It was quite a sunny afternoon, but it didnt seem to matter as the Briggs family were having a swell time. They were at the exquisite garden of the Hotel De La Palm, one of the biggest hotels in PortHarcourt built and owned by the Briggs. The hotel which only came into business few years back was already making waves and taking over the garden city. Its pool and garden area which is the most prestigious area of the hotel was its centre of attraction. The landscape of the garden was successfully drawn and designed by one of the best thriving architectural firms in Abuja hence its beauty. The family had just had a dip in the pool and was relaxing at the garden to a lunch of chinese fried rice and grilled chicken. Mr and Mrs Briggs were all smiles as they ate stealing glances at each other once in a while. Daniel seemed to be the happiest teen alive at that moment because that was how he had dreamed for his family to be; peaceful and loving. He had wished a million times to be born poor if only he could experience the love and bond of a family, he didnt even mind giving up his inheritance just to have such, but here he was, having both on a platter of gold. He also was all smiles.
Knock! knock! knock!
He jolted up from bed with a panging ache on his forehead.
"Daniel ,please open the door", his mum said from the other end.
"in a minute", he came down from the bed and tried to place his thoughts,
' so it was just a dream', he muttered utterly disappointed. He tried to recall the events of last night and smiled inwardly. It was still possible, he would suggest it to his father later in the day. He hurriedly made his bed and rushed to open the door. He was stunned at the elegance he beheld at the door. His mom was dressed in a casual ankara gown down fitted her slim fit body. Her hair was neatly packed in a bun, while the fragrance of her designer perfume filled his nose in a warm embrace. She looked breathtaking!.
" WOW!", he exclaimed, unable to keep it in.
"can i at least come in and have a seat before you eat me up with your eyes", she replied calmly , letting out a mild laugh while she strolled into his room.
Daniel had always admired his mum. 'beautiful' was such an understatement to describe his mum. He wondered why his dad still treated her the way he did. On countless occasions while with his mum he had witnessed how men drooled over her. One had even walked up to them while they were shopping and offered to pay for all they bought. His mum had politely thanked him and turned him down. He had even referred to Daniel as her brother and argued fervently that she was not a married woman. It had been a long day as the man had stood his ground on having a date with his mum. It had taken te help of the security personnels at the store to keep the man off them. Since that day, the respect he had for his mum grew to another level as he admired the way she turned other goodlooking, even more wealthy, caring and loving men on a daily basis just to stick with his father who took her for granted. Not that his father was badlooking himself as he: Daniel had inherited his looks and complexion from his father. He wondered if any girl could love him as much as his mum loved his dad. Jolting back to reality he turned once more to stare at his mum.
"And where is my mother going this early dressed up looking gorgeous?" he asked with his hands in his pyjama jumper.
" have you looked at the time?, and since when did you start skipping classes?", his mum asked sternly
confusd, he turned to look at the wall clock that hung on his wall.
9:15, Christ!, he was 15 minutes late already for classes, he had skipped school yesterday and wasnt ready to miss today's lectures. He frantically broke into a run, heading to his bathroom.
" am going to the supermarket, do i pick you up after classes?" she shouted as he had run on the shower.
" no mum, i would be hanging out with Tim after classes, can i drive instead?" he sreamed back
" not until you're 18 son", she picked up her bag and made to leave the room.
" be good and try to come home early, love you", with that she left the room.
He rushed out and creamed himself. Thank God for his policy of always preparing what to wear beforehand, he slipped into a blue jean trouser and a red Lacoste T-shirt. He was a black suede shoe and carried his laptop bag and with that he was out. Groaning within himself he ran back upstair/ and picked up his phone. He took a taxi straight to computer school. After computer school he buzzed Timothy to meet him at Genesis Deluxe Cinema which was actually their favorite hang out spot. On getting there he ordered for native soup and semovita. He was really hungry as he didnt take breakfast before leaving the house. He took a seat at the far end of the restaurant and was chatting on whatsapp. He heard a familiar voice and looked up to see his father eating and laughing with a strange woman at a table opposite his. With rage and anger he stormed out.

Captivating,keep it coming.

He got up and was about to leave when he sighted Timothy strolling in. His friend sighted him from afar and walked up to meet him. On a second thought he decided to stay back and observe things for himself. Timothy drew his seat and sat down, surprised at the look on his friends face he called at him getting no response. Daniel seemed to be hooked on to something. He followed the eyes of his friend an was stunned at what he saw. He was filled with rage and anger.
"was this the gist you texted me about last night?", he asked calmly looking intensely at his friend.
Daniel shook his head slowly unable to talk as his gaze was fixed solely on his dad. He had decided to wait, to be sure, he didnt want to assume things because she might as well just be a friend or a business partner. It was just lunch, it was not a big deal. He hoped it had better not be what he was thinking.
His order had arrived but he had lost his appetite. He intended to walk up to his father to confront him but thought against it. He sized the lady up, she was pretty but could not even measure up to his mother. She was fair in complexion ansd quite tall, taller than his mum by far. Although his mum was 5'3 this woman could measure up to 5'11. She put on a red gown which was obviously that of her 12 year old as it hugged her body as revealing all of her God given talents for the whole world to see. Although the colour blended well with her skin. She was also heavily made up like she was going for a carnival anytime soon. Her laughter pierced his ears as it was very loud and sounded like the croaking of a frog. She had been stealin glances at him ever since he walked into the restaurant. She had even winked at him once. He was sure she didnt realise who he was or what his relationship with her companion was. His father seemed to be pleased with all this as he was laughing and visibly having a good time. He couldn't help but compare her to his mum, although she was light in complexion and obviously tall, he would still prefer his petite and dark skinned mother anytime. He had a thing for dark skinned, petite girls.
What he saw next almost made him turn over his table if not for Timothy who was swift enough to hold him down. His father had hed a glass of juice to his companion, something he had never done to his mother, even during their pretend dinner whenever a relative or friend was having dinner with them. He proceeded to peck the lady on her cheek while she smiled sheepishly. That was enough proof, his father was having an affair and cheating on his mother. Was this why he always treated them lie outcasts?, because of this caked-up missy?.
He loathed the man he was seeing in front of him. Just when he thought everything in their family was turning around for good. He had imagined the look his mother would have when they will inform her of the family outing, probably vacation. He decided to try once more and dialed his father's line and He picked on the first ring
"hello dad, good afternoon", he said trying to hide his anger and be as calm as possible.
"daniel, let me talk to you later, am presently in a meeting". He said and hung up without hearing from the other side.
TRAGIC FLAW!
He made up his mind and got up, Timothy who had been staring at his friend stood up after him and held him.
" i have to do this man,", he said calmly trying to free himself from the grip of his friend.
" just calm down Danny, you dont have to make a scene." replied Tim still holding unto his friend, unsure of what his friend was about to do. He was scared of the look in the eyes of his friend. They spat fire, something he had never seen before in all their years of friendship. He was shocked to see the ever quiet and shy Daniel transformed into something else.
Daniel freed himself from his friend's grip and walked up to his father's table. Timothy made to follow him but changed his mind and sat down instead to watch his friends actions.
"Good day sir" Daniel grinned, on getting to the table. He almost burst into laughter at what his father's face had turned into at the mere sight of him. He turned to glance at his father's companion. On a more closer look she was actually pretty, she seemed to be advertising her dentists work as she was smiling sheepishly at him like she had never seen a handsome 17 year old before.
" I see your meeting is actually going well, well i'll leave you to settle your work as i can see you have your hands full", he spat with disgust.
" have a nice day DAD", he said stressing on the last word. He turned to see the shock written on the lady's face. With a smirk on his lips, he walked up to the counter and made some orders and strolled back to his seat. He could feel 2 pairs of eyes trailing him but he ignored it. On getting to his friend, he just smiled at him and Timothy understanding his friend smiled back. Their food arrived and they ate and left the place. On his way home one thing was stuck on his mind.
'WHY DO MEN CHEAT?'

