I can see this thread coming to live. OMA4U, you've done a great job... #Thumbs up# oops, I salivate as I anticipate interesting poems

hujaj:
"Fill what's empty, empty what's full and scratch where it inched".

interesting but I have no idea what it means, pls explain.

noble4d:


what type of poem is this? it appears like Horatian ode...

That is the product, when ballad quatrain, is mixed with heroic and memoriam quatrains.

That was a typographical error, its all in quatrains.

THE TREACHERY OF TIME.
(by Odukoya A. Adeola)
When the sight becomes blurry
When the light becomes history
When darkness engulf the sphere
When the most vivid becomes unclear

Normalcy changes its hides
Nocturnal become prevailing
Even the lousy man hides
Gently under the shield of his ceiling

Darkness at the peak of dominance
Birds enmute their songy vocal chords
In fear of the foggy occupance
A fear strong enough to chase the mighty sun

But despair not the tyranny of darkness
For its reign depends solely on time
Whose loyalty’s modified by clime
It’s perfidy cleanse the air of hoplessness

For once the traitor strikes
The dark tyrant becomes forgotten
Replaced by the sovereign light
The sphere ridden of burden

But how long can this reign hold
For the traitor has not been ridden
How long can this light reign
The treachery of time … behold

THE TREACHERY OF TIME.
(by Odukoya A. Adeola)
When the sight becomes blurry
When the light becomes history
When darkness engulf the sphere
When the most vivid becomes unclear

Normalcy changes its hides
Nocturnal become prevailing
Even the lousy man hides
Gently under the shield of his ceiling
Darkness at the peak of dominance
Birds enmute their songy vocal chords
In fear of the foggy occupance
A fear strong enough to chase the mighty sun

But despair not the tyranny of darkness
For its reign depends solely on time
Whose loyalty’s modified by clime
It’s perfidy cleanse the air of hoplessness

For once the traitor strikes
The dark tyrant becomes forgotten
Replaced by the sovereign light
The sphere ridden of burden

But how long can this reign hold
For the traitor has not been ridden
How long can this light reign
The treachery of time … behold

OMA4U, Dave, teaxanomaly, noble4d. Thanks...

noble4d:
According to the poem, the poet is sad,lamenting on the inability of the politicians to keep and fulfill their promises.

In the first stanza, the prayers of the masses in any society is to have a good leader.The politicians campaigned with deceitful humility so as to seek the votes of citizens. Their speech is as sweet as honey, wearing smiley mask, giving out food and cash to win their heart, not knowing their largesse is all pretense.

In the second & Third stanzas, After achieving their goals, they removed their smiley mask, filling their various bank accounts with cash, buying private jets, employing their love ones to offices not minding if they are qualified, and visiting places they desire...meanwhile, they forgot those who vote for them, keeping them in the dark.

The masses were sad and vociferating with the tone of regret, knowing fully well that the politicians used them for their political ambition. The masses held on tight to faith and optimistic that the table will turn.

Hmmm! As for the title, I have many by heart but " Stain on the masses" fit in.

thanks, for the content analysis.

Can you please explan your no 1. Saying stuff46, coz I used to think nothing is ever free in life.

Fixgoo:
Patient dog eat fatest bone while smart dog ate meat. Time waits for no one.

Between meat and bone..... Which is dog's favourite?

OMA4U:
I love that, DaveP.
Mood: Lamentation
Tone: Deceit
Wow!

Suggest a title

LarrySun:
Thanks for the mention, Ad3ola, but I'm not a poet. I can't review it.

Oh! I saw you on a poem thread, am sorry for mistaking you for a poet ..... But you can always read, who knows you may eventually discover the beauty of poetry

Can someone suggest a title?

The herds wandered around the field
Hoping for a hand to increase the yield
Then you came with your hand of deceit
And a false oat to rid the herds of filth
Promising to make the rags smile
With your intent as bitter as bile
Playing a tone that the ears long
Meanwhile crooning a sorrowful song

You appeared with a façadic noble cause
but Why have you beseeched us?
had you not preached to ease our pains?
And turn around to make of us, gains?
You promised to soothe our wounds
But then you’re nothing but hounds
Who maniacally seek goodies
Regardless, what it does to the masses

You took our seed of treasury
see not you the seed as seed!
sacrificed it for your myopic luxury
Had you humbly sown the seed?
Then your seeds will probably reap
The product of the seed you sow
But so little do you know
That the seed you sow are your seeds' to reap

Thanks for pointing that out noble4d.... daveP, texanomaly, thanks a lot too. OMA4U here's another.

Keep them coming and please;
1. Don't plagiarize
2. Put your name on it( let history remember you)
Here's on of mine.
"The power of words lies not in the loudness of its utterance but in its effect on audience" Odukoya A. Adeola

We grew up learning what certain wise men who lived in the past had said. We call them wise sayings or proverbs...... This is a forum for us to be remembered as wise men.

Let's make this thread an archive for sensible short proverbial phrases.

At any point in time we may be asked to disambiguate some of our sayings, you know we won't like our great grandchildren misinterpreting our words.

Am sure you are wondering why I associated wisdom only to men. Well, it's simple, I don't see wise women as women. If a woman is equipped with wisdom, I see her as a man.

Common guys let's make history together

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Here's a poem for review guys, what do u think?

OMA4U:
This is the maiden edition of Nairaland Collaborative Poetry Competition. To keep this part of literature section alive and to enhance team work among poets, we have come up with this challenge.
Are you in?
Tag: AD30LA.

Yes, I am

Am in [quote author=Chuksemi post=27241808][/quote]

Rough Edge
(By Adeola A. Odukoya)
Sometimes I feel like dropping out of the race
To put an end to all the pain
All the effort without gain
But if so be the case
Then I’ll have lived without a mark
Drawn of this globular track

No no no I want to go
My threshold is now zero
But what I know about the ‘to’
is just as dicey as the ‘fro’
The likelihood of ending in pain
Is just as much as that of gain

But what if all is null
And the other side is an illusion
A fable passed to my generation
Then as the giant dwarfs fall
All that is left is the mark
Made on the surface of the track

Oh! Is this game really controlled?
Or has the controller left the field?
For all I see on this land;
Are innocents’ eyes filled with sand,
The just reaping injustice
And the unjust buying justice

I want to get up from this stampede
But my crucial bone hurts
And my mind is filled with thoughts
Was it my fault that I concede?
Should I have risen to fight?
Or was I really in the tight?

Then even if all is a dream?
Do I lie there in anguish?
Or swim out of the bloody stream?
To revamp all that I wish
Make that mark on this track
And transform my remora into shark

Spontaneously I stood
Feeling like a log of wood
All my pains forgotten
My rough edges smoothen
I jumped over my hurdles
And broke through my obstacles.