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Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by JigsawKillah(m): 11:25pm On Nov 10, 2014
interesting

easy as pie
I'm facing writer's block right now
Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by noble4d(m): 1:21pm On Nov 17, 2014
Good noon fellow poets, wish you all a wonderful week smiley.

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Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by noble4d(m): 1:31pm On Nov 17, 2014
LESSON 5

EPITAPH

An epitaph is a brief poem inscribed on a tombstone praising a deceased person, usually with rhyming lines.

Example:

Dedicated to my late father

Here lies humble heart daddy
Who died while smiling himself witty.
He held me softly
Thence closes his eyes gently.
He promised to take me see movies
Whence I have pass my worries.
Now that nature shimmer
He ended up six feet under.

you can write yours. show us your dexterity and creativity.

noble cares.
Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by noble4d(m): 1:37pm On Nov 17, 2014
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Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by OMA4U(m): 2:14pm On Nov 17, 2014
I have to try this out.
Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by Nobody: 4:57pm On Nov 17, 2014
Here,is where stepmommy lies.
I try not to remember her beautiful smiles
cos missberrypop5 says I don't look good
when I cry.
Guilt haunts me,for being too shy
to hug and snuggle her tight
anytime she cried
from that sickle thing of a plight.
Rest,rest Nura Sulayman
Someday we'll see,and I'll apologize.
.
Dedicated to my stepmom
.
Noble4d is it good enough?
Ayamlaykorn

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Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by noble4d(m): 5:26pm On Nov 17, 2014
laykorn:
Here,is where stepmommy lies.
I try not to remember her beautiful smiles.
Cos missberrypop5 says I don't look good.
When I cry.
Guilt haunts me,for being too shy.
To hug and snuggle and her tight.
Anytime she cried.
From that sickle thing of a plight.
Rest,rest Nura Sulayman.
Someday we'll see,and I'll apologize.
.
Dedicated to my stepmom
.
Noble4d is it good enough?
Ayamlaykorn

Its beautiful bro, but have problems with your punctuations. There are places in your Epitaph that full stop is not required e.g lines 2-4.
Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by Nobody: 5:29pm On Nov 17, 2014
laykorn:
Here,is where stepmommy lies.
I try not to remember her beautiful smiles.
Cos missberrypop5 says I don't look good.
When I cry.
Guilt haunts me,for being too shy.
To hug and snuggle and her tight.
Anytime she cried.
From that sickle thing of a plight.
Rest,rest Nura Sulayman.
Someday we'll see,and I'll apologize.
.
Dedicated to my stepmom
.
Noble4d is it good enough?
Ayamlaykorn
awww, its sweet. Nice one.
Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by Nobody: 6:00pm On Nov 17, 2014
noble4d:


Its beautiful bro, but have problems with your punctuations. There are places in your Epitaph that full stop is not required e.g lines 2-4.
Okay sir,modified.
Ayamlaykorn
Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by joseph1832(m): 7:20pm On Nov 17, 2014
Noble4d. I believe am still having problems with punctuation as applied in poetry. Can you explain the concept of punctuation marks in poetry?.
Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by ayozainy(f): 7:51pm On Nov 17, 2014
Is this a sonnet?
The master sends his servant on an errand
An invitation to an unknown bargain
He frowns and murmurs all sort of trash
"What kind of life is this", he complains.

Legs moving relunctantly on the solid soil
Meets an animal tilling with all might
Sweating and panting without a coy
He is admired for being the country's delight

The determination on the hunter's face
Makes the prey succumb with pity
"A job well done" says his pals
"What a delicious meat" says the city.

His eyes flunged open in a twinkle
"It must be a dream" said Minkle
Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by ayozainy(f): 8:56pm On Nov 17, 2014
A NONET
THE AMAZING TEACHER

I doff my fabulous hat for you
A thousand times without a stop
An inspiring bronze you are
You are worth more than gold
The little you know
You teach us all
I adore you
I respect,
You.
Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by noble4d(m): 10:36pm On Nov 17, 2014
joseph1832:
Noble4d. I believe am still having problems with punctuation as applied in poetry. Can you explain the concept of punctuation marks in poetry?.

Punctuation has the unique role of being able to significantly alter the way we read a written work; it can hinder some poems while enhancing others, and may do both in various places in a single work.

Cadence in poetry is influenced by the rhythm of the words, but it is also influenced by the amount and kind of punctuation. The general rule is, the more punctuation, the slower the poem will read.

When punctuation occurs at the end of a line, it is called an end-stoppedline. A run-on line, also called enjambment occurs if there is no punctuation at the end of the line, or if the idea expressed in one line is continued on in the next. Enjambment urges the reader to move to the next line without pausing.

Use of several punctuations is a choice. If you know what you are writing, you'll surely know where to place them.

noble cares.

