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'Well James.' she said extending her hand to him, 'It was a pleasure meeting you'. 'The pleasure is mine.' He replied. They shook hands for a few seconds before she headed for her house. Walking up her driveway, she said a quick prayer before knocking on the door.
Her sister opened it and everyone was seated and she needed no soothsayer to tell her she was the reason for that. 'where are you coming from?', Her father barked as she walked in and her sister shut the door. 'I went to the Basketball game.' she said looking at her sister for help. 'Jasmine went to the same game and she came back an hour ago.' her father said not convinced.
'I was waiting for Sophie', She mumbled. 'To your room now. And you're grounded for a week.' her father said angrily. She ran up stairs happily. Glad there wasn't any more scolding. There was a knock on her door a few seconds later and her sister came in and lay on the bed beside her. 'I could have done with a little help back there Jazz.' she said feigning annoyance.
'Sorry I couldn't do more', Jasmine said feigning sleep. 'Couldn't do more! Jasmine you did nothing!', Rachel exclaimed. 'That depends on your definition of nothing.', Jasmine replied.
'How many definitions of Nothing do we have?', Rachel asked. 'Two mainly. The first is doing nothing that puts the person in more trouble, And the second is doing nothing that actually helps to bring the person out of trouble'. Jasmine replied.
'And you did the second?' Rachel asked. 'Yep', Jasmine said

madgoat:
Compiling my book.... Watch this space for the most captivating story ever.

#will be posting it very soon

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U're not d only one. Am waiting too

Writeditor:
I'm a professional editor.

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Writeditor:
Good writing. You need to pay closer attention to the small matters, though. Let me do a medium-level edit of your first post to illustrate what I mean.

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Faint footsteps could be heard across the street despite her attempts to cover [muffle]1 them. Rachel walked hurriedly home[,] glancing back every 2[two] 2 seconds to make sure she wasn't been[being]3 followed.
Walking Gangster street[Street] at night was signing your own death sentence. But it was already 8:15pm.[replace with a comma] 15 minutes past her curfew and that was the shortest route to her house. She began to walk faster when she heard a sound like someone had mistakenly kicked something. She increased her pace. [this is a bland repetition] Meanwhile a boy had also turned at the sound. A boy that had been following her. He looked at her. She was fair with short black hair that just reached her neck and an oval face with a cute nose and beautiful eyes. But he was too far away to know the color.
Then something else caught his eye. He could see two silhouettes just behind her. His heart raced. He wanted to scream and tell her to run but that would give away his position. He was [was soon] brought back to reality by her scream. He looked back and he was right. There were two of them. He weighed his options. With the way they were struggling to silence her, it was obvious they were inexperienced [amateurs] and he could take them [the both of them] down easily.

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1. You cover the marks made by your footsteps. You muffle the sound made by them.
2. Always spell out zero to nine. Spell out all figures whenever they occur at the beginning of a sentence.
3. The continuous verb "being" is used when expressing an action as it was taking place. The past participle "been" is used when expressing an action in terms of its being past or completed. Rule of thumb: "Being" is normally preceded by the auxiliary "to be" (am, is, was, were), while "been" is usually preceded by the auxiliary have (has, have, had).

Wow r u an English professo or what.

I hope I'm not too late. Following anyway

But what if more came. He saw the moonlights reflection on the knife so close to her neck. He took his chances. He had the element of surprise and they were down and unconscious in seconds. 'Are you okay? ' He asked her concerned.
She was dazed for a few seconds before looking at him. He was tall. Probably 6ft2. With eyes like the sea before a storm. And deep black hair with pink lips and a nose that suited his face perfectly and... 'Rachel what is wrong with you? ' she reprimanded as she struggled to get herself together.
He helped her up and offered to walk her home to which she readily accepted. They walked on in silence for a few minutes before he broke it. 'I'm James.' He said extending his hand. 'Rachel' she replied taking it. 'So what caused you to look for death?' He asked simply. 'Excuse me?' she said looking at him in surprise. 'Let me rephrase. Is your life that miserable that you decided to end it by walking the most dangerous street in Lagos alone at night.'
'No. My life is not miserable and no am not trying to end it. I was late for my curfew and that is the shortest route to my home.' she said pointing at a Duplex down the corner as they had left Gangster Street behind.
' Oh. So you were that desperate'. He asked again. 'Yes!'. She said shaking with rage. ' Ok. I didn't mean that as an insult.' He said smiling. She looked at him and wondered how one who was so close to death could be so calm. 'Well he wasn't the one with a knife to his throat.' she thought stealing another look at him through the corner of her eyes.

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D9ty7: Happy Birthday to you dearie. Long life and prosperities. I pray that God grant you every of your heart desires. AMEN!!!

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So how do u see d modification

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D9ty7: Happy Birthday to you dearie. Long life and prosperities. I pray that God grant you every of your heart desires. AMEN!!!

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Amen, Amen nd Amen

jaymomma: HBD

Thank u

Happy Birthday to me nd all d October babies

D9ty7: I may be wrong tho

I have modified it. Check it out again

Onemansquad: 9c story ma'am
#u gave a description quite alright bt is nt a detailed description and as time goes by u will improve in ur diction and imagery...

