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Deception (based On A True Life Story) by Nobody: 8:31pm On Sep 29, 2018*

Re: Deception (based On A True Life Story) by Culin(f): 8:50pm On Sep 29, 2018

Nice story. But in your narrative you're mixing tenses. Since your narrative is in the past tense then avoid using present tense.
For example, "why would she take the money when she knows* what he intended to do with it". Its either knows and intends or knew and intended.

Re: Deception (based On A True Life Story) by Nobody: 10:04pm On Sep 29, 2018*

Culin:
Nice story. But in your narrative you're mixing tenses. Since your narrative is in the past tense then avoid using present tense.
For example, "why would she take the money when she knows* what he intended to do with it". Its either knows and intends or knew and intended.

Re: Deception (based On A True Life Story) by Nobody: 10:04pm On Sep 29, 2018*

Re: Deception (based On A True Life Story) by Culin(f): 10:17pm On Sep 29, 2018

nochillatalll:
Thanks a lot for the observation

Uwc. Following.

Re: Deception (based On A True Life Story) by misspearlz: 8:41am On Sep 30, 2018

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