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He had been calling for over 2weeks but she chose to ignore. How long would she continue to deceive herself. She really liked Daniel but she didnt want to ruin her future, not like she was interested in going into a relationship but he was causing her to be distracted from her school work,career and virtually everything. Funny enough she hadn't even met him before and she was already drooling over him and was beginning to even dream about him. She had just written her final paper for the session. She turned to look at her classmates who were in a frenzy, she laughed at their stupidity. If they were this excited about rounding up just a term paper what would they do after their ssce?, she asked no one in particular.
" what are you thinking about?", Dorcas caught up on her, jolting her back to reality.
" whats wrong with you?, you startled the hell out of me", she screamed back at her, simple transferring aggression.
" who u dey form accent for?, see this one o, gerrahia jhoor", Dorcas simple shoved her off. Precious had really been doubting her frienddhip with Dorcas for a while now. She was practically at the bottom of the class although she had tried assisting her a couple of times, the girl didnt seem to care about her grades. They had not been that close for a while and had not been in talking terms since the exams started. Precious had practically shut her out so she could focus on her exams and Dorcas who seemed to understand had let her be. Now the exams were over and she was back for her bookworm friend.
" the bash is this friday o," , dorcas shrugged at her friend who was busy with her phone. Phones was not much of a problem as exams were now over.
" what are you talking about?", precious asked nonchalantly, eyes still fixed on her phone as she was playing a game on her phone.
" Royalties party nah, the one for their passing out students, i thought you said you wanted to attend", Dorcas replied picking out dirt from her friend's hair.
Precious looked up immediately. She had even forgot about the party. She weighed her options, she really wanted to attend that party, her curiosity was high. Considering that the party was to be held in a hotel, she felt it wasnt a place for a christian teen to be in.
" am not going", she replied, not wanting to look at her friend. Dorcas noticing the change in her friend held her hands.
" Babe, are you okay?", she asked feeling concerned.
" am fine, i just feel thats not a place for a christian. At that point Dorcas burst into laughter.
"christian ke!" , she jeered at precious.
" its now you know that youre a christian, when you were talking about going and all that you forgot about your christianity abi, when you were claiming about how you want to kiss Daniel you forgot you were a born again, abeg free me jhoor, speaking of which, how is Daniel, been a while since you spoke about him?".
Precious although angry at Dorcas ' outburst found herself smiling at the mention of his name. She was about to reply when her phone started vibrating, she glanced at her phone and saw who was calling. It was Daniel. She had really missed him. She glanced at Dorcas who was urging her on to pick the call.
"Hello".
" hello, precious; how are you?",
" am fine dear", hesitating before saying the last word.
" Am good", came the reply. She was quiet for over 10 seconds not knowing what to say.
" We need to talk, where are you?", he replied calmly.
" Am in school, why are you asking?", she said turning to look at Dorcas who was curious to know what the lovebirds were talking about.
" can i see you?", he asked calmly again.
She glanced at her wristwatch, it was 1:33. They had rounded up their exams 2 hours ago but were not allowed to leave school till 2pm when school will be over.
" i cant see you, i said am in school", she stood up and left her classroom to the back of the school where she can speak comfortably and of course Dorcas followed her.
" okay, precious, why have you been ignoring me for over 3 weeks, i tried calling you but you either ignored my call or didnt talk freely. If am bugging you or anything, you should say it instead of making me feel like a fool.?", he ratted on.
"Am sorry, i've been busy with my exams and all that, i didnt mean to ignore you or anything, am really sorry".
"...i know we haven't even met before and all that but i have to admit it, i really care about you", he continued.
"okay i have heard,", she said
" baby, can i ask for a favour?", he said.
"yes, go on"
" i will like you to be there for my graduation party this friday, am sure youre aware of it, please i will like you you to be by my side through out the party".
She was silent, she was torn in between two worlds.
"hello, are you there". She was jolted back to reality by a slap from Dorcas.
" i cant, i cant be there, a lot of things might happed and i dont want to be a part of it.
" i promise you nothing would go wrong, i would be there remember, please?"
"If you insist", she shrugged.
"Thanks"

"Thanks baby, i will call you back later", he replied dappily over the phone.
"okay, bye", she hung up and turned to look at Dorcas who was grinning from ear to ear.
"What are you smiling for?", precious asked.
" why wont i smile, madam christian, abeg come lets talk about what we will wear. Today is wednesday and we have just tomorow left, thank God this exam is over so we have enough time on our hands". She was talking so fast precious was scared she would bite her tongue.
" Excuse me, We?. Dont tell you plan on attending too?", she turned to look at her friend in the eye.
" of course, remember good friends never let their friends do stupid things ALONE", she replied laughing.
Precious pondered on what her friend had just said, what she was about doing was indeed stupid. What would people say if they saw her coming out from such a place at such an hour. It was even going to be a night party for that matter.
" Dorcas are you sure we should go for this stuff, besides what excuse do we give to our parents?", Precious asked feeling unsure of the whole thing.
" i cant believe that you of all peple would be asking that question, besides youre making it look like a big deal, if i remember correctly, you said it was just a party right, stop working yourself up, besides we wont stay long, we should be out of there before 7-8, so i dont see any reason for fear.", she brushed it off.
Precious saw reasons with her and decided to attend, what more could possibly happen, she thought. She made up her mind not to drink or anything so she would be fine, besides she had Daniel by her side.
" youre right, lets go inside jhoor", with that the two friends laughed and went inside, they had a lot of planning to do.

