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The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Nobody: 7:14am On May 10, 2015 |
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Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Iolite(f): 9:18am On May 10, 2015 |
Following. The title look's captivating. |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by drsolob2(m): 9:19am On May 10, 2015 |
Carry on man |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Nobody: 1:17pm On May 10, 2015 |
tnx still typing |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Nobody: 2:43pm On May 10, 2015 |
The police officers at a check point noticed a bike head light "who be that"?. I thought okada has been banned in this state,one of the officers said. Park well,come down. Remove your head gear. A female that looked as if she was in her late twenties was the face behind the head gear. "don't you know that they have banned bike in delta state". "No,i had no idea",she said."are you new in this place",the officer said."yeah i 'm new". We cant just let you go like that na. So find kola for us or we will book you,and you will follow us to the station. "okay let me check". She tapped her right pocket. But it didn't sound as if there was anything in it. So she put her hand in her left pocket of her trouser. The looks on her face changed."i knew i didn't leave it",she said. The officers smiled. She brought out a gun and pulled the trigger on the two officers,collected their guns and decapitated the two officers and kept them in a bag and zoomed of --- to be continued--- follow and reply 9 Likes 3 Shares |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by craise(m): 12:10pm On May 11, 2015 |
I just came here to register my presence I wil come to read later..Akpobi ride on 1 Like 2 Shares |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Nobody: 12:54pm On May 11, 2015 |
skarlett please do you know where I can read that keeping up with .... diary please I've forgotten the remaining part of the title, and I've forgotten her username |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Nobody: 6:19pm On May 12, 2015 |
m preparing to drop the next one am i seeing follows here? 2 Likes |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Iolite(f): 7:31pm On May 12, 2015 |
akpobi: Impress us. 2 Likes |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Nobody: 7:37pm On May 12, 2015 |
Otega was still in church when he received a call that there had just been a murder on deco road. Otega was an investigator. His looks changed immediately. "ah,ah not on sunday again" he said. He ended the call, and dialed mr keziah's number. Mr keziah picked the call . "what do you want", mr keziah said rudely. "i need you to go to deco road theres been a murder and make sure you come with a forensics team" mr keziah cut him off saying "i am indisposed", mr keziah then hanged the call ."keziah are you still there" . What !! "Did he just hang up on me". He said to himself. Although mr keziah and otega had been having a feud but otega described what keziah had done as "uncalled for. Otega took permission from the church elders and left . He drove off in his audi 80 that his dad gave him when he graduated. Otega was a bachelor,dark in complexion and had what seemed like a swollen cheek due to the fight between him and keziah ,an assistant investigator. Keziah had pummeled his face. At the crime scene otega had felt like throwing up because of the gruesome way they were murdered. Otega turned to the other police and said "do you have their i.d's yet?". No, not yet the police officer replied. Then what the hell have you been doing since. You want to tell me that you have been staring at these corpses for over one hour?. "call the ambulance".must i do everything my self. "what of the forensics team?". "they haven't arrived"the officer replied. mr otega shouted "this is un believable". Am going to file a report . "sir please don't". The officer replied. "hold your peace, this a gross negligence of duty". How can i solve a case like this when, wait whats that smell. "Flies are already dancing round the corpse, its like they are decomposing". The officer said ---to be continued-- 5 Likes 2 Shares |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Nobody: 12:35pm On May 13, 2015 |
akpobi: |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Nobody: 7:31pm On May 14, 2015 |
I dy follow, follow |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by OMA4U(m): 2:19pm On May 15, 2015 |
akpobi:This story is not well written. The opening sentence is poor. It could be better this way: The police officers at the checkpoint saw a bike headlight approaching.... My humble opinion, please. 12 Likes |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by OMA4U(m): 2:24pm On May 15, 2015 |
Let us know who Otega and Keziah were. Tell us our their past; their triumphs and failures. The end part of the first post is poor too. Create suspense and make your story great. You have got a nice plot. Develop it well. Thank you. 7 Likes 1 Share |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by timpaker(m): 2:38pm On May 15, 2015 |
akpobi: I am interested in your story. Please for the sake your readers kindly paragraph your lines well. Secondly, edit the "Am" to "I'm", "theres" to "there has" and all names are to begin with a capital letter (so is a new sentence) Generally, you did great and I am following... #MoreUpdatesPlease 19 Likes |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Nobody: 6:27am On May 16, 2015 |
OMA4U: tanks. it has been modified |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Nobody: 8:49pm On May 16, 2015 |
OMA4U: noticed + tnx |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by drtwist(m): 8:33am On May 17, 2015 |
area write your story no mind all this *correcting fluid*, them no know say although our primary and secondary school na pidgin english teachers take teach us english and still we dey write exam with english dey pass. But try take correction shall I dey with you from sedico road 22 Likes 1 Share |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Nobody: 12:23pm On May 18, 2015 |
daevfeelvu |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Nobody: 7:07am On May 19, 2015 |
1 Like |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Nobody: 2:59pm On May 20, 2015 |
drtwist: noticed 1 Like |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Nobody: 9:04am On May 26, 2015 |
finally 400 views tanks for the views and follows m going to drop the rest later this week |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Nobody: 3:57pm On Jun 22, 2015 |
guys am sorry for the hold up on the updates. Am writing major exams |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Kitme(f): 4:41pm On Jun 22, 2015 |
akpobi:Are you after the views or churning out well-written story? 3 Likes |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Nobody: 8:44pm On Jun 23, 2015 |
Kitme: noticed |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Nobody: 7:29pm On Aug 21, 2015 |
going to be adding more posts every saturday sorry for the delay |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by Nobody: 3:40pm On Aug 28, 2015 |
*Back at the office* Mr otega was taking his coffee when some police officers were dragging a man that seemed like he was in his mid thirties. "I didn't do it",he said. 'Tell that to the judge next week',the officer replied. Mr otega quickly got up like he had an idea. He took his blazers from the arm of the chair,with the cup of coffee in his hand and was heading towards the door when an officer stopped him. "where are you going to?" it's like i have a lead on this case,he replied."well that can wait cause we need you at the board room" A man looking well built walked towards us,wearing a black suit that seemed new obviously because the label was hanging on the breast pocket of the suit. He was black in complexion and had a staunch of dry gin hovering round him. He had a hoarse voice "i am mr wallace chinelu, i am going to be in charge of the investigation " he said. "but we have a lead on this case" otega replied. "Yes,of course you have a lead. So as sixteen homocide cases that you aren't done with investigating. What i just said dates back to 2007. I've had enough of this discussion with you."handover the files " he said."i will have to see your i.d",mr otega replied. Mr Wallace immediately brought out his i.d card. Otega scrutinised it and gave it back. "So what am i going to do now",otega said. " what were you doing before?,It seemed like you were on your way out","yes'', '' i wanted to revisit the crime scene" Mr otega drove off almost as if nothing had happened. He dove to the crime scene. |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by money121(m): 11:56pm On Aug 28, 2015 |
nice one |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by mcdokwe(m): 11:56pm On Aug 28, 2015 |
ff |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by bqlekan(m): 11:56pm On Aug 28, 2015 |
Following |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by RealAdewole(m): 11:57pm On Aug 28, 2015 |
ok |
Re: The Day The Clouds Turned Red (crime Story) by adesegun121(m): 11:57pm On Aug 28, 2015 |
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