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Thank u

D9ty7 post=/post/26823027:
I may be wrong tho

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Come on

Samanther post=/post/26829058:
really?

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Yep. Loving dis story

Faint footsteps could be heard across the street despite her attempts to cover them. Rachel walked hurriedly home glancing back every 2 seconds to make sure she wasn't been followed.
Walking Gangster street at night was signing your own death sentence. But it was already 8:15pm. 15 minutes past her curfew and that was the shortest route to her house. She began to walk faster when she heard a sound like someone had mistakenly kicked something. She increased her pace. Meanwhile a boy had also turned at the sound. A boy that had been following her. He looked at her. She was fair with short black hair that just reached her neck and an oval face with a cute nose and beautiful eyes. But he was too far away to know the color.
Then something else caught his eye. He could see two silhouettes just behind her. His heart raced. He wanted to scream and tell her to run but that would give away his position. He was brought back to reality by her scream. He looked back and he was right. There were two of them. He weighed his options. With the way they were struggling to silence her, it was obvious they were inexperienced and he could take them down easily.

D9ty7: Tell me something I don't know. Are you gonna abandon the first story?

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Nope. U write wen u get inspiration

Here I come again with another story. Everyone was complaining my last one wasn't detailed enough so am gonna make dis one as descriptive as I can.
Don't complain if it's too narrative. You asked for it.

Update pls

wreckingball: Where's yours?

. I used to attend Imperial

jaymomma: Strolls into thread. Nice story cooking here. work on description like U've been told. It makes the story come alive.

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Thanks I will

TiffanyJ: No one can ever replace your mother

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Yep. She's d best in d world

Dats d name of my current school. Demonstration College U/Pama. But our Principal is rarely around. Thanks 4 d update

Thanks alot. I gave a description of Jessica in d beginning but I'll work on it nd the school has a lot of recreational facilities just lyk mine. We have a basketball, lawn tennis court and we hav a normal swimming pool and a competitive swimming pool etc

It makes me happy to see my mother's face so lighted.
Just because I did what she has always recited.
She teaches me to try to increase my intelligence.
And to be acknowledged by every teacher in every subject.

Every day when I wake up.
It makes me happy to see her the right side up.
When it's time for school she prays for me.
But everyday she finds some reason to delay me.

Every night before I go to sleep.
I can't resist going to her door to peek.
And every day I'm satisfied.
Just to see her by my side.

Everyday I pray.
God let my mother always stay.
Let death never come her way.
These are my prayers every day.

hassan85: if You ask of my opinion, I will say You are doing great. it's your first work and no one expects u to be perfect. Keep d updates coming, don't get mad about some of d comments here just pick d ones dt makes u Better. for me I will say kudos and Keep ur updates coming if possible make dem very frequent. NL can only make u Better.

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Thank u sir for d encouragement

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onosj: Following bumper 2 bumper

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Thanks

She opened the door and closed it hurriedly. 'Wetin dey pursue like did so?' Suzy asked and Jessica who had not noticed her jolted.
'Na snake?' Suzy asked again. 'No na python' Jessica said angrily.
Just then someone knocked. Jessica opened the door but shut it almost immediately. 'Who be dat?' Suzy asked but Jessica ignored her. She took a deep breath and opened it again. 'Yes' she asked the boy standing in front of the door. 'Excuse me please but I'm looking for Suzy.' The boy said smiling. 'And you are?' Jessica asked. 'James' He replied still smiling.
'Susanna! You get visitor' Jessica said not taking her eyes of the boy standing in front of the door. 'Who be dat?' Suzy asked putting down the Chemistry textbook she was reading. 'James' Jessica replied. Suzy practically jumped of the bed. She had pushed Jessica and was standing in front of the door in seconds. 'Hi James.' she said putting on her best smile. 'Hey. I couldn't return the book yesterday. I hope you're not mad.' He said apologetically. 'Not at all.' Suzy said still smiling. He handed her the note and said goodbye.
' Oh my God!' Suzy said jumping on her bed and staring at the ceiling. Jessica just hissed and sat on her own bed sulking

Jessica counted her steps as she walked slowly to Vera's room. She walked in and looked around. Vera had added a new picture of Angelina Jolie to the other ones on the wall now making the total number of posters 25. Jessica had counted them the last time she came. She wished she had a room like that. Vera's room was pink with posters on the walls, a small bedside drawer with a mirror and her own standing wardrobe.
She looked around in envy. Vera came in a few minutes later looking very angry. She paced around the room a few times then turned to face Jessica with a look that class kill. ' Jessica, Jessica, Jessica. You know who I am don't you?' Vera asked looking her straight in the eye. 'Yes' Jessica managed to mutter.
'Very good. Then you should know that Vera always gets what she wants. And when Vera doesn't get what she wants, Vera gets mad and when Vera gets mad, things go bad. '. Jessica could only nod.
'Stay away from Henry Jessica or I'll forget we were ever friends. Am I clear!'. Jessica nodded again. 'Good. Then leave.'. Jessica didn't wait to be asked again. She walked to the door slowly. Opened it, walked out and closed it back. Then she bolted to her room.