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She had been pacing down her room for over 10minutes now. She glanced at the time it was 3:40. She sat down on the bed and then moved on to the chair. She was deep in thought. She pondered on the dream her mum had had last night and had told her about. She claimed to have seen precious in a room, in a pool of her own blood, she seemed to have been raped. It wasnt the first time her mum had said such. At first she was terrified considering the fact that she was about to attend a party she knew she shouldnt attend and was still weighing her options. She had immediately called Dorcas who brushed it off claiming it was just a mere dream. They had arranged to meet at the junction by 4:00pm from whence they would board a taxi to Clarence Hotels, which was where the party was scheduled to hold. She had earlier packed some extra clothes in her bag because she had told her mum she was going for prayer meeting by 5pm in church. She had all she needed in her bagpack. A multi coloured flowered chiffon top, black leggings, a pair of pink flat shoe, perfume and a make up kit. Dorcas had asked her to wear bum shorts but she had declined. She couldnt imagine herself wearing such, besides she didnt even have one for starters.
" this one youre moving to and fro like this, are you a pendulum?", asked the ever mischievous Deborah.
" i dont blame you", she hissed.
She glanced at the clock. 4:00, it was time. She picked up her bag and was about to leave when the missile took off.
"Wait for me, am going with you". She turned to see Deborah packing her bible and church notebook inside a handbag and wearing her sandals.
" who are you following?, its definitely not me". With that she made to dash out of the house when Deborah held her back.
"mum!", precious screamed in pain. Deborah who had meant to hold her by a dress had pulled her hair instead.
" what is it, what is it again". Yelled their mum from the sitting room. Precious picked her bag and sprinted to the sitting room with Deborah fastly at her heels.
" deborah said she wants to go for prayer meeting, since when didn she start going for such, besides its not for children", ranted precious, she didnt have a specific excuse to give, she had not expected any obstruction.
"who are you referring to as a child, besides, the last time i checked you were not up to 18", snapped Deborah.
" are you still standing here or youre not ready to go again?", replied their mother calmly.
With a smile on her face she stuck out a tongue at Deborah and walked away.
" And where are you going to?, my friend would you get back inside!", yelled their mum at Deborah who was about following precious.
Once she was outside she didnt even look back as she didnt want any form of hinderance again. She glanced at her wristwatch, 4:15. Dorcas must have been waiting for her, and with that she half-walked, half-ran to the junction. She sighted her from afar and burst into laughter at the sight she was seeing. Dorcas was in a long flowing gown that was down to her toes and looked really funny. She wondered what happened to her decision to wear bum shorts.
" nawa for you o, just take a look at the time", a visibly angry Dorcas said on getting to her.
Precious glanced at her watch once more,4:35, geez, she didnt know she had taken such a long time in walking down.
" sorry jhoor, It was Deborah o, please lets go before someone i know sees me here. They immediately flagged down a taxi and jumped in after settling the price with the driver. Once they were in Dorcas got into action. Within the next five minutes she was clad in a white bum short, a red crop top and a red sneaker. She was so fast i would doubt if the driver noticed that someone in his vehicle had changed.
" why are you staring at me like that, arent you going to change?, dont tell me youre going there dressed like that?", asked Dorcas who was already putting on make up.
" dont you think youre dressed rather too..."
" slutty?", completed Dorcas. She laughed " not at all girl, its a party you know, not a choir rehearsal", we burst into laughter. In 15 minutes we were both done with our clothes and make up. I couldnt help but admire myself in the mirror, i looked beautiful, even the way Dorcas was smiling at me was enough to assure me.
" we don reach Clarence hotels o", the driver announced. The two girls looked outside the window and saw a group of dressed up teens crowding in front of the hotel. They were paying to get in. She glanced round to see if she could see Daniel but he wasnt anywhere close.
" make una come down nah, i say we don reach", the driver said sounding impatient.
" driver abeg wait small, we never see person wey we dey wait for", Dorcas replied him. Precious brough out her phone and dialled Daniel's number. He picked at the first ring.
" baby, how are you?, am sorry i havent called you all day i,,,,"
" am outside the hotel, come and pick me", she cut in and with that she hung up.

I know its short but just manage it, Will update tomoro,,,,,,, thanks guys, have a lovely weekend

Theeldah:
I know its short but just manage it, Will update tomoro,,,,,,, thanks guys, have a lovely weekend

You are still making the mistake of switching of narrating as an omniscient narrator to being a first person narrator.
From you last update, it was Precious, Deborah, their mother and Dorcas. Then in last few paragraphs, it changed to we(Precious and Dorcas) and I(Precious)

I am suspecting you to be Prcious tho... lol

But, please stick to one narrative technique. And if you must switch, you can always write 'Precios pov' at the start of each update and other times, you can write freely. But the case of switching in one single update is kinda unacceptable.


PS: I hope my little correction is not too destructive or rude? Forgive me if it is.

Waiting for the next updates

Captivating,keep it coming. Kudos.

Quite intriguing! Keep it up.

D9ty7:

You are still making the mistake of switching of narrating as an omniscient narrator to being a first person narrator.
From you last update, it was Precious, Deborah, their mother and Dorcas. Then in last few paragraphs, it changed to we(Precious and Dorcas) and I(Precious)

I am suspecting you to be Prcious tho... lol

But, please stick to one narrative technique. And if you must switch, you can always write 'Precios pov' at the start of each update and other times, you can write freely. But the case of switching in one single update is kinda unacceptable.


PS: I hope my little correction is not too destructive or rude? Forgive me if it is.

Waiting for the next updates

thanks so much for the correction, it wasnt destructive or rude. I will try my best to stick to one although i still dont really understand the techniques.
Maybe am indeed precious...lol
will update by 12pm

