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timpaker:


I wrote this early last year for a contest online and I think I've shared it here on Nairaland.

SUCCESS

Poverty
Hateful, fearful
Struggling, toiling, grinding
Office, home, work, library,
Reading, writing, grinding
Cautious, ambitious,
Success


That's mine
It's suppose to be formatted to be centered but Nairaland platform doesn't have such.

TemitopeDaniel:
Noble... weldone here.

noble4d:


Yah its suppose to be in diamond shape but NL platform does not support that.

As for your input, line 4 should be a short phrase about line 1, and a short phrase about line 7. Just edit it, thumbs up

You may be right bro but from what I have read about a Diamente is that, the purpose is to go from the subject at the top of the diamond or lozenge to another totally different (and sometimes opposite) subject at the bottom written in seven lines of diamond shape.

i.e.

The First line - a word (NOUN) - A
Second line - two ADJECTIVES - A
Third line - three GERUNDS-A (verb + -ing)
Fourth line - two NOUNS-A + two NOUNS-B
Fifth line - three GERUNDS-B (verb + -ing)
Sixth line - two ADJECTIVES-B and
Seventh - One NOUN - B


http://www.readwritethink.org/classroom-resources/student-interactives/diamante-poems-30053.html

This is the Diamente I know designed by Iris Tiedt, the one you talking about should be the old school Diamente cuz mine is the new school

timpaker:


You may be right bro but from what I have read about a Diamente is that, the purpose is to go from the subject at the top of the diamond or lozenge to another totally different (and sometimes opposite) subject at the bottom written in seven lines of diamond shape.

i.e.

The First line - a word (NOUN) - A
Second line - two ADJECTIVES - A
Third line - three GERUNDS-A (verb + -ing)
Fourth line - two NOUNS-A + two NOUNS-B
Fifth line - three GERUNDS-B (verb + -ing)
Sixth line - two ADJECTIVES-B and
Seventh - One NOUN - B


http://www.readwritethink.org/classroom-resources/student-interactives/diamante-poems-30053.html

This is the Diamente I know designed by Iris Tiedt, the one you talking about should be the old school Diamente cuz mine is the new school

noble4d:


Hahahahahahaahahahahaha Bro,the diamante was invented 40 years ago by an American poet "Iris McClellan Tiedt" in 1969. What you wrote was an archaic form of diamante though, some still right it that way...Anyways, Thumbsup.

vonn:
I was here

timpaker:


Write us a Diamente poem na

vonn:
I was here

joseph1832:
Can I get a hand with spoken words?. Would really appreciate it!.

timpaker:
Sure you can! Now what's up?

joseph1832:
what's it about?. Would love to know?.

joseph1832:
Can I get a hand with spoken words?. Would really appreciate it!.

noble4d:



Spoken word is a form of poetry that often uses alliterated prose or verse and occasionally uses metered verse to express social commentary.

Traditionally it is in the first person, is from the poet’s point of view and is themed in current events.

This poetry is written and performed for an audience, and tends to demonstrate free flow rhymes, rhythms, word play, poetic phrases and also slangs.

Feel free to ask questions@ Joseph

noble cares .

noble4d:
LESSON 4

SENRYU

A senryu is a 17 syllable poem. It is an unrhymed
Japanese verse. A senryu consists of 3 lines and
17 syllables. Senryu is usually written in the present tense and only references to some aspect of human nature or emotions.

STRUCTURE
The 17 syllables should be arranged as below:

Line 1 – 5 syllables
Line 2 – 7 syllables
Line 3 – 5 syllables

Example:

Noble sexy eyes

Balmy, foxy maidens love

With glowing vigor.


Its simple and beautiful. you poet should try it out, let's see what you got.

ahika:


I thought this is the structure of Haiku. Well, check mine

Ha! Iku

Death the path to life
Feared by earthling sojourners
Non can flee from thee.

Ahika.

ahika:
Tho this is coming late, pls critique the poem (sonnet)

FOUL BLISS

Though I am at rest
I know my momentum will soon wing me
Laxity my guest
Get ready to flee
'Cos my latent energy
Is sitting on a time bomb
My next poem will be an elegy
That is, if your acceleration is dumb

Go with your convoy
But leave your nephew Peace
With her I can have Joy
And in joy shall I birth my master piece
Go with the speed of light
That I may have the wit to write.

noble4d:


you wrote a Shakespearean sonnet. you can as well separate the three quatrains from the rhyming couplet for better understanding. e.g

Though I am at rest
I know my momentum will soon wing me
Laxity my guest
Get ready to flee

'Cos my latent energy
Is sitting on a time bomb
My next poem will be an elegy
That is, if your acceleration is dumb.

Go with your convoy
But leave your nephew Peace
With her I can have Joy
And in joy shall I birth my master piece.

Go with the speed of light
That I may have the wit to write.

I noticed an enjambment in line 4-5

noble cares.

ahika:
thanks very much