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Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by Nobody: 10:40pm On Nov 17, 2014
Noble,pls say something on ayozainy's nonnet.
Ayamlaykorn
Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by noble4d(m): 10:42pm On Nov 17, 2014
laykorn:
Here,is where stepmommy lies.
I try not to remember her beautiful smiles
cos missberrypop5 says I don't look good
when I cry.
Guilt haunts me,for being too shy
to hug and snuggle her tight
anytime she cried
from that sickle thing of a plight.
Rest,rest Nura Sulayman.
Someday we'll see,and I'll apologize.
.
Dedicated to my stepmom
.
Noble4d is it good enough?
Ayamlaykorn
Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by noble4d(m): 10:43pm On Nov 17, 2014
laykorn:
Here,is where stepmommy lies.
I try not to remember her beautiful smiles
cos missberrypop5 says I don't look good
when I cry.
Guilt haunts me,for being too shy
to hug and snuggle her tight
anytime she cried
from that sickle thing of a plight.
Rest,rest Nura Sulayman.
Someday we'll see,and I'll apologize.
.
Dedicated to my stepmom
.
Noble4d is it good enough?
Ayamlaykorn

Its suppose to be blank cos there is an enjambment.

Rest, rest Nura Sulayman
Someday we'll see,and I'll apologize.
Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by Nobody: 10:44pm On Nov 17, 2014
noble4d:


Its suppose to be blank cos there is an enjambment.

Rest, rest Nura Sulayman
Someday we'll see,and I'll apologize.
Thank you teacher. I will modify now.
Ayamlaykorn
Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by noble4d(m): 10:47pm On Nov 17, 2014
ayozainy:
A NONET
THE AMAZING TEACHER

I doff my fabulous hat for you
A thousand times without a stop
An inspiring bronze you are
You are worth more than gold
The little you know
You teach us all
I adore you
I respect,
You.

It's nice dear smiley
Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by noble4d(m): 10:55pm On Nov 17, 2014
ayozainy:
Is this a sonnet?
The master sends his servant on an errand
An invitation to an unknown bargain
He frowns and murmurs all sort of trash
"What kind of life is this", he complains.

Legs moving relunctantly on the solid soil
Meets an animal tilling with all might
Sweating and panting without a coy
He is admired for being the country's delight

The determination on the hunter's face
Makes the prey succumb with pity
"A job well done" says his pals
"What a delicious meat" says the city.

His eyes flunged open in a twinkle
"It must be a dream" said Minkle


Halooo dear, your rhymes r off somewhere...re-edit your work.
Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by ayozainy(f): 5:32am On Nov 18, 2014
noble4d:


Halooo dear, your rhymes r off somewhere...re-edit your work.
kk, i will
Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by ayozainy(f): 6:40pm On Nov 18, 2014
Another sonnet written by me, trying to improve
MY DAY - TODAY
No words could truly describe my day
Should I call it terrible or maybe jolly?
The anger in my heart could bake a cake
I have got no choice than to keep it holy.

The sight of the crowd made me shy
When she arrived, she came with fun
I laughed, jisted and suddenly I whine
Their voices pushed me under the sun

A look at him, I felt like throwing a stone
It came to my turn, finally felt satisfied
A knock on the door, I checked my phone
They had left, making us all feel mystified

I felt horrible, the place looked like a dome
Our faces were dry, we all left for home.
Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by OMA4U(m): 1:44am On Nov 19, 2014
ayozainy:
Another sonnet written by me, trying to improve
MY DAY - TODAY
No words could truly describe my day
Should I call it terrible or maybe jolly?
The anger in my heart could bake a cake
I have got no choice than to keep it holy.

The sight of the crowd made me shy
When she arrived, she came with fun
I laughed, jisted and suddenly I whine
Their voices pushed me under the sun

A look at him, I felt like throwing a stone
It came to my turn, finally felt satisfied
A knock on the door, I checked my phone
They had left, making us all feel mystified

I felt horrible, the place looked like a dome
Our faces were dry, we all left for home.
Your poem is nice, but count each line very well. Each line of a sonnet comprise ten iambic pentameter syllables. I love your inspiration. Keep them coming.
Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by ayozainy(f): 6:12am On Nov 19, 2014
OMA4U:
Your poem is nice, but count each line very well. Each line of a sonnet comprise ten iambic pentameter syllables. I love your inspiration. Keep them coming.
tanks buh kindly explain iambic pentameter for me. I dont understand
Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by OMA4U(m): 10:52am On Nov 19, 2014
ayozainy:
tanks buh kindly explain iambic pentameter for me. I dont understand


Iambic means having an unstressed syllable followed by a stressed syllable. E.g LoveLY, deLIGHT, this gives cadence and rhythm to the poem.

Pentameter is a line of verse consisting of five metrical feet.

Feet is a group of syllables making up a basic unit meter.

NOTE: if you don't get the iambic well, just make sure your sonnet consists of ten syllables.
Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by noble4d(m): 10:58am On Nov 19, 2014
ayozainy:
tanks buh kindly explain iambic pentameter for me. I dont understand


Hy ayozainy...I honestly love your determination, God bless you.

