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Wrote You A Song by denex: 10:48am On Oct 15, 2007 |
I hope you're happy now hope you're laughing your arse off 'cos all is fair game in love and war just wanted to let you know you won Couldn't sleep last night till the break o' dawn 'twas your face all over my wall still can't figure out where I did you wrong so I got myself up 'n' I wrote you a song Tried singing you a ballad of love for all the beautiful things you've done but a lie would rhyme sore in the pitch of my voice so I pulled pen and paper and wrote you this song Coulda talked about those funny times, the warmth we shared every cold rainy night yet there's nothing more vivid than the pain in my heart had to get my real on, 'n' I penned you this sorry one Thought I could try to put it in a rap with an upbeat vibe 'n' a hiphop kinda slang but a rhythm too fast wouldn't tell a story this sad and the story of you 'n' I wouldn't fit in freestyle Couldn't call you on the phone no more and a letter would take a bit too long maybe even months to get to your door I decided it was best I wrote you a song. |
Re: Wrote You A Song by jkpretty(f): 4:40pm On Oct 16, 2007 |
Wow, denex, i hope this is not true, seriously i love that, quite a piece! |
Re: Wrote You A Song by jkpretty(f): 4:46pm On Oct 16, 2007 |
UMOHFIA If there's one thing i'm in this world ever sure of Its that u once cared Maybe i never hearkened to the wind when it stopped its whistles But i know it once whistled And it called my name. |
Re: Wrote You A Song by denex: 6:17pm On Oct 26, 2007 |
Hmmm, Cute. |
Re: Wrote You A Song by jkpretty(f): 1:33pm On Nov 01, 2007 |
denex: Thanx denex But why is this section so dry, please lets come up with something interesting! I hate the way we are not cultivating the art of creativity or not helping it |
Re: Wrote You A Song by iice(f): 2:56pm On Nov 16, 2007 |
Cool as always |
Re: Wrote You A Song by hansibone(m): 6:29pm On Nov 30, 2007 |
Denex that was nice, Its been long i came around, so whats good? Got something new. [center]SEYI[/center] Like a Bird, you were meant to fly, Slashing with freedom, through the big blue sky, A sight of you, leave men high, An amulet so precious to come by, I looked, and i saw a girl called SEYI, A kiss from her, tastes better than Cherries, Leaving my being, uplifted and merry, Hmmm, indeed sweeter then berries, The number 8 is barely meant as a figure, But indeed 8 is your figure, Your body intoxicates like hard liquor, God, im going LOKO, Love encroaches my soul so quick, Oh my God i'm i losing my wit, My body is growing so weak, Seyi, please dont leave me so quick, |
Re: Wrote You A Song by hansibone(m): 6:54pm On Nov 30, 2007 |
Here is another one guys, just wrote it, when i read HOLA2ng version, Hope you would like it, [center]IF YOU NEVER SEE ME AGAIN[/center] If you never see me again, Pain fades, but our love remains, Something i did gain, Expressed together as we claim, If you never see me again, Sit back and recall does times, Painful indeed, because we had no time, So sour, it tastes like lime, If you never see me again, Remember i loved you and made you my first, With loving heart, i took of my vest, And together we shared our best, If you never see me again, Deep inside i would remember, Like the last rain that falls in September, YOU, my body sees as a MEMBER, |
Re: Wrote You A Song by Nobody: 6:57pm On Dec 24, 2007 |
Denex that was really beautiful. I love it. |
Re: Wrote You A Song by Nobody: 7:06pm On Dec 24, 2007 |
hansibone, I love yours too |
Re: Wrote You A Song by dnex(m): 1:35pm On Jul 16, 2008 |
Hey, it's denex. It's been a long time. Actually, seun kicked me out of Nairaland for telling the truth. |
Re: Wrote You A Song by panny: 6:48pm On Jul 17, 2008 |
DENEX U RE COOL WITH DA STUFF. JUS NEW ON SITE JUS POSTED ONCE GETTIN READY TO TOP |
Re: Wrote You A Song by kay9(m): 2:04pm On Jul 24, 2008 |
@first poster: You write good, but your "poem" was more like a song - an RnB song in fact. Have you tried song-writing? I think the reason the section isn't exactly thriving is that almost all posts here are love poems. We need to do some more work, create better poems. Not that love poems are bad, but I'm sure you'd all agreed that that horse has almost been whipped to death. |
Re: Wrote You A Song by hansibone(m): 12:19pm On Jul 31, 2008 |
kay9: the root to mans existence is LOVE, so love is everythin, evil, bad, tradegy,pain,sufferin, it all boils down to LOVE, LOVE, LOVEEEEEEEEEE jeeeeeeez im in LOVE |
Re: Wrote You A Song by dnex(m): 6:39am On Sep 05, 2008 |
Hi Kay9, you're right I do write songs. Just haven't recorded any yet. I've sold some, but perhaps this yeah I'll lace something tight in the studio. You're absolutely right about overflagellating the horse in terms of posting too many poems on love. I've written one one on racism, another on my grandmother and a couple others. I just can't remember if I've posted them all on nairaland. it's nice to see y'all. iice, it's been ages. |
Re: Wrote You A Song by nex(m): 8:03pm On Aug 15, 2009 |
@hansibone your poems are really good and you seem to just write at will. @kay9 poetry is moved by passion. There's nothing more passionate than love. There are other stuff we could write about. I write about other stuff besides love. I try, it just all about what I feel. |
Re: Wrote You A Song by hansibone(m): 11:06am On Sep 03, 2010 |
@nex thanks bro, i wrote something new after a very long time, go check em out, this work and lagos life is murdering me, lol |
Re: Wrote You A Song by cbase: 7:52pm On Sep 06, 2010 |
Really Nice, Nex, Ur a nice writer |
Re: Wrote You A Song by nex(m): 4:33pm On Oct 12, 2010 |
@cbase Thanks aplenty. |
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