Hi everyone,i salute you all.I am still very new here.I don't want to start mentioning names but i am welcoming you all to read this story of mine.I completed it a month ago and posted it on My facebook page.Now,i want to drop it here.
The story is titled"THE MOST WANTED MAID"
This is not my first thread on nairaland.My life,my entertainment is still uncompleted.Pls i beg you not to judge this new thread with the old one.I will get back to it as soon as i finish this.
I hope you guys find the story interesting.
Please i need your comments,corrections and criticisms.Thank you

*grabs 3D glasses*

Welcome tshegs19.
I'm dropping episode 1 right away.I regret ever posting it on my facebook page before.Most of facebook page fans are experts in copy and paste,but i am going to make a lot of changes in the story to make it even better,wider and longer for your entertainment.

Source>http://stmuvi.xx.tn
Do not copy

*THE MOST WANTED MAID*

Episode 1

Angela wiped the sweats off her face as she moped
the floor of the kitchen. It was
saturday, so she has decided to keep everywhere
clean and
tidy.
She did the cleaning in a hurry and started preparing dinner. She
didn't go to her boutique that
very day. She just felt like resting at home.

David, her dear husband would soon be
returning from work.She wanted him to eat as soon as he returns and
take some rest.
She heaved as she ran about the kitchen.

"I am tired. I'm just stressed up. I think i need a
maid" She
sighed, nodding to her thoughts.

Angela was in her late
twenties. She got married to
David three years ago, but they
are yet to have an issue.
Angela and david had been friends right from their
university days. They fell in love
with each other and were always found together.
After
David's graduation, securing a job became a
problem. Angela also tried all she could to help David get a job.She
lied to her
father on several ocassions
inorder to estort money from
him to help David's job seeking
process. However,David later got a job
in a very rich company.
It happened that when Angela
eventually graduated from the
university,she found it very
hard to get a job.Despite everything her father did.David
was not left out in helping her
seek for job but all to no
avail.
David,later convinced her
to worry about nothing since
he had the money to cater for them.
After their wedding,David
opened a cosmetic shop for
her,according to her
wish.
David became more and
more successful as if their marriage had a hand in it.They
enjoyed a sweet and romantic
union without troubles,but the
only worry that was lurking in
the corner was their inability to
have a child yet. They had gone to different
hospitals to find out the cause
of the problem.However,all the
doctors kept saying the same
thing.That there's nothing
wrong with any of them,While urging them to wait for God's
time.This didn't bother David at
all.He believed God's time is the
best.He remembered a couple
who spent up to 10yrs
together before the wife concieved.Hence,the situation
at hand didn't affect his
undying love for her
:::::****::::::
Angela heard a car hunk within
the compound.she knew it was no other person than her
beloved husband.

"Helo honey.i'm hooooome"he
soon emerged from the
door.Angela came out from the
room and kissed him welcome.
"How was work today?"She
asked as she collected the
briefcase from him.

"Good,my dear.Just that i am
tired,weak and hungry"He
replied.

"Then,its not a problem.I will
take care of that"Angela said as
she took him by the hand and led
him in.
It was actually late in the night
when Angela brought up the topic of bringing in a
maid.David objected to this
idea.He wondered why she
would want to bring in a
maid.Angela never did any
laundry.The washing was always done by the dry
cleaner.They were only living in
a flat and not two storey.What
could make her want to bring
in a maid?
He totally rejected the idea.Angela only cooked in the
evenings when she gets back
from her cosmetics shop.They
normally take beverages with
bread in the morning,though
Angela sometimes prepare something different.
Angela became sad and moody
at her husbands disaproval.
But little did she know she was
asking for her downfall.

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Common sense is not common nw

Okay.

Continue.