*****PRECIOUS*****
I looked out once more to observe the scenario. The people crowded in front of the hotel were all teenagers, i guessed they were all not more than 19. They were were all looking bright and radiant clad in their own pattern of attire. Dorcas was rather dressed decently judging from the various kinds of things some girls were putting on, they could hardly be referred to as clothes. They didnt even seem to care considering the fact that the hotel was located on a major road. That was basically the reason i chose to stay in the car while waiting for Daniel. I didnt want someone i know, or someone who knows me instead to see me amongst the people crowding in front of the hotel or better still, i didnt want a passerby to refer to me the same way i was referring to them now. Who was i kidding anyway?, i was basically here for the same thing as them, to Party. I was beginning to regret my action once more, this wasnt my thing, sneaking out and lying, i decided to put everything behind me and just enjoy myself, besides it was too late to turn back now. I was jolted back to reality when i felt someone tap my window. I looked up to see a young guy smiling at me. He said a few things to the driver and handed over some money to him. I took a deep breath, opened the door and came down. On a closer look, Daniel was cuter than i expected although much more taller as i wasnt even up to his shoulders. He was quite tall for a 17 year old. He was dark although not as dark as i was. He was clad in a white and black striped Giorgio Armani T-shirt, a black jean and a black vans shoe. He was dressed simple but was stunning. I turned to see Dorcas staring at him like he was one god who had just fallen from the sky. i tapped her to bring her back to her senses. I turned to realise he had come with company. A fair looking guy who although was cute, could not measure up to Daniel. They were dressed similarly, something i found quite childish.
"Hello Precious", Daniel waved at me coming for a hug. I swiftly took his hand in a handshake and smiled sheepishly, knowing fully well i had embarassed him in the presence of his friend. He didnt seem to mind as he shook me, smiling back.
"You look good", i said still admiring him. He laughed so much i started feeling uneasy, wondering if i had played a wrong card by complimenting him first.
" Thanks though, he shrugged, You look stunning baby", he said squeezing my hand a little.
"thanks", i muttered , smiling sheepishly.
" You must be Dorcas, its nice to meet you", he said and made to hug her, Dorcas being herself, hugged him, although rather too tight for my liking.
" Girls, i would like you to meet my bestfriend, Frank, Frank meet my baby, Precious and her friend Dorcas. I turned and smiled at him while Dorcas shook hands with him, smiling back. After the introductions were made, Daniel took us in. I was already getting nervous standing so long in front of the hotel. He seemed to be quite acquainted with the bouncers as they didnt even bother asking questions and let us in. I felt like a midget holding hands and walking beside Daniel as he was very tall. I wasnt surprised at his height because all the guys that had ever taken interest in me had always been tall. We got to a table and Daniel ordered for some drinks. I sat close to Daniel while Dorcas was with Frank. The whole place was kind of dark as the only light illuminating the hall was from a spherical ball of light. The music that was blaring from the speakers was so loud that i could barely hear a word Daniel was saying. When the drinks arrived, i declined, because i had made up my mind not to take any alcoholic drink. After much begging from Daniel, i opted out for a bottle of Smirnoff ice while Daniel, frank and Dorcas were happily drinking from a bottle of chocolate flavoured Magic Moment. I watched as they mixed it with cranberry before drinking. I got the shocker of my life when Daniel brought out a packet of cigarrette, lighted a stick and started smoking.
"So you smoke?", i asked, still shocked at what i was seeing.
"Obviously, he said, smiling at me, do you want a stick?. I looked downward to see what he was giving to me. I shook my head and made to sip from my drink. It wasnt as pleasant as i expected and dropped the glass almost immediately. Daniel laughed so hard i was red with embarassment. He stood up and motioned for me to join him on the dance floor. The hall was filled to the brim with teenagers all dancing, drinking and smoking, while some were doing all kinds of stuff at dark corners. He made me drink half a glass of his drink before leading me to the dance floor. Almost immediately, the crowd went wild in jubilation as the Dj changed the song to Jagaban remix by Ycee ft Olamide. I watched as Daniel took over the dance floor with some hit moves as some of the people dancing cheered him on. After dancing for a while he walked up to me and held my waist.

Feeling shy at first precious took her time trying to get used to dancing with Daniel and the music. When she was settled she blew everyone away with her dance moves and charisma. Daniel stared at her with utter shock, he didnt expect such from her.
Precious started laughing at every instance and was starting to feel dizzy. The music was blaring loudly and the dance hall was quite crowded as the party had actually kicked off.
Daniel noticing she was getting drunk got more of his drink and handed her a glass. Precious collected it from him and drained the contents in one gulp.
" Am tired of dancing", she muttered, and was holding onto Daniel for balance.
" but the party is just starting, baby, here", he said, pouring her another glass from the Magic Moment, "this will calm you down". She took the glass once more and drained its content. At this point he leaned over to her and took her lips in his. Stunned at first, she pulled away from his grip. He dragged her back and kissed her again. After struggling with him for a while she gave in and they stood there kissing. Nobody seemed to mind them as everybody was handling their own business. She stopped the kiss and broke free from him. She was beginning to feel really drowsy and made her way back to their table. On getting there she couldnt find Dorcas and Frank. She tried to look for Daniel but he obviously had not followed her back. She saw Dorcas at the far end of the hall giving Frank a lap dance. She was obviously drunk and was also laughing hysterically. She made to go and get Dorcas but was stopped by someone who gripped her hand. She looked up and saw Daniel who was smiling mischeivously at her. He held something that looked like a vase that had pipes attached to it. He took one of the pipes and put it into his mouth sucking on it. After three drags he let out the smoke from his mouth and nostrils. She stared at him as he professionally smoked the shisha for about 5 minutes and drank from his glass. He handed it over to her, curious to know what it tasted like she took a drag. It tasted like strawberry. She took two more drags and let out the smoke. In the next five minutes they were sharing the shisha and drinking. He had tried severally to kiss her but she had refused.
" Baby whats wrong now", he said frustrated after trying to kiss her once more.
" was this the reason why you brought me here?, just to kiss me?", she asked calmly, she had taken the cigarette from him and was smoking like an expert. She had not even coughed at the first drag as she had expected.
" why are you acting childish now", he asked begging like a baby who had been depraved from breastmilk.
" Leave me the hell alone", she snapped at him. He stood up in anger and walked away. After smoking two more sticks, she picked up her bag and brought out her phone. She had 2 missed calls from her mum. She glanced at her wristwatch and her heart flew to her mouth when she saw the time. It was 7:15. The prayer meeting was to last from 5 - 7pm. She stood up and made to look for Dorcas but she wasnt anywhere in the hall. Daniel and Frank too were nowhere to be found. The crowd was less now as many people had gone, few were still dancing and some others were making out at various corners. After frantically searching for them for over 10 minutes, she got scared and picked up her phone to call Dorcas, she called severally but there was no response from the other side. She decided to go and search the restrooms. she got to to the female restroom and to her dismay, Dorcas wasnt there. It had begun drizzling and looking at the sky, it looked like a heavy downpour was to begin soon.
She had already decided to leave the venue when she decided to try once more. She turned around and headed to the male restroom. On getting there, she was disgusted by the sight of teens acting as animals, as if their sex engines had been set on overdrive. She had made to turn back when something caught her attention.
" What the hell is going on here!", she screamed at no one in particular. She watched in disgust as they dismantled from each other and made to put their clothes back to order. She stared at the face of the girl she called her bestfriend and that of the guy who had claimed to love her. Blinded by anger and fury, she rushed back inside, picked up her stuff and dashed out of the hotel. How could they disprespect her in such a manner?, Was it because she had refused giving herself to him in such a low manner?, he had jumped into the nearest skirt he saw?. And why would Dorcas give in so cheaply?. So many questions flooded her 15 year old mind and as such she didnt hear the car horn, she didnt hear the screeching sound, she didnt see the flashlights or hear the screams of people. It all happened so fast, too fast, the driver lost control. Crash!
*One should never ignore the sound counsel of one's parent*

Okay, you did well with the first post by employing the first person narrative technique. But, in the second post, you switched.
I will suggest that you stick to one technique, and if there is the need to switch, make sure it is not in a continuation like in the last updates. It would have been better if the last update continued from Precios pov.
There is still room for improvement tho. I am learning a thing or two from you too.

