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sharwama:
I'm glad I could help. Sharwama is a perfectionist, if I take another look at your transcript, I will still draw your attention to something. I leave you in the capable hands of the masters and I hope you get the help you need.
I also want you to know that a flawless transcript is something but a flawless delivery is everything.
I wish you all the best my friend, go and drop your passport

Thank you very much
Please if you still find something that you think needs extra work, let me know. Thank you for the boost of confidence!!! I’m coming to share the good news. Thank you!!!!

sharwama:
Why US?
Your response is kinda flat. Yes we know degrees awarded by US institutions are greatly recognised but so are Canada and UK institutions and you'd also be able to achieve your "career goals". So what's really so special about US to YOU? You get that answer, 2-3 sentences and you move on with your life
Why WKU
You need to prioritise and personalize, the information you are passing. Your transcript is just turnioniown
"Asides WKU’s various accreditations and recognition, wku is known for its teaching excellence, wku offers a curriculum where I get to acquire community experience which would help me translate knowledge gained in the classroom to real life experiences, gaining both theoretical and practical knowledge"
You can get those in any good school, it certainly doesn't explain why you chose WKU at all. You can even get those in UNN, UniCAL, UNIBEN e.t.c, there's nothing special about those
"Asides been offered $1602 in scholarship, the ongoing research by Professor Gretchen who is my advisor and would be working closely with interests me as it aligns with my career goals, it focuses on the analysis of workplace health promotion of small, rural workplace"
Okay this is neither too good nor too bad but you need to apply powder and brighten up the face
Is that $1602 or $16002. If it's 1602, it doesn't sound impressive and the goal is to never ever release unimpressive information, keep it to yourself! Thank you.
So as it stands now, an ongoing research is the only "strong" reason. But you didn't talk about the research properly, it's kinda confusing.
Please, you need to go back and do some research, find out other amazing features about your school or the program, something that really stirs you, that when you talk about it, the VO will see sparks in your eyes. Glory glory glory
Why MPH?
Your reasons for this degree are not quite clear, you are saying so much and making little impact. The goal is to make a good impression in as many powerful sentences as necessary. Tell me, what exactly will this degree do for you? Will it qualify you for a promotion, a salary raise, a new job, will it give you an edge over other contenders in your sphere? Is there a particular position you are targeting? Write it, be specific with details.
Tell me SPECIFICALLY, what can you bring to the table after this degree, no don't give me a generic "medicopolitical" manifesto, what can you achieve with this degree but you haven't achieved now, where do you see yourself in the next 2-3 years and what exactly would you be doing differently if you had this degree?
Me =VO by the way
Please put yourself first, improving the Nigerian health sector isn't the reason your uncle will spend about $60K and you know it!
Think, think and get those personal answers and flesh them out in clear cut sentences. I pray you understand what I am showing you
Ehen, "rounded that up in april 2018", you didn't round up anything ooo, you "rounded off". They are two different things and a graduate shouldn't confuse them. You are welcome sir
Ok, so you are not leaving your job? You will come back? Do you have a study leave that you can show the VO or any evidence?
"I am going to equip myself to be able to take up more challenging roles and carry out my duties better"
What challenging roles exactly, you have to be specific and avoid ambiguity. Hold on, you are contradicting yourself. This degree is not because you want to carry out your present duties better, it's because you want newer, greater and probably more rewarding responsibilities, as you implied earlier. Please be consistent with the information you are passing.
You don't have a relative in the US if you didn't write it in your DS -160.
How did you learn about this sch?
"I also spoke to a friend of mine..."
Is this really necessary? Your INTENSIVE online research as well as mentioning some of the search engines(if need be) is fair enough!
Ehen, I hope you are not going with your uncle's company statement? Go with his personal statement of about 6 months, to show financial credibility.
Okay I am tired, I should stop writing. I wish you all the best and May the force be with you

