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Re: My Poem by whiteboy(m): 6:15pm On Oct 15, 2006
Hey Scorpio, you don't have to like love poems just feel them.
Dig this? Let me know!

HEART TO HEART ( Circa '03 )

Heart to heart, you and I
A soulmate I need and a true friend indeed
yours and mine together as one,
United we'll stand but divided we'll fall

Heart to heart is a plan that works
Talking with you and sharing real thoughts
Feeling alone? You should call on my phone
Never again will you be on your own

Your heart for my heart, what about that?
Walk on my path and I won't break your heart
Heart to heart we should live just as one
Sincere soulmates and not just bedmates

How about that Scorpio?
Peace
Re: My Poem by Scorpio(f): 12:05am On Oct 16, 2006
@Whiteboi, i try, but i only seem to ''feel'' a lil; ur latest looks good tho. do you guyz compile all this or y'all just let it go to waste?
Re: My Poem by lauryn(f): 12:48am On Oct 16, 2006
Ms Instigator
Them ask U grin
Re: My Poem by Scorpio(f): 5:06pm On Oct 16, 2006
sharrap dia jor! grin
Re: My Poem by whiteboy(m): 7:28pm On Oct 16, 2006
Thanks Kutecolor! Scorpio, all these are works from my archive so I guess you know i've got a compilation of whatever I post here. In my head and in my files, lol grin

I'll drop another soon but right now I have to go
peace!
Re: My Poem by Wale102: 1:35am On Oct 17, 2006
I let dem go 2 watse shocked but i have some i wrote
Re: My Poem by Scorpio(f): 1:53am On Oct 17, 2006
uh huh! grin ur case is another game entirely
Re: My Poem by Wale102: 5:45am On Oct 17, 2006
lol scorp i wouldn't be me if i didn;t act the way i act

Listen to the song cry, I'm given you a long bye. I'm trying to show you the love you've giving me, was giving to the wrong guy. Time apart, just to find our heats. Another fight isn't right, I'm not try to start. They say love lasts forever, when you love laugh together. I alway thought me and u, would share one path forever. Torn apart, as soon as we formed our hearts. It felt like it ended as soon we form a start. We persist to try now we face the kiss goodbye. I sometimes feel you should  never  have been with the guy. "But I still love you" the mrs replys. But the mrs denies, that this is a lie. So he walks up to her and kisses her bye.
Re: My Poem by Wale102: 6:32am On Oct 17, 2006
Not feeling you, absorbing you, sing "morning" to the morning dew
cause my sunshine just keeps on pouring through
Crimson lips, precision hips, for you I'll do the time, if the prison fits
Eyes, wise two pools of the sky, to cool but surprised, for you I would lie
Whisper of voice, my sista choice, so I went up 2 da girl, and gave the sista a choice
Like choose me abuse me but I refuse thy to lose me, cause truly your my duty
Re: My Poem by whiteboy(m): 3:07pm On Oct 17, 2006
Nice one Wale, I dig the second one.

Peace!!
Re: My Poem by whiteboy(m): 3:15pm On Oct 17, 2006
Here's one for y'all who don't want to spend your next birthday close to Africa's steaming sun.

AFRICAN SUN

African sun my African sun
Pouring down your intense heat
on my head you show no mercy
and on my skin you show no pity

You make the ground look baked
and as I walk the street I feel the heat
eating its way through my shoe
and into my feet

African sun my African sun
Seducing me to stay and play
till my grey day, that okay
but i'll rather celebrate my next birthday
far away from you my African sun
Re: My Poem by Scorpio(f): 7:04pm On Oct 17, 2006
lol wale, it's all gud. just keep 'em comin grin
Re: My Poem by Wale102: 9:48pm On Oct 17, 2006
Ahh I wish i can spend my birthday under the african sun
Re: My Poem by Wale102: 10:06pm On Oct 17, 2006
seem like everyone is a fan of love poetry grin oh well let keep em going

Instantely she's into me, thinks of me instintively. Smiles at me visously, closes her eyes when she kisses me.
When I'm gone she misses me, when we play around she disses me. And when I come home late, she looks
at me suspicously. She loves me to death, were one lovely duet. For money or debt know honey were set.
Your my honey bunny, no matter how much money we get.
Re: My Poem by Scorpio(f): 10:08pm On Oct 17, 2006
honey bunny ko grin can you please post some of ur ''mystery'' stuff? thank you cool
Re: My Poem by Wale102: 10:16pm On Oct 17, 2006
haha yeah hunny bunny, not one of my most fav lines ok why not mystery
Re: My Poem by Wale102: 12:03am On Oct 18, 2006
His sanity's anatomy, gradually, turns colamity
Burns insanity, Words, "examine me".
Were spoken, he's hoping, he's coping.
He's burning, he's soaking, he's freezing, he's choking.
He's shaking, He's nervous, he needs 2 be smoking.
He's talking, he's screaming, he needs 2 be open.

