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Nice beginning decaprico.

FOLLOWING.....

But no come giv us d re-twist/Nigeria version of Vampires diaries abeg.

Also following. Kindly continue.

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Don't kip us waitin 2 long Ơ̴̴̴̴̴͡oº°˚

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Am nt really into 4rin stories bt dis looks cool

suscribing.......nyc story u got here

Jeez u got to watch ur tenses,u ar killing me with
them....

decaprico: This is my second story, so I'm pleading for
support from everyone who reads this. Please
your comments, thoughts and constructive
criticism would be appreciated.
Do note that I am not a student of literature, so
please kindly correct any errors in my use of
punctuations, words and sentence constructions.
Moreover, the updates of this story might not be
more often as I have got an exam at hand.
Thanks
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maybe reproduced, stored in a retrieval
system or transmitted in any form or by
any means, electronic, mechanical,
photocopying, recording or otherwise
without the prior permission of the author.
©decaprico 2014,
Contact:-
email: decaprico7@gmail.com

I sent you an email with some constructive criticism. I made some suggestions, and did some editing. Let me know what you think. You have a good storyline here. You just need an editor.

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Decaprico, pls desist from pasting your link everywhere. If people like your story they will probably endorse your story. Next time u post it will be a ban.

decaprico u b basky, abeg make the story frequent n sweet o

decaprico: I will take note of that,.. Sorry

I like u,unlike some writers dat will just take it personal

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Following...

Bouncer is nw around.... Dis thread is strictly by invitation ......Decaprico how much is the gate fee??

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decaprico: This is my second story, so I'm pleading for
support from everyone who reads this. Please
your comments, thoughts and constructive
criticism would be appreciated.
Do note that I am not a student of literature, so
please kindly correct any errors in my use of
punctuations, words and sentence constructions.
Moreover, the updates of this story might not be
more often as I have got an exam at hand.
Thanks
All rights reserved. No part of this story
maybe reproduced, stored in a retrieval
system or transmitted in any form or by
any means, electronic, mechanical,
photocopying, recording or otherwise
without the prior permission of the author.
©decaprico 2014,
Contact:-
email: decaprico7@gmail.com

Guy you no add spiritual, sexual and mental form of reproduction. *carries a big drum of palm wine and big pipe, walks jejely to front sit *

Curious and following. As for the tenses no need to bring it up again. Waiting..

philtrum:

Guy you no add spiritual, sexual and mental form of reproduction. *carries a big drum of palm wine and big pipe, walks jejely to front sit *

follow you jejely with a botlle of ogidiga n alomo cos dis story x gonna b so scary. After all ,no bouncer is needed!!

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Nice write up.... Keep it up

Can't wait...exciting stuff!

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Pls try n put more suspense, d storyline is so boring

9ze 1...following

Ur story looks like 'vampire diaries'. All the same, u r doin great. More updates plzzzz.

Something tells me he will be back.

If you want to know how it feels to write under pressure please do pick up a pen and write a worthy novella in 2 days.

Nice job.

identify the characters more please and for better results SUSPENSE is needed