Silent old pond
sad fish leaped in
silence again!


#Folorunsho Iyanuoluwa

Aiyamrex:
Silent old pond
old fish leaped out
silence again!

Silent old pond
up up the hook
what a nice meal!

looking deeply at this poem, u can have many interpretation as u read, but majorly splitted into trio-parts

THE POND
old and silent unti the fish stop it's peace in entrance.

THE FISH
finds joy in its new habitat leaping out for fun but ndt its end when human intervene
so sad

THE HUMAN
finds his meal a delicacy when he caught the fish with his hook. . .

the poem is open to any kind of constructive critique

Hello,isn't Haiku supposed to be a poem of 7 syllables in total? Having 5 syllables, 7 syllables and another 5 syllables for each of the lines.

Hello,isn't Haiku supposed to be a poem of 7 syllables in total? Having 5 syllables, 7 syllables and another 5 syllables for each of the lines.

Well sir, according to the haiku. . . Syllables is different from the calculation of 7-5-7 moras. . .
in my lessons. . . Moras ain't syllables and at least if you can help in any way. . . Let me in please

Aiyamrex:
Well sir, according to the haiku. . . Syllables is different from the calculation of 7-5-7 moras. . .
in my lessons. . . Moras ain't syllables and at least if you can help in any way. . . Let me in please

You're right. Morae are slightly different from syllables. Your poem however,is neither strictly syllabic nor does it follow Mora as I hoped it would since you indicated it to be a haiku.

Yes sir, i dnt think i get the haiku concept clear, can you make a constructive example using that poem sir. . .
i really need to improve that is why we need someone like you to come review our junks and give it a good look

Aiyamrex:
Yes sir, i dnt think i get the haiku concept clear, can you make a constructive example using that poem sir. . .
i really need to improve that is why we need someone like you to come review our junks and give it a good look

Aiyamarex I hope this helps.