It's day, it's nite, the sun, the moon "the way it's brite".
The weight, the fight, to hate the light? my chest, my throat, the way it's tight".
Rain, pain "plz maintain" The road is slippery "plz change lanes".
He's swerving, he's yearning, he dead, he's determined.
The burden, concerning, his eyes keeps on burning.
For peace, diciest "at least its some sleep".
At least it will keep, a feast for the deep,
Re: My Poem by kkutecolo(f): 1:04pm On Oct 18, 2006
She was sleeping peacefully in her room
Oblivious of what awaits her
I walked in to check on her
And it just came over me
It gripped me like scarlet fever

There was a train track
Just some feet away from our backyard
This evil thought became so strong
I sprung into action

I lifted her up
Not a stir from her
I walked out of the room
Not a murmur
Then towards the railway
Not a shout still
I got excited

I laid her quietly on the tracks
And retreated to await the result
I heard a deafening sound
And knew the hour had come

I opened my eyes just in time
To see her wriggle her small body
On the rails and under the train
As the train walked on her
The air became still
So still all life could die
And the sun disappeared


no ryhmes, guys. more like imagination
we need a change for a while though those ryhmes are great
wadya think?
Re: My Poem by somegirl(f): 4:08pm On Oct 18, 2006
shocked
Re: My Poem by Wale102: 11:01pm On Oct 18, 2006
that free verse was really good grin
Re: My Poem by Scorpio(f): 4:26am On Oct 20, 2006
@ Kkutecolo, my kinda poem grin
Re: My Poem by somegirl(f): 11:19pm On Oct 20, 2006
@Kkutecolo: Somehow, I like it but it scares me at the same time! shocked
Re: My Poem by whiteboy(m): 11:16am On Oct 21, 2006
Guys!
I'm back again and it feels real good to be back. Y'all have been dropping nice verses and I luv them all.

Peace!
Re: My Poem by kkutecolo(f): 3:58pm On Oct 23, 2006
thanx

@ somegirl, u man there's a lil bit of scare in dat?

scorpio, wat kind of poem do u like?

whiteboy, u are welcome back.
Re: My Poem by somegirl(f): 5:55pm On Oct 23, 2006
Yes, because I can put myself either in the victim's place or the murderer's place and it is scary, either the thought of having my trust being misused like that or of letting one of my inner demons influence my doing in such a horrible way.
Re: My Poem by whiteboy(m): 11:41am On Oct 24, 2006
Thanks Kutecolor,
Thats nice! real cool verses. I see nothin scary about that and I wonder why somegirl thinks it is. Its cool, hit me with another,

Here's one tho, it was composed yesterday for someone but here it is for y'all cuties who really worth a 'soulja' like me

WHAT SHE WORTHS

I searched and she was found
then a relationship became bound
I esteem her more than sceptres and thrones
and compare her to none of those
I now see riches as nothin
cos with her I know i've got somethin

I reckon no priceless stone to be her peer
for compared with her, gold seems to be old
and silver ranks no good
I adore her more than health or beauty
and prefer her voice to the sounds of the 60's

I love her more than daylight
and even a peaceful night
cos her radiance never sleeps; even at night
On her shoulder she gets a kiss from me
cos in her company all good things come to me
On my shoulder she rests whenever she's stressed
cos i'm a 'soulja' ver willing to hold her


Peace! grin
Re: My Poem by kkutecolo(f): 4:38pm On Oct 24, 2006
hey evry1, here's d continuation, wat do u think? its titled devil's vice


I turned white and began to crumble

Waking up to a faint sound from afar

I realized what I had done

I had sent my only sister to her early grave!

It dawned on me suddenly

Then an idea struck me like gold

I ought to do same thing to my self


I moved towards the track and slept on it

Another train was moving closer

I felt strong but jumped off the track

When it almost got to me


Then I remembered the main road

I opted for that and walked there

I stood still in the middle eyes closed

But to my terror and surprise

The car stopped,

Blaring its horn at me

I was disappointed as I walked home


Then I came near the river

Just before I got home

I brightened up and went towards it,


I suddenly found myself at the bottom

Not knowing how I jumped in

I looked around to see I was surrounded

By savage-looking monsters

Looking keenly at me hungrily

I felt sick and dizzy


Watching with terror as I saw one of them

Point at something,

My heart immediately jumped into my mouth


There were sharp murdering knives

Arranged in all sizes

I was asked to choose

My own messenger of death

I was then tied to a slate

Shivering as I watched them smack their

Bloodstained mouths hungry for my flesh


I was sure my capture was a blessing to them

To be celebrated after my eventual death


My sister’s death was nobler than my

Impending death, I thought wryly in fright

As I watched them make the fire

To roast my pale flesh

Waiting for my nasty death and doom!
Re: My Poem by kkutecolo(f): 4:44pm On Oct 24, 2006
oh mine!!!
thats so cooool whiteboy
its really splendid. i love it

@somegirl, i get wat u mean. it can get dat way. but its just imagination, never really happened. get some grip.

where's wale99 gone, cant c his recent posts.
scorpio, wer are u too?
want u guys back on track now!!!!!!!!!!! grin
Re: My Poem by somegirl(f): 4:54pm On Oct 24, 2006
Hehe, I thought that it is actually one of the strengths of your poem, that it is such gripping. grin
Re: My Poem by whiteboy(m): 5:24pm On Oct 24, 2006
Thanks Kutie,
Nice one you've also got there. It cool and I love it too. I also wonder where Wale has gone. I hope to hear from you soon.

ciao
Re: My Poem by Scorpio(f): 10:16pm On Oct 24, 2006
u guyz are really good ei! kkcutecolo, finish up ur poem pls grin @whiteboi, welcome back,,good stuff too cheesy
Re: My Poem by whiteboy(m): 9:22am On Oct 25, 2006
Thanks Scorpio,
How r u doing? Glad to have you back. I wonder where Wale has gone.

Kutie, hit me up with another one of those your poems! I love them.

Peace y'all

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