I am dropping episode 2 by 8pm tonight.I thank you all for following

EPISODE 2

"Honey, do you think this idea of
bringing in a maid is
right?" David asked Angela who
was already sad that her husband refused to grant
her request.
"Yes,i don't see anything wrong with that. let's just bring
a maid.
"What do we need a maid for?" David asked. He too
was not happy.
"So i can fully concentrate on
my business. The new maid will be doing the cooking and keeping the home clean. please
my dear" Angela
pleaded. BecauseDavid never wanted to see her sad,
he gave
her the go ahead.
Angela became happy again but she never knew she was
calling for trouble.
::::****::::
"Angela my daughter. You are
looking so beautiful" It was Mrs. Uwa, her mother.
Angela smiled as she sat on the sofa. "Mum, everyone knows to well that i am not more
beautiful
than you are. I am only but your photocopy and
Dad's carbon
copy. So the both of you are the
real beauty" She gesticulated. Her mother need no
soothsayer to tell her that her
beloved daughter was living in harmony with david,
her
husband.
Angela had actually visited her parents inorder to tell them about her plan of getting
a
maid, so her mother could help
her look for one.
"My daughter.i don't support this" her mother cuts in.
"Why mum?"Angela just couldnt see any reason why her mother should stand
against this.
"David your husband,i believe
loves you so much and will do
almost anything for you.If you
are finding the house chores hard,discuss it with him and
see if he will profer a better
solution.The greatest mistake
you will make in your marriage
is giving another women the
opportunity to take care of your husband for you....."
"Mum but i am not bringing in
a maid to take care of my
husband for me"Angela
interrupted her mother.
"Your mother is right Angela.Bringingin a maid in
your matrimonial home to do
the cookings and wash your
husbands clothes almost
means the same thing as
leaving your husband under her care"Her father spoke this
time.
Angela became confused.There
may be sense in what her
parents were saying but her
instints told her that her husband can never prefer a
maid over her.Not when their
love for each other is still there.

COULD ANGELA BE RIGHT?

EPISODE 3

Angela was a lady that gets
almost whatever she wanted
without heeding to advice.Despite her parents
advice to shun the idead of
bringing in a maid,she paid
deaf ears.
"We are not trying to force you
my dear.If you feel like getting a maid,if your husband
approves of it,then go
ahead.We only want what is
best for you.You are our
daughter.But my advice to you
when you finally bring this maid is to watch her
closely"Her father concluded.
::::****::::
"shine bright like a diamond"
"shine bright like a diamond"
That's Angela's mobile phone ringing.She looked at the
screen.It was Ebere,her
friend,calling.
"Helo b.b"She answered the
phone.
"Angel,are you at home? I got the maid and she is right here
with me"Ebere spoke from the
other end.
"Really? I just got back now.i'm
home"Angela was excited.
"We are coming over.Keep something for me o"Ebere
cooed and hung up.
Angela nodded.She was
happy.Now,she can fully
concentrate on her business
like other women. The knock on the door an hour
later,made Angela come out
from the kitchen leaving the
rice she was preparing.She
knew it was Ebere and the
most anticipated maid.When she opened the door,Ebere
entered,leaving a beautiful young girl carrying a bag by
the door for Angela to have a
better view before
she came in.
"Good Evening ma"She greeted. Angela beheld her.She was
indeed beautiful with her open
teeth.Fair in complexion.
Angela let her in with her bag.
"What is your name?"She
asked. "My name is sonia ma"She
replied.
"How old are you?"
"I am 22 years ma"She replied
again with a smile.
Angela introduced herself and showed her a room to move in.
THIS IS JUST THE BEGINNING

And she dey happy. Mumu girl. It's nice but a little repetive and add a little surprise now because right now, i already know what to expect.

Bevy12: And she dey happy. Mumu girl. It's nice but a little repetive and add a little surprise now because right now, i already know what to expect.

Thanks ma.I will try my best

I've arrived. So keep the updates coming or else.....

Frankenstein: I've arrived. So keep the updates coming or else.....

My oga you are highly welcome

9ce one

Omo to pupa toleji to ni barca to tun ni chelsea. Thats so nice na

Oh i dey vex.i blame mourinho for the draw.Its like a lost game to me.
Guys pls i wil drop the next episode 2moro morning

Aipete2: Omo to pupa toleji to ni barca to tun ni chelsea. Thats so nice na

pls can u translate it for me.i dont understand yoruba

Bevy12: And she dey happy. Mumu girl. It's nice but a little repetive and add a little surprise now because right now, i already know what to expect.