Nice story we've here...I don spread my mat...no shifting for anybody.

If I may say, since you're finding it difficult maintaining the story either in first person or second person, why don't you tell the story entirely in first person using different characters' pov? Like for each scene, you first indicate who's telling the story by using things like PRECIOUS' POV. That way the whole story would be in first person...

Just so you know, there are two Daniels in the story

Just so you know, there are two Daniels in the story thanks for the corrections, i will try sticking to the omnicient narrator

She could hear voices. She opened her eyes to see herself in a room. It was a big room, painted in pink and purple. The floors were neatly tiled and the walls were decorated with various artworks and designs. The room was tastefully furnished with an Lg plasma tv, home theatre set, air conditioner and by the side of the room was a reading table and chair. She made to stand up but was hit by a sharp pain in her knee, and then it hit her. The memories of all that happened came flooding back. The last thing she remembered was hearing a loud sound. She tried leaving the bed where she was and limped to her bag that was on the table. She ransacked her bag for her phone but couldnt find it anywhere. She heard footsteps and turned in time to see the door open.
A young girl of about 13 years of age walked in carryng a tray. On sighting her the young girl smiled and walked up to her. On getting to the table, she dropped the tray which contained a first aid box and some drugs.
" good evening, she greeted politely, i can see that youre awake, how do you feel?"
precious just stared at the young girl without saying a word.
" Where am i?", she managed to say. With that the young girl ran out of the room, much to surprise of Precious. She looked at her right knee that had been bandaged due to the injury she had incured during the accident and inspected it. It hurt badly and had prevented her from walking properly, hence her limping. She stared at what she was wearing and wondered how it got on her because it definitly wasnt hers. She was clad in a white singlet and a black short. Just then the door opened and a young woman walked in followed closely by the girl that was with her earlier. She stared at the woman who was smiling at her.
"Thank God you're awake!", exclaimed the woman in excitement. She walked up to precious and put her hand on her forehead.
" the fever has subsided, how do you feel?", she asked stll smiling.
Precious instead of answering, stared at the woman. She was indeed a very beautiful woman. She was dark in complexion and her colour shone, it wasn't like that of other dark people Precious had known, not even her self. She was petite and although slightly taller than Precious. Her white gapped teeth was flawless and even complimented her more as she smiled. Precious couldnt help but admire the young woman who was adorned in a purple long flowing dress that complimented her skine tone.
Sensing the uneasiness of the young girl, she walked up to her and put her hands on the young girl's shoulders.
" Am sorry but you smashed your phone during the accident and there was no way to get to your parents, here, she said, handing her own phone over to Precious, type in your parent's phone number so that we can reach them, am sure they would be worried sick by now".
Precious held the phone in her hand and started staring at the woman once more.
" Please where am I?", she managed to say.
" youre in my house, i accidentally hit you with my car when you were trying to cross the road, i decided to bring you to my house and called my doctor who treated your wounds and examined you. He left a while ago after saying it was a minor issue and you would be awake soon", the woman replied.
" How long have i been here?", Precious asked.
" Well, its almost 11pm now so we can say youve been unconscious for about 3hours now".
"What!", gasped precious, i need to get home now, my parents would kill me", ranted precious and she started crying.
" calm down dear, thats why i need to speak with them, at least to inform them that you are safe", replied the woman while trying to calm the young girl down.
Precious immediately dialed her mother's phone number and forwarded the call, she handed over the phone to the woman and resumed crying. She regretted everything, the party, Daniel, everything. She pitied her family and knew they would have been worried sick about her. She had never stayed out this late, never. Her mother would have cried her eyes out, Deborah would have created a scene. She imagined what her father would have gone through by now. She wasnt a favourite daughter of his but she knew what she had put that man through a number of times. Refusing to be consoled by the little girl, Precious wept profusely, regretting her actions and cursing the day she met Daniel, cursing the day she agreed to attend the party. Just the the woman handed over the phone to her.
" your mum will like to speak with you". Scared and happy at the same time she collected the phone and was about to apologise to her mum when she heard sobbing coming from the phone.
" My baby, how are you doing,", her mum said in between sobs. Precious who had stopped crying earlier broke into tears once more hearing her mum cry.
"Am sorry mummy, she managed to say, Am sorry for putting you through this, Am sor..."
" its not your fault, its not your fault, Precious, am sorry that youre going through pain. First thing tomorow morning we would come and pick you, try and

Rest my child, i have spoken to the woman, she promised to take care of you. May my God protect you and keep you safe in Jesus name. Before precious could reply 'Amen', the line went dead.
" am sure everything will be okay dear, just try and eat something okay. With that the young girl walked in with a tray of food.
" Thank you madam, but am not hungry". Said precious in between sobs.
" no darling, you have to, so that you can take your medication". With that, she spoon fed the crying girl. When she was done , the young girl, whose name was Clara, bade Precious goodnight and took the dishes away.
" i know youre tired and need to rest, but do you mind telling me what happened?", she said looking intensely at the young girl. She really pitied the girl and was interested in her.
After much persuasion, Precious poured out her heart to the young woman, she talked about her challenges as a young growing teen, she talked about her life as a dance Minister, Her family, her academics and everything that happened at the party. By the time she was done, she had stopped crying and was all smiles.
"That was indeed something, she said, stunned at the end of Precious story.
The woman looked at the young girl in front of her and was amazed at how some people could be so identical, first in looks and then character and lastly history. It was too bad that she had towed the wrong path at her teen age and had walked straight on without looking back. She was happy however that the girl in front of her had made a right turn early. She swore to ensure she helps in maintaining that decision for the young girl not to end up the way she did.
" There's something i will like to tell you someday, she said looking into Precious eyes, but for Now you need to rest", The young woman put the girl to bed and made to leave the room.
" Thank you very much madam, thank you for everything", Precious called as she was about to leave the room.
"You are welcome dear, besides you dont have to call me that, she said laughing, you can simply call me Mrs Briggs". She said walking out of the room.
***Two heads they say, is better than one***

Happy sunday everyone, please guys i intend changing the title of the story because i dont feel it suits the storyline that much. I will like you guys to help contribute your opinions and maybe possible title. Thanks

Theeldah:
Happy sunday everyone, please guys i intend changing the title of the story because i dont feel it suits the storyline that much. I will like you guys to help contribute your opinions and maybe possible title. Thanks

You alone know the storyline and how the story ends, so you'll be in a better position to decide the title. Maybe let's hear the titles you've in mind and see if we can help...

