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The story has almost finished oooo. Na epilogue remain now

By the way, I managed to get a mini map of Nigeria's shoreline. The island with BIOKO or something like that is my idea of where Michael and his crew were.

In NASA, Ted had given up hope on ever diverting the disaster looming. General Moore and everyone waited for the seemingly inevitable outcome; the death of Nigeria!

'Sir, something strange just happened'! Ted reported, looking shocked.'The 'prime' Satellite had its co-ordinates changed, just right now! 'Its focus is on a small island just below Nigeria, The rays have been diverted there sir'! Its a miracle!

General Moore was very relieved, as he thought of Ifeoma, his Nigerian wife and his three lovely kids, who are now safe. Everyone else was exhausted and the panels were on safe and back in their control.


Chinedu looked astonished,but happy at the new chance at life. his face expressed his emotions in words that had not been found yet in the dictionary.

As he was about asking what happened, Michael interrupted him.

'I have an override button here, which diverts the rays to where I am. I wonder why I put it though'. He said a bit mockingly. 'I would make a poor leader, since i do still have baggage and i will have to learn all over again how to be without hatred. You on the other hand, have gone through some processes and have come out unscathed'.

he paused for a second and then continued, 'I can see that unlike me, you will have the heart and will to conquer the darkness that is on the land. Your heart that has been strengthened by your beliefs make me say so'.

'You remind me of Paul and your talk about the future corresponds to what Paul told me some time back. Unfortunately, I had shut my eyes to the light and had almost ruined the whole script. I do not deserve to Lead this people'.

'I leave Nigeria to You Chinedu, You are the only one that I can trust to bring light to this country, Though the final decision lies with the future, not you. Whatever path they go, just remember to do your best.'

Till We meet on the judgment throne Chinedu, I say goodbye'. Michael said before his hologram disappeared.

A second later,A huge tremor was heard, shattering the windows and doors in the house.

The Rays have descended already!

Ishilove: You're doing it again. You're writing in shorthand, AGAIN. The discipline I am talking about is continually trying to improve yourself whenever you pick up a pen/or type on a keyboard to write. It means consistently monitoring the way you write, how you write, where you write etc.
You say if it were to be a newspaper, you will check yourself. Look, guy, it doesn't matter if you are writing to your family members; build a standard and maintain it. Always strive higher and never go lower than what you know you are capable of. This is a very public forum, by the way...

Go and study the masters of the letters. You will discover that they hardly write the way you write, even in the most informal of settings because it is dangerous and can become a habit. What becomes a habit will inadvertently affect your style, whether or not you choose to believe it.

Study Larrysun, Efemena_xy, glowingscenes, Royver, princesa, virgo and other great writers on this forum and you will discover that they NEVER write in shorthand. Shorthand is a complete no-no for anyone who is serious about taking his/her writing to the next level.

Ok, i don hear you....

READ MY THREAD AND TELL ME WHERE I WROTE IN SHORTHAND IN MY STORY.......

i understand ur point about improving, but you can't just judge people's abilities on an informal setting, that's my point.

by the way, you just took a swipe at the shorthand without carefully viewing the post and proffering solutions to what i wrote, you could at least do that.

Ur tone sound judgmental so try and pipe it low...
my 2cents

P.S. EVERYONE DOES NOT COME UNDER UR RULE, SIMPLE

Dis 1 na 'Bomb' love...hehehe

Ishilove: You can't discuss about the development of others until you start developing yourself. That is my point here. He is a writer. Let him show some discipline, please!

Excuse me, bro bt u went 2 far. Have u seen my work(thread) in dis section? Am sure u have nt cos if you have, u won't use my comment to rate my writing. Please, i gave an opinion in shorthand, that does nt mean that if am writing a novel i will write dat poorly. Grantd, i am nt a guru in English bt am nt dat poor as well, dis is an informal setting and if my comments were to be in a newspaper i will check myself. Besides the OP used 'bawt' in her statement, maybe u cn correct her too. Until ppl like u realise that to raise writers is more than throwing criticism in the air, writing in dis forum may nt improve.

Am here.

Chinedu had just finished his prayers with Michael when the latter told him how much time he has left.


'Chinedu, you have two minutes left, what will you do?'

This time though, Chinedu was sure of his reply, 'I guess this is the end for me and my generation. It is left to you and your guys to show the rest the way'. 'My time is up but I am happy that I was able to do something, even if its a little because even the little things count to him (God)'.

Something then shifted in Michael's heart at that moment.


'Michael, what are you there'? Preye said, screaming on top of his voice.