you've watched too much afmag movies

EPISODE 4

The arrival of Sonia gladdened
Angela heart. She was
delighted. Sonia on her own part played not only the
role of
a maid. She felt much
comfortable around her madam; she just took Angela as
her elder sister.
Sonia took charge of the household chores. She took
charge of preparing the
meals. She even offered to
wash the clothes instead of taking them to the dry cleaner.
She was in desperate need for money to support
her
mother's failing health. She was able to finish her
secondary
school but couldn't go further to higher institutions because
of lack of finance. So, since then, she has been
looking for
money through any possible
means inorder to keep living and support her mother
who was always sick.
:::::..****.::::
David bumped into Sonia as he
hurried out of his room with
his briefcase. He was getting
late for work.She fell down as
his body brushed her. "Oh.i am sorry. get up, give me
your hand" David reached for
her hand to help get her up
from the ground.
"Good morning sir.I was
actually coming to tell you that your breakfast is ready" She
announced as she got up from the ground.
"I don't think i can still have
breakfast. I have to attend an
important meeting this
morning and i am running out of time. Where is your
madam?" David was in a hurry.
"She is still sleeping" Sonia replied. She had a way of
talking that made her
outstanding. Talking slowly
and pronouncing every word to the end. David made to Angela's room to notice her of his
early
leaving because of an
important meeting.
As David drove,he thought
within himself how Sonia handles the house duties as if
she was actually a member of
the family. She was in good
terms with both husband and
wife. Angela had been right
about bringing her in,he thought.

Calismart:

pls can u translate it for me.i dont understand yoruba

She's light, as gap in btw her upper teeth and she get barca n chelsea n dats figure 8

You are doing a good job here but just like someone already pointed out, I can predict what will eventually happen. But you as a writer, am sure you can manouver your writing, maybe bringing in another character(another family) change the plot a little bit but the predicted end will still remain the end but let your readers experience a different plot maybe they'll forget about what they've already predicted. I believe you understand me, you are no novice in story writing.
Just my thoughts tho!

tshegs19: you've watched too much afmag movies

I don't watch nigerian movie not to talk of old ones. I watch korean or american.

I'm dropping the next episode tonight

D9ty7: You are doing a good job here but just like someone already pointed out, I can predict what will eventually happen. But you as a writer, am sure you can manouver your writing, maybe bringing in another character(another family) change the plot a little bit but the predicted end will still remain the end but let your readers experience a different plot maybe they'll forget about what they've already predicted. I believe you understand me, you are no novice in story writing.
Just my thoughts tho!

Thanks bro.i'm working on it

Bevy12: I don't watch nigerian movie not to talk of old ones. I watch korean or american.

Ooh.

tshegs19: Ooh.

Yep

EPISODE 5

1pm

The door bell rang.Sonia was
the only one at home. Angela
has gone to her shop. David was away in his office.
She wondered who might be at the
door.

"Who is there?"she asked
standing close to the door.

"It's me o"A voice said from
outside.

"who?"Sonia asked again.

"Soni you can't recognise my
voice ni?
Sonia smiled and opened the
door.She knew it was Bisi, due
to the way she asked her the last question.
She had told Bisi where she
now lives.

Bisi her dear friend
had no choice than to come
and visit her there since she
knew Sonia was always home alone when her employers leave
for work.

"Soni you are enjoying here o. you are really
enjoying
here" Bisi said.

"That's what you think. but you are wrong my dear"Sonia
defended herself.

"hmmmm,soni,if i were in your
shoes,i would be very very
happy o"Bisi said as she
glanced around the compound.

"Why do you say so?"Sonia
asked.
Bisi smile and held her friend.
"You are my friend and i won't
hide anything from you. If i were you, i would get
close to your madam's husband. you know what i mean" Bisi
rolled
her eyeballs.

"Do you know what you are
saying?"Sonia was calm
though.

"You are very pretty my dear,and that is a great
asset.your mother needs money for her drugs and
we know too well that you are a young woman who
wishes to make money like others. this is your
chance"Bisi said as if she knew exactly what she was
saying.

Sonia was quiet. she was actually thinking about it.

"But be careful to avoid your madam's suspicions.
She is a woman and will understand every step you
take. I have to go before they meet me here"Bisi
said and left.

Sonia pondered this in her heart.Bisi has been a friend for long.They had suffered together and so share so many things in common,despite the fact that they both hailed from different places.

She remembered Ebere who had called her up to take the job as a maid.Ebere had told her that she will have a discussion with her in four days time and nobody should know about it.She wondered what the kind lady might have for her.

"Bisi my dear friend.you may be right but i haven't got that kind of heart"she soliloquied as she watched Bisi walk lazily out of the compound

bros I don port
hmm nice write-up buh try Nd put suspense

Idiet bisi, stewpid gal. Wen u marry, ur wish 4 dat family shall be urz in Jesus name. Amen

DVMtuppence: bros I don port
hmm nice write-up buh try Nd put suspense

welcome sir

Calismart:

welcome sir

thanks. just gimme popcorn +alomo