I have questions;
Unanswered questions
What is life?
What is love?
What awaits after life?
Destiny they say
Lies in the palms of men
I look into mine for a‎nswers
But all I see is a web of‎ patterns
Intricately embedded in great d‎iscord!
I look into the heavens for answers
But all I see is a sea of blue
Flowing into the depthless trenches of infinity
Life is a helical maze
Woven to beguile mankind
The birds mock us in flat pitch

Comments are welcome.

Too general, lack of specific exciting imagery

Ereolamide:
Too general, lack of specific exciting imagery

"Exciting" is subjective...

chronos:


"Exciting" is subjective...

To simulate

Ereolamide:

To simulate

poems dont always have to be written in high language or be too descriptive to stimulate, sometimes it's about the thematic structure et al

chronos:
poems dont always have to be written in high language or be too descriptive to stimulate, sometimes it's about the thematic structure et al

You don't get my point do you?

I ne'er said you should write in flowery language with vocabularies, what I intend is that you use specific imagery to pass your message, most of what's up there are cliché, the images are old and worn out.

I don't mean to abase your piece, criticism if welcomed helps to improve literary works. Peace

Ereolamide:

You don't get my point do you?

I ne'er said you should write in flowery language with vocabularies, what I intend is that you use specific imagery to pass your message, most of what's up there are cliché, the images are old and worn out.

I don't mean to abase your piece, criticism if welcomed helps to improve literary works. Peace

Shalom