'What does it look like'? I just hit the override button and yes i know the rays are heading here, so go and get d emergency water pods and get the hell out of here'! Michael screamed back.

'Michael, you know that the pods are....

Yes I know, thats why i am staying here, now move it'!

Michael now turned to Chinedu, 'Yes, someone's time is up, but its not your time, its mine.

Meanwhile at NASA, things were heating up pretty fast.

'Ted, what is happening for the umpteenth(hope I got the spelling rite) time? A visibly disturbed General Moore asked. General Moore was the Head of Operations, Counter Terrorism Force (CTF), who was drafted as a result of the inability of NASA to solve the 'satellite' crisis at hand,coupled with the onset of virus attacks on NASA's servers. He came with his 'crack' team, which consisted of 'seasoned' hackers and virus developers, who were battling to solve the virus puzzle infront of them.

'Sir, i still don't have my panels back, and the satellites are heating pretty bad. If the heat aint diverted to somewhere else, we will lose the satellites'.

General Moore was now really worried. If the satellites were lost, a valuable system of surveillance will be lost and with Korea and Russia cracking each firewall the US develops, they will be easy targets for attacks.

'Sir, something is happening right now. All the heat generated is been transferred to the 'prime' satellite'.

'The satellite facing Nigeria?' a shaken General asked.

'Yes Sir', a grim looking Ted replied.

mattyqueen: OP i tot the micheal we are tlkn abt here is a hologram? bt 9ce story

Michael is speaking to Chinedu through a hologram of himself, d real Michael is still alive.

'You speak of leading the country so easily, yet your heart is darkened toward change'. Chinedu continued. 'Don't you see it? The country is in gross darkness because someone used bitterness as a change weapon,and instead of changing the country, they only managed to infuse hatred in other people'. You know where that led to, Michael? Millions of massacres in two centuries as a country, yet you still stand here with such hatred, your heart has refused to heal, Michael, you can't rule the country this way.

'So how do I heal this heart of this hatred'? 'How did you get pass yours, Chinedu'? Michael asked, sounding desperate.

'I gave my life to Christ, first of all, then i started the long process of healing my heart. I focused on the work of God. Chinedu said, showing his Bible,and i started studying it. I also pray to God, not desperately but respectively, having his Spirit as a guide. I also began to apply what i learn in the Word outside, and that has led me to change my views about people that I hated previously. I can't say that my heart is completely healed, but i know that I will get there soon'.

'Can someone like me get to where you are, Chinedu'? Michael looked humbly.

'My God does not reject anyone, no matter how difficult his situation is, Michael'. You just have to see the light...

'Will you guide me to him, even at the cost of your life, Chinedu'?


Chinedu nodded his head, even as he was unsure of what next to do. 'I will do so, since you want to change and change the country too. I will pay the ultimate price, even if its for a soul as yours, because that's the life i plan to live'.

Chinedu then led Michael to pray, inevitably sealing his death, or so he thought.

ESIXLOVE: **** walked in putting on agbada and holding a cutlass . Takes a bow and sit down on a lone seat at the back **** hmmm my cutlass na to use finish Michael after chinedu don finish important own.. Nice work bro. Keep it up.

Tnx bro

General Mike, reporting 4 duty, sir!

don kross: . Ask the barman jooor. Eyin temi, while we all wait for kmj's TCA to show on big screen, let's watch mine on dz small tv biko. www.nairaland.com/1569462/apostacy

Moving dia ASAP. Well done, don kross.

'The future is the bright light I see at the end of the tunnel. The generation coming after us, Michael. A generation who have grown in this country but not of this country. A generation who are changing and learning, maturing far beyond what you see'. 'Michael, when I see the future, I see a godly set of people who are ready to take over from us'.

'I know what the modern day Nigerian Christians do. They cheat and steal, then come to give thanksgiving for the money they stole. They fornicate and turn around to condemn a poor prostitute. They are all cry-babies who only think of themselves and dont bother to really know God. No, I do not fight for them'.

'I rather fight for the future,those few who have matured and know God for who he is and he knows them too, Chinedu continued. 'They bring a light, which when fully matured, will heal and revive this battered country. Its for them I stand here today and if necessary, I will die in order for their time to come'.

'This country has bled too much, its time for it to be awoken from the ashes it is in now, and I will do just that in a few minutes'. Michael replied with certainty.

You will fail if you tow this path, Michael and that will happen because you cannot lead this country, you will only bring bitterness in it because your heart is bitter, Michael'! Chinedu spat out.

Guy, u funny die (lol), i meant dat u r seriously funny,nyc work.