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Love dis story

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*perhaps, you dare not disobey his command whenever he speaks - perhap means maybe which means ur sentence is wrong.
*I had sweated profusely and so, I reluctantly advanced to a mango tree and stood under it shades-means u did nt want 2 get out of d sun, drop d word reluctantly.
*I exhaled and located Miss Grace hostel block-u locate a place u are going 2 4 d first tym nd nt one u already know.
*she beckoned me to enter-beckoned is 2 cal someone wit a hand sign, hw do u do dat 2 sum1 who is behind a door.
*When i intruded into her room-intrude is entering without permission, she already permitted u nd also ur mum does nt intrude into d kitchen cos its hers; she's nt supossed 2 take permission frm u.
*i saw her tying towel as she was about dashing into the bathroom to shower-dash means run, mind hw u use it.
*I repeating same track when it stops playing-"i repeated the same track".
*She was drained from her hair down to her feet-she just had a shower, she's supposed 2 b wet.
*Sometime, she tempted me anytime she sees me around-"sometimes, she tempts me".
*Grace later advanced towards- change "advanced towards" to "moved to" or "went to".
*She came closer and threw her body on the bed spraying her legs apart-its spreading her legs, no need for the word "apart".
*The selected track was still playing when we started argument-"we started arguing" or "we started an argument".
Just write in plain english nd stop using big grammars, dats where ur problem is. U don't know how 2 use them properly

This stry iz dope, jus had to coment by the wayam new here