbert Lincoln Jefferson.

SUNDAY SIMMIONS.

Tall and beautiful,Sunday was born in Rome to a South American father and a French mother.

She aimed to make out a career in acting and at sixteen,set out for Hollywood ready to conquer the world through acting.

She discovered on getting to Hollywood that keeping your innocence and being moral was a difficult task to play,as it was a place filled with intimidation, lust and deceit.

CHARLIE BRICKS

Was already a successful actor,and a known face in Hollywood but was divorced.

He set forth to find true love in Hollywood,but all the women he came across and tried to woo were not ready for love.
They just wanted one thing ; to get a script in film show.

HERBERT LINCOLN JEFFERSON.

Was a chauffeur who drove Hollywood female celebrities and fantasized sleeping with them.

Not having the courage to approach them for relationships,he resorted to sending them all kinds of gory and erotic letters.

He became hooked in the fantasy of erotic letter writings and was later caught in the act.

Behind all the glittery premiere, dazzling movie set , fabulous parties and love nest in 5 star hotels, the rich and famous lay the jungle for lust, perversity, greed, and ambition in a place where survival is everything and innocence is a role no one plays for long.

Sinners is a book you wouldn't put down until you are done with it.