******Flashback*****
She walked faster and faster, constantly looking back to see if it was still there. When she could take it no more the scared Schoolgirl broke into a run and didnt look back until she was safely in the confines of her compound. With her hand on her chest and her back against the gate she took a deep breath still panting deeply.
That car!, she thought. It was the same car, it was exactly the same car that has been trailing her for days now. On several occasions, she had planned to walk up to the car to enquire about it but had changed her mind due to the growing number of incidents taking place in the community. Girls were kidnapped, raped and even murdered on weekly basis. She kept on wondering who was following her and why they would do so.
She wasn't from a rich home so it definitely wasn't kidnappers. She and her poor mother had done nobody any wrong so it defintely wasnt assasins. Ritualists!, yes, they had to be Ritualists.
Shocked at her revelation, Sophia ran inside her room and bolted the door. Once she was convinced she was safe, she took of her school uniforms and went to soak it at the backyard. She strolled to the kitchen and warmed the left-over soup that she and her mother had eaten the previous night. When it was ready, she sat down and ate her lunch of fufu and vegetable soup. It wasn't much of a pleasant meal but the young girl ate it joyfully. She was thankful to have seen such a food because on a normal day she would have been drinking garri. Her mum was lucky to have caught a squirel few days ago and had sold some parts as bush meat at the market where she sold tomatoes and pepper to make a living. That had given them some money with which she was able to add to what she had previously to pay Sophia's waec fees and prepare the soup.
When she was done eating, she washed the dishes, washed her school uniforms and the clothes her mother had asked her to wash earlier. Satisfied with her work, she strolled into their sitting room to look at the time. It could be described to be a sitting room because it had a plastic chair, an upholstery armchair that had seen better days, a wooden table, a radio set and the wall clock that hung by the wall. Their house was a two-bedroom flat bungalow. It was something to appreciate as it was the only thing her uncles had left for her and her mother after the death of her father 6 years back. The death of her father had been the beginning of their woes as all his properties and belongings were shared by her uncles amongst themselves. Even the store her mother had been managing before his tragic death was confisticated by her said uncles. They even went as far as calling her mother a witch and blaming the death of her father on her mother. Even after their knowledge of the fact that he had died in a tragic motor accident on his way from Onitsha where he had gone to buy goods, they still accused her mother to have instigated the accident.
The time was 4:40. She quickly rushed to the bathroom to have her bath. By the time she was done with having her bath and wearing her clothes it was 5:10, and she dashed out of the house. It was friday and she had to go for choir practice. She had earlier promise her Friend Ify that she would drop by at her place so that they could go together. When she got to her friend's place she knocked at the gate and stood to wait for the gateman to open the gate. After being let in, she walked briskly into the house and was surprised to find the house quiet. She took her time to admire the house once more, despite the fact that she had been there countless times. It was a 4 bedroom- duplex . The sitting room was tastefully furnished ranging from the walls to the furniture and down to the electronics. The floors were tiled with ceramic floor tiles that glistened. Brown leather sofas adorned with various colours of scatter cushion were arranged around a large square glass centre table. That was neatly placed on top of a rug. A bookcase was by the side of the room which was adorned with rows and rows of books. The linen curtains had a rose hue but was strongly coloured in yellow and brown. At the far end of the room stood two tall black speakers for the hometheatre system, decoder, flat screen television and a form of flowery art and close cupboards. She loved everything about the house and couldn't help but compare it to the box in which she and her mother shared. Sophia got angry whenver she visited Ify and saw the luxurious life she was living and had wished countless times to be able to live in such luxury. She do visits the house regularly whenever she was bored or wanted to watch tv but it couldnt be compared to owning and practically living in such. She ran up the stairs to Ify's room and to her surprise found her in front of her dressing table applying make up to her face.
Ify was a light complexioned, slim and tall young girl. At seventeen, she had the height of a twenty-two year old girl.

They had been friends right from their primary school days despte their differences. Ify was beautiful but could never be compared to Sophia. Sophia who was the same age as Ify, was a dark- complexioned, slim but short girl. Sophia was more outspoken, bold and smart, while Ify was a shy, quiet but equally smart girl. Their height difference was very broad but that didnt deter the girls as their friendship had waxed over the years. Being an only child, Ify had all she could ever want because her parents had showered all their love, affection and money on her making sure that she lacked nothing. When things had gone rough for Sophia and her family, Ify had coaxed her parents into rendering assistance to Sophia and her mum. Although she had refused the money that was offered her at first due to the little bit of pride that was still in her after all her husband's properties had been confisticated by her in-laws. She had to accept it When she started finding things difficult and that was what she used in starting up her tomato and pepper business. Ify's parents had tried doing more for her but she had turned down the offer, claiming to be satisfied with what she was earning from her business, something that Sophia had detested but could do nothing about.
" Ify what are you doing now", asked the confused Sophia.
" and what does it look like am doing, madam Sophia? Am putting on make up of course". Replied Ify while applying her eyeliner.
Sophia watched her friend disfigure herself all in an attempt to properly apply eyeliner, something most girls, including herself do. She let out a giggle at the sight.
" have you forgotten we have choir practice today?, besides you look all dressed up, do you have other plans?. Sophia asked staring at her friend.
" Oh that, i forgot to tell you earlier, i wont be able to attend today", replied Ify nonchalantly, while she applied her Sleek powder.
" What?, and you made me come all the way down here for nothing, knowing fully well that you house is a different direction from the church". Sophia complained, visibly disappointed.
"Look Sophia, am really sorry about that", ify said and walked up to her friend," i didnt mean to stress you that way, but there was no way to contact you,its not like you have a phone". She said.
Sophia noticed the mock in her tone as she said the last sentence and was hurt.
" Am going to see Tony", Ify said walking towards her fully stocked wardrobe.
"Tony?, since when did you start visiting him?", Sophia asked puzzled.
" Well, since he became my boyfriend!", snapped Ify.
" What!", exclaimed Sophia, utterly shocked at the outburst of her friend. She took time to process all that she had just heard and tried linking the chains.
" was this the reason for your changed attitude towards me?", she asked walking up to Ify who had already changed into a blue flowered gown. "through out this week you've been avoiding me, and even when i try to talk to you youre always acting strange, was this the reason?", sophia asked looking intensely at her friend.
Ify who couldnt look at her friend in the eyes held her hand.
" Am sorry if i had been avoiding you, but i knew you would advise me against dating Tony. I really love him but i couldnt tell you because i didnt know how you would feel or react to it."
" you have told me at least, how do you think i feel now being in the dark about the whole thing?". Sophia said visibly hurt. She made to leave the room in anger when Ify caught her hand.
" Please forgive me Sophie, dont leave like that". She pleaded, " Tony is a very nice person and he told me he loves me, i know i love him too. I only said yes to him last week,Am really sorry Sophia". Sophia stared at her friend Ify and couldnt help but feel jealous. Ify had everything she, sophia had always wanted, A father, Wealth, height, a Good voice and now she even had a boyfriend. A goodlooking and Rich guy for that matter. Sophia was deeply angry not at the fact that she wasn't told but she was angry at everything that had happened to her and her family.
" i need to go to choir practice" she finally said and walked out on her friend. Ify watched her friend walk away and was deeply sad. She picked up her phone and called Tony that she was on her way to his house. She picked up her purse, made sure her room was in order before leaving the house. She had planned on going to see her friend the next day to inform her of her relationship. She had forgotten she was supposed to go for practice that day and had consented to meeting with Tony. She hated hurting Sophia and could never let a guy come between them. She knew Sophia was quite reserved when it came to guys and was that she wouldnt have consented to her dating Tony. They had promised themselves not to enter into any relationship until they got into the University, but she loved Tony too much to delay the relationship. She had even already kissed him. She resolved to go and see Sophia the next day to settle things.

