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Re: My Poem by whiteboy(m): 6:15pm On Oct 15, 2006 |
Hey Scorpio, you don't have to like love poems just feel them. Dig this? Let me know! HEART TO HEART ( Circa '03 ) Heart to heart, you and I A soulmate I need and a true friend indeed yours and mine together as one, United we'll stand but divided we'll fall Heart to heart is a plan that works Talking with you and sharing real thoughts Feeling alone? You should call on my phone Never again will you be on your own Your heart for my heart, what about that? Walk on my path and I won't break your heart Heart to heart we should live just as one Sincere soulmates and not just bedmates How about that Scorpio? Peace |
Re: My Poem by Scorpio(f): 12:05am On Oct 16, 2006 |
@Whiteboi, i try, but i only seem to ''feel'' a lil; ur latest looks good tho. do you guyz compile all this or y'all just let it go to waste? |
Re: My Poem by lauryn(f): 12:48am On Oct 16, 2006 |
Ms Instigator Them ask U |
Re: My Poem by Scorpio(f): 5:06pm On Oct 16, 2006 |
sharrap dia jor! |
Re: My Poem by whiteboy(m): 7:28pm On Oct 16, 2006 |
Thanks Kutecolor! Scorpio, all these are works from my archive so I guess you know i've got a compilation of whatever I post here. In my head and in my files, lol I'll drop another soon but right now I have to go peace! |
Re: My Poem by Wale102: 1:35am On Oct 17, 2006 |
I let dem go 2 watse but i have some i wrote |
Re: My Poem by Scorpio(f): 1:53am On Oct 17, 2006 |
uh huh! ur case is another game entirely |
Re: My Poem by Wale102: 5:45am On Oct 17, 2006 |
lol scorp i wouldn't be me if i didn;t act the way i act Listen to the song cry, I'm given you a long bye. I'm trying to show you the love you've giving me, was giving to the wrong guy. Time apart, just to find our heats. Another fight isn't right, I'm not try to start. They say love lasts forever, when you love laugh together. I alway thought me and u, would share one path forever. Torn apart, as soon as we formed our hearts. It felt like it ended as soon we form a start. We persist to try now we face the kiss goodbye. I sometimes feel you should never have been with the guy. "But I still love you" the mrs replys. But the mrs denies, that this is a lie. So he walks up to her and kisses her bye. |
Re: My Poem by Wale102: 6:32am On Oct 17, 2006 |
Not feeling you, absorbing you, sing "morning" to the morning dew cause my sunshine just keeps on pouring through Crimson lips, precision hips, for you I'll do the time, if the prison fits Eyes, wise two pools of the sky, to cool but surprised, for you I would lie Whisper of voice, my sista choice, so I went up 2 da girl, and gave the sista a choice Like choose me abuse me but I refuse thy to lose me, cause truly your my duty |
Re: My Poem by whiteboy(m): 3:07pm On Oct 17, 2006 |
Nice one Wale, I dig the second one. Peace!! |
Re: My Poem by whiteboy(m): 3:15pm On Oct 17, 2006 |
Here's one for y'all who don't want to spend your next birthday close to Africa's steaming sun. AFRICAN SUN African sun my African sun Pouring down your intense heat on my head you show no mercy and on my skin you show no pity You make the ground look baked and as I walk the street I feel the heat eating its way through my shoe and into my feet African sun my African sun Seducing me to stay and play till my grey day, that okay but i'll rather celebrate my next birthday far away from you my African sun |
Re: My Poem by Scorpio(f): 7:04pm On Oct 17, 2006 |
lol wale, it's all gud. just keep 'em comin |
Re: My Poem by Wale102: 9:48pm On Oct 17, 2006 |
Ahh I wish i can spend my birthday under the african sun |
Re: My Poem by Wale102: 10:06pm On Oct 17, 2006 |
seem like everyone is a fan of love poetry oh well let keep em going Instantely she's into me, thinks of me instintively. Smiles at me visously, closes her eyes when she kisses me. When I'm gone she misses me, when we play around she disses me. And when I come home late, she looks at me suspicously. She loves me to death, were one lovely duet. For money or debt know honey were set. Your my honey bunny, no matter how much money we get. |
Re: My Poem by Scorpio(f): 10:08pm On Oct 17, 2006 |
honey bunny ko can you please post some of ur ''mystery'' stuff? thank you |
Re: My Poem by Wale102: 10:16pm On Oct 17, 2006 |
haha yeah hunny bunny, not one of my most fav lines ok why not mystery |
Re: My Poem by Wale102: 12:03am On Oct 18, 2006 |
His sanity's anatomy, gradually, turns colamity Burns insanity, Words, "examine me". Were spoken, he's hoping, he's coping. He's burning, he's soaking, he's freezing, he's choking. He's shaking, He's nervous, he needs 2 be smoking. He's talking, he's screaming, he needs 2 be open. It's day, it's nite, the sun, the moon "the way it's brite". The weight, the fight, to hate the light? my chest, my throat, the way it's tight". Rain, pain "plz maintain" The road is slippery "plz change lanes". He's swerving, he's yearning, he dead, he's determined. The burden, concerning, his eyes keeps on burning. For peace, diciest "at least its some sleep". At least it will keep, a feast for the deep, |
Re: My Poem by kkutecolo(f): 1:04pm On Oct 18, 2006 |