If you want to write poetry or you want to be a more careful reader of it, knowing iambic pentameter, Trochee, Dactyl and vice versa will help.let's look at some terms before going deep:

METER

Meter refers to the pattern of syllables in a line of poetry. The most basic unit of measure in a poem is the syllable and the pattern of syllables in a line, from stressed to unstressed or vice versa.

FOOT

Syllables are paired two and three at a time depending on the stresses in the sentence.Two syllables together, or three if it’s a three-syllable construction, is known as a foot. So in a line of poetry THE COW would be considered one foot. Because when you say the words,THE is unstressed and COW is stressed.An unstressed/stressed foot is known as an iamb. That’s where the term iambic comes from.

Pentameter has 5 feet, or 5 sets of stressed and unstressed syllables. In basic iambic pentameter, a line would have 5 feet of iambs, which is an unstressed and then a stressed syllable. E.g

The below line has 5 feet, so it’s written in pentameter. And the stressing pattern is all iambs:

no BLE/ will START/ a TALE/ neeDING/ an END

Five feet = 10 syllables

I shall explain other stress patterns in future.

noble cares.

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Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by noble4d(m): 12:35pm On Nov 24, 2014
Halooo, wish u all a wonderful week.
Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by noble4d(m): 12:52pm On Nov 24, 2014
LESSON 6

MINUTE POETRY

The Minute Poem also called Traditional Minute poem is rhyming verse form consisting of 12 lines of 60 syllables written in strict iambic meter. The poem is formatted into 3 stanzas of 8,4,4,4; 8,4,4,4; 8,4,4,4 syllables. The rhyme scheme is as follows: aabb, ccdd, eeff.

E.G 1
Journey to success

like pole of net to land of light
Through dark of night
With slippy gums,
Under my shoes.

Nimble to forest of shadow
To rest my brow,
With mouth I sing
To dream that ring.

I trow my heart to God with plea
In kneel till flea,
With joy i feel
My dream is real.

E.g 2

I NEED SOMEONE

I need someone to hold me tight
in silence of dark,
Who won’t go ’way
At break of day.

Someone whose love will mend the seams
Of broken dreams,
And give me back
The trust I lack.

For love, it holds the magic key
To set me free,
To heal my soul
And make me whole.

Thee poets and poetesses, its simple and beautiful. Try it out let's see what you got.

noble cares.

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Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by noble4d(m): 1:00pm On Nov 24, 2014
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Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by OMA4U(m): 7:57pm On Nov 24, 2014
I have got a lot to write. I will make sure I find time to write using these forms.

Noble4d, check this out

Grave of Beauty

I once saw an old man, a wayfarer, walking
Along the boulevard of loneliness of countryside roads
With hysterical laughter graced his lips

Wait! Old man, why art thou laughing in this forest wilds?

"Son, do you not know that when elders sweat
while they speak, it's not the salty liquid that trickles out
It is tears that flows from their grievous heart"

"Son, the death of canary digs the grave of beauty
So many lost buckles in the sandals of a cobbler
Black volcanic ashes, soon, will cloud our mansion"

Oh! Old man, why is thy teeth so clenched?

"Son, do you not see the squalling wind besiege our mansion?
Hurly-burly, hullabaloo shroud the hushed hush of peaceful serene
Backlash, balderdash taint the beautiful minds"

"Son, the rubber that binds our broomsticks is torn
Conflicts amidst the kings-let shaking our mansion
Nose-diving into filthy, green water of tadpoles"

Old man, Why art thou laughing again?

"Ahem, I am a little fragment of the mansion
My voice may never be hearkened unto
I only babble to shroud the tears on my lashes"

"If by chance, a new mansion is erected
I shall rejoice with you in the underworld
Where hopeless hope transcend me into"

If by chance, a new mansion is erected
Flinty rainbow scenes will sprout again
Phoenix will arise; Beauty will be exhumed from her grave
Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by joseph1832(m): 9:44pm On Nov 24, 2014
noble4d:


Its beautiful bro, but have problems with your punctuations. There are places in your Epitaph that full stop is not required e.g lines 2-4.
Men or men, this punctuation of a thing is giving me nightmares... If I was writing an essay, its a walk in the park but when it comes to poems... Jesus!.
Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by Nobody: 11:26pm On Nov 24, 2014
Noble is there any type of poem that focuses only on rhymes
E.G
Pound the alarm
So its sound shall be loud
Loud enough to cause wound
In a toddlers ear.

Thanks
Re: Rudiments Of Poetry by Nobody: 11:27pm On Nov 24, 2014
joseph1832:
Men or men, this punctuation of a thing is giving me nightmares... If I was writing an essay, its a walk in the park but when it comes to poems... Jesus!.
am also facing similar problems when composing a poem.

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