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Old Pond (a Haiku) by Aiyamrex(m): 9:04pm On May 06, 2020 |
Silent old pond sad fish leaped in silence again! #Folorunsho Iyanuoluwa 1 Like |
Re: Old Pond (a Haiku) by Aiyamrex(m): 8:18am On May 07, 2020 |
Aiyamrex: looking deeply at this poem, u can have many interpretation as u read, but majorly splitted into trio-parts THE POND old and silent unti the fish stop it's peace in entrance. THE FISH finds joy in its new habitat leaping out for fun but ndt its end when human intervene so sad THE HUMAN finds his meal a delicacy when he caught the fish with his hook. . . the poem is open to any kind of constructive critique |
Re: Old Pond (a Haiku) by Karanka: 6:26pm On May 07, 2020 |
Hello,isn't Haiku supposed to be a poem of 7 syllables in total?
Having 5 syllables, 7 syllables and another 5 syllables for each of the lines. |
Re: Old Pond (a Haiku) by Karanka: 6:26pm On May 07, 2020 |
Hello,isn't Haiku supposed to be a poem of 7 syllables in total?
Having 5 syllables, 7 syllables and another 5 syllables for each of the lines. |
Re: Old Pond (a Haiku) by Aiyamrex(m): 7:33pm On May 07, 2020 |
Well sir, according to the haiku. . . Syllables is different from the calculation of 7-5-7 moras. . . in my lessons. . . Moras ain't syllables and at least if you can help in any way. . . Let me in please |
Re: Old Pond (a Haiku) by Karanka: 9:26pm On May 08, 2020 |
Aiyamrex:You're right. Morae are slightly different from syllables. Your poem however,is neither strictly syllabic nor does it follow Mora as I hoped it would since you indicated it to be a haiku. |
Re: Old Pond (a Haiku) by Aiyamrex(m): 10:12pm On May 08, 2020 |
Yes sir, i dnt think i get the haiku concept clear, can you make a constructive example using that poem sir. . . i really need to improve that is why we need someone like you to come review our junks and give it a good look |
Re: Old Pond (a Haiku) by ElScopio: 10:01am On Dec 12, 2020 |
Aiyamrex: ..a silent old pond many sad fish leaped into ...silence once again. Aiyamarex I hope this helps. 1 Like |
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