She was sleeping peacefully in her room Oblivious of what awaits her I walked in to check on her And it just came over me It gripped me like scarlet fever There was a train track Just some feet away from our backyard This evil thought became so strong I sprung into action I lifted her up Not a stir from her I walked out of the room Not a murmur Then towards the railway Not a shout still I got excited I laid her quietly on the tracks And retreated to await the result I heard a deafening sound And knew the hour had come I opened my eyes just in time To see her wriggle her small body On the rails and under the train As the train walked on her The air became still So still all life could die And the sun disappeared no ryhmes, guys. more like imagination we need a change for a while though those ryhmes are great wadya think? |
Re: My Poem by somegirl(f): 4:08pm On Oct 18, 2006 |
Re: My Poem by Wale102: 11:01pm On Oct 18, 2006 |
that free verse was really good |
Re: My Poem by Scorpio(f): 4:26am On Oct 20, 2006 |
@ Kkutecolo, my kinda poem |
Re: My Poem by somegirl(f): 11:19pm On Oct 20, 2006 |
@Kkutecolo: Somehow, I like it but it scares me at the same time! |
Re: My Poem by whiteboy(m): 11:16am On Oct 21, 2006 |
Guys! I'm back again and it feels real good to be back. Y'all have been dropping nice verses and I luv them all. Peace! |
Re: My Poem by kkutecolo(f): 3:58pm On Oct 23, 2006 |
thanx @ somegirl, u man there's a lil bit of scare in dat? scorpio, wat kind of poem do u like? whiteboy, u are welcome back. |
Re: My Poem by somegirl(f): 5:55pm On Oct 23, 2006 |
Yes, because I can put myself either in the victim's place or the murderer's place and it is scary, either the thought of having my trust being misused like that or of letting one of my inner demons influence my doing in such a horrible way. |
Re: My Poem by whiteboy(m): 11:41am On Oct 24, 2006 |
Thanks Kutecolor, Thats nice! real cool verses. I see nothin scary about that and I wonder why somegirl thinks it is. Its cool, hit me with another, Here's one tho, it was composed yesterday for someone but here it is for y'all cuties who really worth a 'soulja' like me WHAT SHE WORTHS I searched and she was found then a relationship became bound I esteem her more than sceptres and thrones and compare her to none of those I now see riches as nothin cos with her I know i've got somethin I reckon no priceless stone to be her peer for compared with her, gold seems to be old and silver ranks no good I adore her more than health or beauty and prefer her voice to the sounds of the 60's I love her more than daylight and even a peaceful night cos her radiance never sleeps; even at night On her shoulder she gets a kiss from me cos in her company all good things come to me On my shoulder she rests whenever she's stressed cos i'm a 'soulja' ver willing to hold her Peace! |
Re: My Poem by kkutecolo(f): 4:38pm On Oct 24, 2006 |
hey evry1, here's d continuation, wat do u think? its titled devil's vice I turned white and began to crumble Waking up to a faint sound from afar I realized what I had done I had sent my only sister to her early grave! It dawned on me suddenly Then an idea struck me like gold I ought to do same thing to my self I moved towards the track and slept on it Another train was moving closer I felt strong but jumped off the track When it almost got to me Then I remembered the main road I opted for that and walked there I stood still in the middle eyes closed But to my terror and surprise The car stopped, Blaring its horn at me I was disappointed as I walked home Then I came near the river Just before I got home I brightened up and went towards it, I suddenly found myself at the bottom Not knowing how I jumped in I looked around to see I was surrounded By savage-looking monsters Looking keenly at me hungrily I felt sick and dizzy Watching with terror as I saw one of them Point at something, My heart immediately jumped into my mouth There were sharp murdering knives Arranged in all sizes I was asked to choose My own messenger of death I was then tied to a slate Shivering as I watched them smack their Bloodstained mouths hungry for my flesh I was sure my capture was a blessing to them To be celebrated after my eventual death My sister’s death was nobler than my Impending death, I thought wryly in fright As I watched them make the fire To roast my pale flesh Waiting for my nasty death and doom! |
Re: My Poem by kkutecolo(f): 4:44pm On Oct 24, 2006 |
oh mine!!! thats so cooool whiteboy its really splendid. i love it @somegirl, i get wat u mean. it can get dat way. but its just imagination, never really happened. get some grip. where's wale99 gone, cant c his recent posts. scorpio, wer are u too? want u guys back on track now!!!!!!!!!!! |
Re: My Poem by somegirl(f): 4:54pm On Oct 24, 2006 |
Hehe, I thought that it is actually one of the strengths of your poem, that it is such gripping. |
Re: My Poem by whiteboy(m): 5:24pm On Oct 24, 2006 |
Thanks Kutie, Nice one you've also got there. It cool and I love it too. I also wonder where Wale has gone. I hope to hear from you soon. ciao |
Re: My Poem by Scorpio(f): 10:16pm On Oct 24, 2006 |
u guyz are really good ei! kkcutecolo, finish up ur poem pls @whiteboi, welcome back,,good stuff too |
Re: My Poem by whiteboy(m): 9:22am On Oct 25, 2006 |
Thanks Scorpio, How r u doing? Glad to have you back. I wonder where Wale has gone. Kutie, hit me up with another one of those your poems! I love them. Peace y'all |
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