Good day house
Thank you sharwarma for your review of my proposed transcript. Intensified my research, this is an updated transcript. Please help review. Hopefully I made good progress.
Deficit:$30k(About 11M)for the first ten months
SOA: About 35M
PLEASE ANYBODY WITH ADDITIONAL INFO ON WKU, PLEASE HELP OUT
THANK YOU VERY MUCH
VO: Good morning
Me: good morning ma/sir
Vo: why are you going to the US
Me: for my graduate studies, I’m going to the Western Kentucky University for my masters in public health
Vo: how did you learn about the school
Me: through intensive online research on the Council of Education for Public Health(CEPH) website while searching for accredited MPH programs.
Vo: did you apply to any other schools
Me: yes, 2 others(lists them)
Vo: how many were you admitted in
Me: 2(lists them)
Vo: why MPH?
Me: I aspire to work as a technical officer with the WHO. The MPH is a major requirement for that role and would equip me with the technical skills needed to qualify for that position on my return which would grant me Job security and make me valuable in the labour market on my return.
Vo: why WKU?
ME: WKU provides a well-structured curriculum that aligns with my career goals. It also gives me the opportunity to work with Prof. Gretchen who is my advisor and whose ongoing research aligns with my research interest. it focuses on the analysis of workplace health promotion of small, rural workplace. (I have extra points like: the location which is in a smaller city and would help me focus and the cost been cheaper/affordable).
Vo: what is your study plan?
Me: my program will cover a total of 42 credit hours. Courses will include: Health promotion, research methods, program planning and a thesis project prior to graduation.
Vo: any standard tests
Me: yes, GRE;296
VO: what have you been doing since you left school in 2016
Me: started my mandatory internship programme with Bleep in 2016 for 12months, went for the mandatory NYSC programs for another 12 months in 2017, rounded that off in april 2018 and started working as a pharmacist in july 2018 with Bleep
Vo: who’s funding?
Me: my uncle
Vo: what does he do?
Me: works with Bleep, an oil and gas company involved in gas processing, mud logging services and supports activities of mining, also into sales of automobiles and transportation.
Vo: ever travelled before?
Me: no, never had any reason to
Vo: Any relatives in the us?
Me: no
Still working on the ‘WHY USA?’ question. Don’t want to shoot myself in the foot and also trying to avoid leading answers.
Additional questions prepared for: when does the school resume? What are the duties of a technical officer with the WHO? what are your duties at your current place of work? And my academic experience.

Thank you for your response, I’ll work on it and revert ASAP.

Good morning house
Very good job you are doing here.
Just discovered this platform and it has been helpful towards preparing for my interview.
My f1 visa interview is next Thursday, I have come up with a prosposed transcript. Gurus in the house please help review and if I left anything out please help out also.
Deficit:$30k(About 11M)for the first ten months
SOA: About 35M
PLEASE ANYBODY WITH ADDITIONAL INFO ON WKU, PLEASE HELP OUT
THANK YOU VERY MUCH
VO: Good morning
Me: good morning ma/sir
Vo: why are you going to the US
Me: for my graduate studies, I’m going to the Western Kentucky University for my masters in public health
Vo: why US?
Me: educational degrees obtained from the US are highly recognized all over the world, I see this as an excellent step towards achieving my career goals
Vo: how did you learn about the school
Me: through intensive online research while trying to come up with a list of schools offering MPH in the US. I also spoke to a friend of mine who knew someone that obtained her graduate degree from WKU, she encouraged me to go ahead with my application after so many positive reviews.
Vo: did you apply to any other schools
Me: yes, 2 others(lists them)
Vo: how many were you admitted in
Me: 2(lists them)
Vo: why WKU?
ME: WKU offers me a MPH with concentration in healthcare management and promotion. Asides WKU’s various accreditations and recognition, wku is known for its teaching excellence, wku offers a curriculum where I get to acquire community experience which would help me translate knowledge gained in the classroom to real life experiences, gaining both theoretical and practical knowledge. This makes learning easier and fun. Asides been offered $1602 in scholarship, the ongoing research by Professor Gretchen who is my advisor and would be working closely with interests me as it aligns with my career goals, it focuses on the analysis of workplace health promotion of small, rural workplace.
Vo: why MPH?
Me: with a baccalaureate degree in pharmacy, a graduate degree in public health would further equip me to hold specific and significant roles in the Nigerian health sector which would help achieve my career goals. More than being a pharmacist, I want to be a key contributor towards improving the quality of life of people by improving patients health and decreasing death rate by helping in disease prevention, awareness and health promotion. MPH would equip me to perform these roles and I would become very valuable in the labour market. After learning and familiarizing myself with the healthcare system, I would be able to impact the Nigerian health sector positively on my return.
Vo: any standard tests
Me: GRE;296
VO: what have you been doing since you left school in 2016
Me: started my mandatory internship programme with Bleep in 2016 for 12months, went for the mandatory NYSC programs for another 12 months in 2017, rounded that up in april 2018 and started working as a pharmacist in july 2018 with Bleep
Vo: why are you leaving your job.
Me; I’m not leaving my job, I am going to equip myself to be able to take up more challenging roles and carry out my duties better(not sure if this is a good one)
Vo: who’s funding?
Me: my uncle
Vo: what does he do?
Me: works with sonartusk limited, an oil and gas company involved in gas processing, mud logging services and supports activities of mining, also into sales of automobiles and transportation.
Vo: ever travelled before?
Me: no, never had any reason too
Vo: Any relatives in the us?
Me:no(the relative I have is also a student, I hope no is a good answer for the question)