"Dude am serious, this girl is breathtaking! Damian chatted excitedly "would you believe that i have been trailing her for the past one week now. She's so natural and innocent. Can you believe that on one occasion she broke into a run and ran straight home?". His friend broke into laughter at his revelation.
"You must be kiddin' me" he said in between laughter " Be serious man".
" no jokes man", he said, "i had to stop after that encounter so as to prevent further harm".
" well that admirable but am telling you that this girl am talking about will blow your mind away. She's a goddess of beauty, very smart and very homely. Man, i've known this girl for over seven years now and i can testify to all this. I had even been crushing on her once but didn't have the heart to approach her." He said staring at his friend. " she's this reserved kind of girl and i didnt have the patience to preach so i opted out for someone that wouldnt give me much problems. I know you've got a sugar-coated tongue so getting her might not pose much of a problem to you". He said convincingly. Damian stared back at his friend who was trying so hard to convince him.
"Okay man, i'll give her a try, but am not giving up on mystery girl". He said sipping from his drink.
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Sophia was sitting on her medium sized bed folding the clothes that she had just brought in.
"Please now", Ify begged, " its just a party."
She didnt say a word and continued with what she was doing. When she was done she opened her box, put them in neatly and put the box away.
"What were you saying a while ago?", she said calmly while facing her friend.
" One of tony's friend is having his birthday this wednesday and he is organizing a party to celebrate it. Its gonna be a big party and i want us to go together. Besides, Tony insisted that i bring you", Ify said once more.
" why would Tony insist i come?, besides i dont even know who the celebrant is". Sophia replied nonchalantly. Ify who knew her friend and her insistent nature climed onto the bed and sat facing her.
"Well, he is actually a good friend of Tony. He schools abroad, although he is back on holidays and desided to have the party here. Tony wants you to meet him". Ify replied excitedly.
" whats it with you?, Since you started talking the only thing you've been saying is Tony this and Tony that. Besides, when did you start attending parties?", She asked looking intently at her friend.
" Since i grew up", she said in between laughter, " besides dont forget that he is my boyfriend!", ify snapped at her friend.
" That doesnt make him your husband!". Sophia snapped back at her.
She calmed down and looked up to see her friends countenance. She knew she had hurt Ify with her outburst and made to hold her hands but Ify shifted away and stood up from the bed.
"You know what?, youre just jealous that you dont have a boyfriend!" Ify shot at her.
" Am not!". Sophia shot back.
"Oh yes you are. You're jealous that you cannot get a guy like Tony to ask you out. Since weve known each other, how many guys have approached you?. Youre jealous of me because i keep getting all the guys. You claim to be chaste but what has that gotten you or your mother?. Think Sophia, youre a smart girl, Think!. With that she stormed out of the house leaving a shocked and confused Sophia. She couldn't stop the tears as they flowed freely down her cheeks. She couldnt believe her own bestfriend could say such awful things to her. She pondered on what she had said that had warranted such an outburst from her. Ever since Ify started dating Tony she had changed so much. How could she accuse her of being jealous?. Yes she had envied her wealth , height and she having a boyfriend but not to the point that Ify was driving at. She couldnt help but ponder at all Ify had said earlier. She had wondered why guys were not approaching her but had not thought much about it as it wasnt her priority. Now that Ify had mentioned it she couldnt help but wonder what was wrong with her. Was it her complexion?, or was it her height?. She couldnt help but cry at all was happening to her. First her father's death, their financial challenges and now this. She wondered what kind of love could make Ify forget about all her principles and values. Ify that was even more reserved, calm and quiet than she was had turned into something else. She wondered if she could ever love someone to the extent of dropping all her values and all she holds dear. Sophia wasnt satisfied at her financial status but didnt want to get all the luxury she desired the wrong way. She planned on going to school and making a living

