Komzzy1: [img][/img] [color=#006600][/color] crying,the best touching story ever

PrinceAdepoju: I can't sight any flaw yet..


###just passing

hephzibahbeulah: Too long,too much suspense,d outcome is predictable. Even though most parts of d story is unreal,it stil makes for good entertainment and meditation. In all,ur writing,grammar,punctuation,etc are flawless...kudos to u!

JeffreyJamez:

I personally don't see any flaw o...all those "flaws" above are actually what makes your story unique. And there is nothing like too much suspense Abeg.It's what makes we the readers to always come back...your type of writing is emotional... Your choice of words triggers emotions... You can't be an allrounder na...prettyspicey's best attribute is her witty convos between her characters, Royver's best attribute is his description..yours is your ability to bring out the emotions of your characters . So while some people will say "lack of dialogue " is a flaw...I don't see it as a flaw...and for those saying it lacks "narrative parts"..please they should come and define Narrative Part....as for the descriptive part,it is there but not too much,but then again this particular story doesn't need much description because it is more of emotional description that is needed for it and you got it spot on.

Honestly, no flaw for me but then again what do I know I'm just a reader.. *chews groundnut and walks out*

Shokoloko: [code][/code]
Funny. I actually wanted more dialogue. Different strokes for different folks

annylove: Wow...what a touching and wonderful story, keep it up Audrey and i promise u,u'll go places.

Jesusbaby93: I really enjoy it and i c notin wrong wit d story. Kudos to you ma!

Jesusbaby93: I really enjoy it and i c notin wrong wit d story. Kudos to you ma!

maryhaam: did ur food get burnt?did someone load ur card?abeg u lost ur wallet?.....y are u using panadol for another person headache naaaa

toykathy:

one thing i cherish most about u is taking d pain to reply all comments on ur thread. I tell u, u re a rare gem n a great writer. God bless u.

anasbeaut: I loved everything. But I would have loved to view it from Eric point of view esp how e has been able to cope over the years plus yes Oleng is a cry baby. She needs to develop a spine

oluwabunmilola: Finally, I got to d last page . Nice job Audrey.

toykathy: yeah, Eric is too silent i totally agree wit dat but, oleng is just emotional and nt a cry baby, u are also silent on oleng's mum. I ll let knw if there is any other thing i noticed. Weldone.

JeffreyJamez:

I personally don't see any flaw o...all those "flaws" above are actually what makes your story unique. And there is nothing like too much suspense Abeg.It's what makes we the readers to always come back...your type of writing is emotional... Your choice of words triggers emotions... You can't be an allrounder na...prettyspicey's best attribute is her witty convos between her characters, Royver's best attribute is his description..yours is your ability to bring out the emotions of your characters . So while some people will say "lack of dialogue " is a flaw...I don't see it as a flaw...and for those saying it lacks "narrative parts"..please they should come and define Narrative Part....as for the descriptive part,it is there but not too much,but then again this particular story doesn't need much description because it is more of emotional description that is needed for it and you got it spot on.

Honestly, no flaw for me but then again what do I know I'm just a reader.. *chews groundnut and walks out*

stormybucci: none of d above .... I no blame u, na audrey i blame

PrettySpicey:

Indeed Audrey Timms, every writer has their strong point... like in all things. And every writer approaches her plot from a certain kind of angle.

But in spite of her strong points and angles, writers should approach writing according to the particularities of their chosen genre.

I look at Unfulfilled Promises as a Women's Lit genre work and so though it's style should defer from mine as a Contemporary Homorous romance writer and from Royver's as a Paranormal writer (I think that's what he is).

But then again, it is never truly clear what are our flaws as writers until we are judged by the professionals who are in our chosen field or better put, genre.

I have found being certain where I belong and working towards the of that particular art, keeps me improving my skill and never having to get confused by what might be limited opinions.

Above all, I despise unnecessary comparison, especially when wrongly applied.

I apologise if I'm presuming too much here, Audrey Timms, but I daresay it is for you to consider every point made by readers and all and decide for youself which is valid.

Still think this was a great work. Thank you

Okinjay: I did not see any flaws oo...You are unique and wonderful in your own way of writing and that's what matters. Its not easy to have the kind of addicted-followership that you presently enjoy. Mehn,just carry go....yoooouuuu toooooo gbbbbaaassskkkkiiiii...

omotalkie: Mmm...no update yet Anxiously wating ooh.
As for ur writn skills, its simply unique, ivnt noticed any flaws, Ure tryn keep it up!

Dave come back and die again o,make I buy Jeep lol
*counting money *

JeffreyJamez:
Lol ole ni e

Harrychocoberry: Somepeople Should not Derail here!

Just for warning sake though.

Mrs Timms,on a lighter note..
Abeg you don notice xay,Some names/moniker Strong come Funny even Strange pass my own sef.

Hope you've seen what I Inboxed?


On Another Note:
Miss Goldwaters..Have you come across any Movie Titled WHITE WATERS?
If not Try to do xo.

~Chocoberry~

Harrychocoberry: Somepeople Should not Derail here!

Just for warning sake though.

Mrs Timms,on a lighter note..
Abeg you don notice xay,Some names/moniker Strong come Funny even Strange pass my own sef.

Hope you've seen what I Inboxed?


On Another Note:
Miss Goldwaters..Have you come across any Movie Titled WHITE WATERS?
If not Try to do xo.

~Chocoberry~