As i walk along the cold distant shores
i feel a warm sensation flow rite under me
could it be wind could it be water
could it be the spirit
i cant tell when it has gone
but i knoe smthing stirred up inside me.
, lol

Ol' boy, put some discipline into this work, and come out with something great.

Stop being lazy.

hmmmmmm!
u amaze me friend.
u can do better if u take time out to write over and over again.
nice one though.

hi there,

inspite of what fellow nairalnders might have said , i think your poem's pretty good , makes sense and a whole lot of folks can relate to it , not too deep but there's a lot 2 read between the lines.
only minus is some of ur choice of words and incorrect spellings that could completely take the context outta ur cipher!
otherwise, nice work man , u can only get better!