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Wrote You A Song by denex: 10:48am On Oct 15, 2007
I hope you're happy now
hope you're laughing your arse off
'cos all is fair game in love and war
just wanted to let you know you won


Couldn't sleep last night till the break o' dawn
'twas your face all over my wall
still can't figure out where I did you wrong
so I got myself up 'n' I wrote you a song


Tried singing you a ballad of love
for all the beautiful things you've done
but a lie would rhyme sore in the pitch of my voice
so I pulled pen and paper and wrote you this song


Coulda talked about those funny times,
the warmth we shared every cold rainy night
yet there's nothing more vivid than the pain in my heart
had to get my real on, 'n' I penned you this sorry one


Thought I could try to put it in a rap
with an upbeat vibe 'n' a hiphop kinda slang
but a rhythm too fast wouldn't tell a story this sad
and the story of you 'n' I wouldn't fit in freestyle


Couldn't call you on the phone no more
and a letter would take a bit too long
maybe even months to get to your door
I decided it was best I wrote you a song.
Re: Wrote You A Song by jkpretty(f): 4:40pm On Oct 16, 2007
Wow, denex, i hope this is not true, seriously

i love that, quite a piece!
Re: Wrote You A Song by jkpretty(f): 4:46pm On Oct 16, 2007
UMOHFIA

If there's one thing i'm in this world ever sure of

Its that u once cared

Maybe i never hearkened to the wind when it stopped its whistles

But i know it once whistled

And it called my name.
Re: Wrote You A Song by denex: 6:17pm On Oct 26, 2007
Hmmm, Cute.
Re: Wrote You A Song by jkpretty(f): 1:33pm On Nov 01, 2007
denex:

Hmmm, Cute.

Thanx denex

But why is this section so dry, please lets come up with something interesting!
I hate the way we are not cultivating the art of creativity or not helping it cry
Re: Wrote You A Song by iice(f): 2:56pm On Nov 16, 2007
Cool as always
Re: Wrote You A Song by hansibone(m): 6:29pm On Nov 30, 2007
Denex that was nice,

Its been long i came around, so whats good? Got something new.


[center]SEYI[/center]
Like a Bird, you were meant to fly,
Slashing with freedom, through the big blue sky,
A sight of you, leave men high,
An amulet so precious to come by,

I looked, and i saw a girl called SEYI,
A kiss from her, tastes better than Cherries,
Leaving my being, uplifted and merry,
Hmmm, indeed sweeter then berries,

The number 8 is barely meant as a figure,
But indeed 8 is your figure,
Your body intoxicates like hard liquor,
God, im going LOKO,

Love encroaches my soul so quick,
Oh my God i'm i losing my wit,
My body is growing so weak,
Seyi, please dont leave me so quick,
Re: Wrote You A Song by hansibone(m): 6:54pm On Nov 30, 2007
Here is another one guys, just wrote it, when i read HOLA2ng version,

Hope you would like it,

[center]IF YOU NEVER SEE ME AGAIN[/center]

If you never see me again,
Pain fades, but our love remains,
Something i did gain,
Expressed together as we claim,

If you never see me again,
Sit back and recall does times,
Painful indeed, because we had no time,
So sour, it tastes like lime,

If you never see me again,
Remember i loved you and made you my first,
With loving heart, i took of my vest,
And together we shared our best,

If you never see me again,
Deep inside i would remember,
Like the last rain that falls in September,
YOU, my body sees as a MEMBER,
Re: Wrote You A Song by Nobody: 6:57pm On Dec 24, 2007
Denex that was really beautiful. I love it. kiss
Re: Wrote You A Song by Nobody: 7:06pm On Dec 24, 2007
hansibone, I love yours too kiss kiss
Re: Wrote You A Song by dnex(m): 1:35pm On Jul 16, 2008
Hey, it's denex. It's been a long time. Actually, seun kicked me out of Nairaland for telling the truth.
Re: Wrote You A Song by panny: 6:48pm On Jul 17, 2008
DENEX U RE COOL WITH DA STUFF.
JUS NEW ON SITE
JUS POSTED ONCE
GETTIN READY TO TOP
Re: Wrote You A Song by kay9(m): 2:04pm On Jul 24, 2008
@first poster: You write good, but your "poem" was more like a song - an RnB song in fact. Have you tried song-writing?

I think the reason the section isn't exactly thriving is that almost all posts here are love poems. We need to do some more work, create better poems. Not that love poems are bad, but I'm sure you'd all agreed that that horse has almost been whipped to death.
Re: Wrote You A Song by hansibone(m): 12:19pm On Jul 31, 2008
kay9:

@first poster: You write good, but your "poem" was more like a song - an RnB song in fact. Have you tried song-writing?

I think the reason the section isn't exactly thriving is that almost all posts here are love poems. We need to do some more work, create better poems. Not that love poems are bad, but I'm sure you'd all agreed that that horse has almost been whipped to death.

the root to mans existence is LOVE,

so love is everythin, evil, bad, tradegy,pain,sufferin, it all boils down to LOVE, LOVE, LOVEEEEEEEEEE grin jeeeeeeez im in LOVE grin
Re: Wrote You A Song by dnex(m): 6:39am On Sep 05, 2008
Hi Kay9, you're right I do write songs. Just haven't recorded any yet. I've sold some, but perhaps this yeah I'll lace something tight in the studio. You're absolutely right about overflagellating the horse in terms of posting too many poems on love. I've written one one on racism, another on my grandmother and a couple others. I just can't remember if I've posted them all on nairaland. it's nice to see y'all. iice, it's been ages.
Re: Wrote You A Song by nex(m): 8:03pm On Aug 15, 2009
@hansibone

your poems are really good and you seem to just write at will.


@kay9

poetry is moved by passion. There's nothing more passionate than love. There are other stuff we could write about. I write about other stuff besides love. I try, it just all about what I feel.
Re: Wrote You A Song by hansibone(m): 11:06am On Sep 03, 2010
@nex

thanks bro,

i wrote something new after a very long time, go check em out, this work and lagos life is murdering me,

lol
Re: Wrote You A Song by cbase: 7:52pm On Sep 06, 2010
Really Nice, Nex,
Ur a nice writer
Re: Wrote You A Song by nex(m): 4:33pm On Oct 12, 2010
@cbase

Thanks aplenty.

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