For herself before thinking of even settling down. These and so many thoughts kept pondering her mind as she cried herself to sleep.
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Early the next day, she did all her house chores and helped her mother to prepare breakfast. She went in to have her bath and put on her uniform before taking her breakfast. She left for school quite early, earlier than usual .Her Waec exams were just a few weeks away and everyone was on his or her toes. Nobody wanted to get into the school's black book so late coming wasnt something to consider. She walked into the school's compound at exactly 6:35am. It wasnt surprising as she had severally won the award for the most punctual student every term. The school was a two-storyed building with a bungalow building adjacent it that served as the school Office. It was painted in maroon and pink which was also the colour of the school uniform. It was a pink checked shirt and a maroon skirt and tie. The school has a football field, a basket ball court and also a tennis court. Although the school was well equipped and with standard facilities, the fees were very moderate and affordable. Sophia made to ascend the stairs to her classroom when she heard the screeching of tyres. She turned to see Ify coming down from the passenger's seat of her Father's prado jeep. She was looking smart in her neatly pressed uniform, black socks and black shoes. She wanted to wait for her at the staircase for them to walk to class together but changed her mind after remembering the activities of the previous day.
The morning lessons passed without Sophia hearing anything from Ify. Ify had acted like Sophia didnt exist. Although their seats were beside each other, Ify had not even looked her way. Sophia couldnt believe that Ify had not even felt any remorse at all she said to her talk more of even apologising. When the dismisal bell was rung, she decided to confront her instead.
"Why are you ignoring me Ify", she asked with hands akimbo across her chest.
"what are you talking about?" ify asked nonchalantly.
" so you mean youre just gonna act like nothing happened between us?", a stunned Sophia asked.
Ify made to walk away but was stopped by Sophia who was extremely hurt at Ify ignoring her.
" Okay am sorry if i offended you at my place, i can never be jealous of your relationship", Sophia said with pleading eyes.
" Show me", Ify said plainly folding her hands across her chest.
" Excuse me?", Sophia asked confusingly.
" Prove to me that youre not jealous of my relationship with Tony", she blurted out.
" and how do i do that", Sophia cut in.
" Come to the party with me tomorrow, that way, you will clear all form of doubts from my mind.", Ify said plainly.
Sophia couldnt believe her ears. She stared blankly at the face of the girl she had called friend for over 10 years. She had accused her falsely of being jealous of her relationship and mocked her chastity and the predicament of her family without even the slightest bit of remorse or apology and here she was coaxing her into proving her loyalty to her by forcing her to against her wish. She wanted to openly tell Ify that she doesnt have to prove her loyalty to anyone but she found herself being overpowered by the desire to please her friend. She had grown to love Ify and saw her as much of a sister.
"Okay", she said calmly.
"what?", asked Ify who was stunned at her reply. She hadn't expected this to work, she had expected Sophia to turn her down vehemently but she had to try.
Filled with excitement she hugged her friend.
"Thank you Sophia, i knew i could count on you", she said jumping excitedly.
Sophia although unsure of her decision was happy to have her friend back, yeah she loved her that much.
They decided to walk home together. They would first stop at Sophia's house then head over to Ify's house where they would plan and decide on what to wear. They hadn't gone far when Sophia started walking briskly and was about to break into a run when Ify held her back to enquire.
"They are after me again," she said scared to her teeth. "Who?", Ify asked getting scared and looking around. "Ritualists!", exclaimed a visibly shaken Sophia.
"Ritualists?", Ify exclaimed
"where are they?"
"in that car", Sophia exclaimed pointing at a black Camry that was driving towards them. They had run into an enclosed street to hide at Sophia's outburst of 'ritualists'.
"they have been following me for over a week now", Sophia stated, shaking visibly. Ify was about to probe further when the car swerved into the street in which they were hiding. At that moment, the two girls broke into a run. Ify turned back to see the car in a hot pursuit. Her phone started ringing from inside her school bag but she ignored the call as what mattered to her was her safety. Immediately the car drove past both girls and parked in front of them. Sophia who was more scared amongst the two had her heart in her throat when two guys stepped out.

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They burst into laughter the moment they came down from the car leaving the girls stunned and embarassed. Sophia who was the most confused of the two girls stared at Tony and the young man beside him laughing their hearts out. She glanced at her friend Ify and couldnt help laughing at the sight. The composed and overly calculative Ify was looking like someone that had just encountered a tornado, her hair was a mess, her uniforms was out of place as her tie was behind her and the shirt was out of the skirt. Her black shoes and socks had turned brown after a ruffle with the dusty road. Ify who couldn't help it joined the laughter party.
" What was that all about?", Ify managed to ask to no one in particular after the laughter had subsided. " was that a joke or what?" She asked Sophia.
" Am really confused here Ify. Am sorry if i scared you but it wasn't intentional. I thought......"
" Okay ladies", Tony cut in "I can explain the situation. I guess its simply a case of mistaken identity. Why dont you girls join us, i'll explain on the way". He said walking up to Ify who was already angry. She moved away froom him when he tried to embrace her.
"Baby am sorry now, its not what you think", Tony said pleadingly.
"you couldn't even call me", Ify said making a face at him.
"i tried calling you but you were so engrossed in your race that you didnt bother picking up", he replied and burst into laughter. Ify also joined him in laughter after realising her folly.
While all this was going on, Damian couldn't take his eyes off 'Mystery girl'. She was visibly embarassed and didnt bother to hide it, something he found very cute and admirable. With Tony and his girlfriend engrossed with each other he started feeling uncomfortable as they were standing in the middle of the street.
" Are you guys gonna come into the car or do i come and drag you myself?, people are staring already." He cried out, still struggling to take his eyes of her.
With Tony and Ify at the backseat, Sophia felt weird sitting beside a total stranger. She had planned on sitting with Ify but was mistaken when the two love birds opted to continue their affair at the back seat. She was positive that it was the same car that had been trailing her for days now but was confused at the whole thing. She decided to wait for Tony's explanation to clarify things. Seated beside the stranger, Sophia couldn't help but admire him. He was quiet through out the journey.
" We'll be heading to my friends place, i hope you girls dont mind?", Tony said bluntly. Sophia was about to protest when ify cut in. "Sure, we dont, right Sophie?". Sophia wanted to object but found herself nodding. She didnt want to upset her friend. Few minutes later they drove into a very large compound. Sophia was stunned that buildings like this were in her community. She used to think that Ify's house was the best but she was greatly mistaken.
On getting into the house, Sophia couldnt help but admire the house interior, although closely similar to that of Ify this was bigger than. After being seated in the living room, Tony and his friend excused the two girls and went upstairs. Sophia took advantage of that opportunity.
"Ify?, what was the meaning of that thing you put up in the car?", she said almost yelling.
"calm down, calm down okay?", Ify sat upright facing her friend. "Tony explained all that happened to me. You were correct about the car that had been trailing you", Ify paused, trying to observe the effect of her statement on her friend.
"What?, you mean ritualists are really trailing me?", Sophia exclaimed, with bulging eyes.
"No No, not that." Ify said in between laughter. " Remember i told you of Tony's friend?, the one whose party were attending tomorow?", She asked observing Sophia's countenance.
"yeah?", Sophia asked.
" Okay good, He happens to be the same guy you met earlier today, i mean the same guy that drove us here." Ify explained.
"okay, but what has that got to do with the ritualist?, Sophia asked nonchalantly.
Ify laughed so hard that Sophia became even more confused than ever.
" Damian was the one trailing you, not ritualists or kidnappers", Ify stated.
"Now who's Damian?", Sophia still asked, confused.
"Tony's friend nah, he has been the one trailing you. He's having a mad crush on you Sophia. He was even unaware that the same girl he's crushing on is the same person that his friend had been dying to introduce to him.", Ify explained.
Sophia tried to fix the pieces of the puzzle together. So she had been worried for nothing. She couldnt help but smile at what she had earlier. He liked her so much that he had trailed her?. She couldnt help but feel pleased at the thought. At that instance, the two guys who had given the girls time to talk things through walked in.
" Am sure things are now settled Sophia?", Tony asked walking into the sitting room. Sophia still shy and embarassed at all that had been explained to her nodded at him.