Help me appreciate my poem. People have told me they like it. But I want more intelligent appraisal.

MAYBE SOMEDAY, THE VEHICLE OF SUCCESS WILL TRAVEL OUR ROAD

Maybe someday the vehicle of success will travel our road
And our fathers will finally be happy for bearing a son
The extended families, those who wish us well, will rejoice too
And the entire Village will echoe, "Anyi Nwere Mmadu".

Maybe someday the vehicle of success will travel our road
And mates will stop to ask, " what is he doing now"?
And those who boarded the vehicle earlier than us
Will rejoice to see us arrive or frown that we afforded the fare
That is depending on their heart.

Maybe someday the vehicle of success will travel our road
And our pictures will stop looking odd from the rest
We too will start to take and change pictures frequently 'cause we'll have clothes to change
And they will start to like and comment. Yes. They would want to tap our blessing.

Maybe someday the vehicle of success will travel our road
Then we will tell you why it took us so long
We will tell you then because if we try to tell you now, you might not have time for us.
And then too, we would afford to buy you drink while you hear our story.

Maybe someday the vehicle of success will travel our road
See these lines not as lamentations of the frustrated
See them rather as the expressions of the hopeful
But if the vehicle of success never travels our own road, we will draw equanimity in amor fati.

#AWOL.

It's wonderful
Can I show it to my cousin kid for his nursery School poem recitation?