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hi everyone. i'm back finally

not easy on the eye - ugly
in a financial coma - damn broke

meexteriox
Hot? come on dont be funny
i'm laughing coz its easy to misinterpret
what one has written.

big ups to aslan333. he alone seems to catch my drift

meexteriox:
[center]@colors
Are you really listening? QUESTION 1
Please don’t appear glistening
In your replies which you deem necessary
To my question without good accessory.

Where on earth do you seek rest at night? QUESTION 2
Mine temporary is in the big heart
Very close to the river Niger
In the land I refer to as naija.

Do I refer to you as a litigator? QUESTION 3
Cause yours truly is an auditor,
Would really like to audit your person
You never know, we might be cousin.

Can you truly answer this questions? QUESTION 4
I’ve raised above without any tension
Maybe we could start from here
Without raising any hair.[/center]

QUESTION 1
yes i am listening
QUESTION 2, 3, 4
send me your email address

OPEN INVITATION

this is an invitation to explore my world
mental liberation thats what it's called

you will be surprised at what you will find
trust me, i'm nothing of the usual kind

i can be your fantasy
take you to higher heights of ecstasy
don't doubt me this ain't a fallacy
just a deeper level of intimacy

i want to
invade your senses
lower your defenses

inspire in you an insatiable desire
make you hot like burning fire

infiltrate your mind
let me help you unwind

i'm not trying to be a tease
this is free, there are no fees

i want you to
let go of all your inhibition
this ain't a movie on the television

i can introduce you to new things
nothing like your usual flings

this exploration is not sexual
more of deeply intellectual

take a walk with me
i can make you what you want to be

[quote][/quote]hi meex i thought i replied
to the questions you supplied

sorry, don't feel sad
i take all the blame, its my bad

ok now i'm listening, talk to me

SINCE YOU'VE BEEN GONE

since you've been gone my heart stopped beating
can't think, can't sleep, have even stopped eating
tell me please why is love so fleeting
i can still recall our very first meeting

the worst part is that i caught you cheating
my best friend, in an embrace but you said it was mere greeting
that i forgave but no you kept on repeating
so i had to leave, for your love i cannot be competing

its too late to apologise, i can no longer be committing
you are now a part of me i definitely will be deleting
to a doctor i must go, i need some assisting
since you've been gone my heart has stopped beating


angel-empy thanks, where have you been

hmmm,
impressive,

4him

seriously i hate it when people ask for criticism and then when they get it they cant take it.
if you cant handle the heat why go out under the sun?
all this talk about poetic license is just an excuse for mediocrity. wake up to reality, your writing is CRAPPY!!!!!
you cant even spell!!!!, that you would inflict on poor unsuspecting nairalanders this thing you call writing is grossly unacceptable and that you would even deem it fit to maul the work of one of literature's finest shakespeare my God you should be banned forever from nairaland!!!!!!!!!!!

my advice, go back to kindergarten level, learn how to spell

a friend of mine has asked me to post this
its not my work its all his

he could have done it himself but from nairaland he's had a ban
this is his first try, comment on it if you can!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

@colours
true but sad words from colours
just hope love shows you some honours

life is full of shit, and can leave you with a frown
dont just let it play you, and take you for a clown

every passing second is another light of hope
just make sure you hold on and climb up life's rope

lekana

i admire your determination
all needed is a little more coordination

rhyming is quite easy as you can well see
there's nothing to it, its just like ABC

from what i've read you're almost already there
good work i say, it's good to have you here

meex and acan and everyone else hi

lonelypal, you asked for a rating and i gave you one. if you cannot handle constructive criticism then why ask for it. besides all that talk about tones and levels and as you said ", audience with sound poetry knowledge to deduce the theme and the various poetic devices employed by the poet", is a bit too far fetched dont you think. from what i've read you are still at the amateur level of any form of literary work, poetic license or not.
i will still reiterate my position on your work, SUPERFLUOUS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

ODE TO MY HEART part 1

you and I strangers previously unknown
brought together by facebook, messenger and phone

its been less than a month but feels like eternity
you've already got me thinking marriage and maternity

your voice, your words, theres a connection, its real
theres no denying this emotion we feel

you have another, you told me, i know
i hate her already, can't you let her go?

how can i overcome this addiction
what i feel for you is now my affliction

strange i know, but your eyes, they speak to me
your voice like a potion just wont let me be

this is so crazy we have never met before
but with you i can be anywhere, even Darfur

hope you feel what i feel i'm slowly dying
'tis true love, i swear i'm not lying

help me! please someone call 911
i'm wounded, cupid's arrow, i know he's the one

meexteriox, i feel you

ODE TO MY HEART part 1

you and I strangers previously unknown
brought together by facebook, messenger and phone

its been less than a month but feels like eternity
you've already got me thinking marriage and maternity

your voice, your words, theres a connection, its real
theres no denying this emotion we feel

you have another, you told me, i know
i hate her already, can't you let her go?

how can i overcome this addiction
what i feel for you is now my affliction

strange i know, but your eyes, they speak to me
your voice like a potion just wont let me be

this is so crazy we have never met before
but with you i can be anywhere, even Darfur

hope you feel what i feel i'm slowly dying
'tis true love, i swear i'm not lying

help me! please someone call 911
i'm wounded, cupid's arrow, i know he's the one

you sound familiar opi- ororo
do you happen to be an ozo?

if yes then i'm impressed
salient points you have addressed

i definitely will take no offense
very well said, i will surely make reference

but right now i'm under a lot of strain
so from a reply i must refrain

but i definitely will get back to you
when the time is due

in my opinion, this is quite superfluous
WHAT ARE YOU SAYING?
there is no flow to this poem
literary writing is about communication, you should be able to connect with your audience through your words, but most times we make the mistake of crowding our writing with "big words" in our bid to impress the audience.
lonelypal, i must say, you've lost me on this one. but i'll like to see more of your work,

BTT thanks

meexteriox

i dont know why i write so sad
but pray tell me is it so bad?

i find that despair gets me inspired
it's still a mystery my writing gets admired

a part of me is really happy and bright
but for some reason the other side gets me to write

i think too many people focus on the cheerful side of life
but what about the pain, hunger and strife?

the first tuesday before friday
is usually my pay day

but i get broke even before the D-day
its not my fault i just like to shop on E-bay

not a very good thing if i may say
but i cant help it if it makes me feel okay

my friends tell me to stop but i say NAY!
its my life and i'll live it my own way

hey labans, isnt this Aaliyah's song more than a woman.
at least be original
how can you pass up someone else's song as your poem
thats lame

words, expression of thought are never enough
heavily laden with emotion, i am thoughtless
how can i make you understand, the waves are riding rough
i am defeated, indeed i am less