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Contestants 65: Weno, TheSCRYPT

Nature's Call

TheSCRYPT

The atmosphere dry
they inhale the dusty wind
derma scaly dry

Weno

Oh what on earth could this be?
this cold will kill the whole world

TheSCRYPT

Sun smiles in anger
could it be hotter than hell?
for their bodies weep

Weno

Leaves play unclad in the yard
becoming tired limping

TheSCRYPT

Rose playing rose falls
rose rose rose to the medic
the rain her sight drips

Weno

The ocean runs the sky down
screaming screeching gbuu gbuu gbu

TheSCRYPT

Marianer trench
is not as deep as we think
for I have swam there

Weno

She is a beautiful girl
married to a mariner

TheSCRYPT

Its so natural
even the clouds are marvelled
the stars bow in awe

Weno

Always greener everyday
it's as fresh as the cow's dung

TheSCRYPT

Handsome daisies speak
the language of the unborn
and sing like humans

Weno

Sweet november he met her
and gave her a renga poem


POETIC ANALYSIS

'Nature's Call', talks about different seasons we have in Nigeria, which can be seen in verse one, verse three and verse six. We can't avoid these seasons, its only natural they occur. It also talks about the 'marianer trench', which in nature is the deepest part of the Ocean.
However, there are internal links in this poem which is illustrated below.

All the three lines in this poem are referred to as 'haiku', which has a 5-7-5 syllable structure. All the couplets in this poem have a 7-7 syllable structure.
Verse one talks about the harmattan season, which is linked to verse two, the 'cold' weather we experience during harmattan.
Verse three refers to the hot weather, which is opposite of the cold weather in verse two, which is also the linking point.
Verse four talks about 'leaves playing unclad in the yard', the 'leaves' here, refers to 'children', which is linked to the hot weather in verse three. They play unclad because of the hot weather in verse three.
The fifth verse links with verse four because it refers to a little girl 'Rose', playing with a' Rose flower', she is among the 'children', 'leaves' playing unclad in verse four. She falls to the ground, another person called 'Rose' rose (carried) the little girl 'Rose' and takes her to the hospital, as little 'Rose' cries.
The link between verse six and five, 'the Ocean runs down the Sky' is the 'rain', 'tears' that Rose shed in verse five.
The link between the seventh and sixth verse is the 'Ocean' in verse six that connects with 'Marianer Trench' in verse seven.
Verse eight refers to a girl called 'Marianer', married to a Mariner. This connects to 'Marianer Trench' in verse seven.
Verse nine, 'its so natural' refers to 'the beautiful girl in verse eight.
In verse ten, 'always greener', links with 'natural' in verse nine.
'Fresh' in verse ten can be linked to 'daisies' in verse eleven.
'Handsome', in verse eleven refers to the 'lad' in verse twelve that met the lady in 'sweet november'.

POETIC DEVICES

RHETORICAL QUESTION:

Verse two: 'Oh what on Earth could this be?'
Verse three: 'Could it be hotter than hell?'

PERSONIFICATION:

Verse two: 'Sun smiles in anger'.
Verse four: 'Leaves play unclad in the yard becoming tired limping'.
Verse six: 'The Ocean runs the sky down'.
Verse nine: 'the clouds are marvelled', 'the stars bow in awe'.
Verse eleven: 'handsome daisies'.

HYPERBOLE:

Verse two: 'this cold will kill the World'.
Verse three: 'for their bodies weep'.
Verse five: 'the rain her sight drips'

PUN:

Verse five: 'Rose rose rose to the medic'.

IRONY:

Verse seven: 'Marianer trench is not as deep as we think for I have swam there'.
Verse ten: 'its as fresh as the cow dung'.

ONOMATOPOEIA:

Verse six: 'screaming screeching gbuu gbuu gbu'.

RHYME:

Verse two: 'will, kill'.
Verse seven and eight: 'marianer , married, mariner'.

SIMILIE:

Verse ten: 'as fresh as the cow's dung'.

Hello, theScrypt, we've been paired. How do we go about it?

The grains in your hour glass
Wrapped up in that hour
And I grew sour, with ocean
Running expression on my cheeks
Wailing in Lamentation
As the bees buzzed my ears.