This poem is feminist.Please make your critics and discuss with me.

Sleepless night
It's feels so real
Having realize you're awake
because of your vision in plan
Keeping focus for the bread of life
Would I ever forget this night

A night that gives more strength to humanity
Head down on a pillow
So hard to sleep ,pondering
What tomorrow holds for you
But it's never too late to predict a future

The birds quirks in my heart
Worried mind of a better tomorrow
In you I see the light that gladden my heart.
We would conquer to win

Free to fly like a bird
As it shows the success a conqueror.

meckiano:
This poem is feminist.Please make your critics and discuss with me.

Sleepless night
It's feels so real
Having realize you're awake
because of your vision in plan
Keeping focus for the bread of life
Would I ever forget this night

A night that gives more strength to humanity
Head down on a pillow
So hard to sleep ,pondering
What tomorrow holds for you
But it's never too late to predict a future

The birds quirks in my heart
Worried mind of a better tomorrow
In you I see the light that gladden my heart.
We would conquer to win

Free to fly like a bird
As it shows the success a conqueror.

i get the poem but i really don't see how it is feminist (maybe you should shed more light on that)


I love this line

"the birds quirk in my heart"

i'm thinking your use of the birds means the thoughts that are going through your mind and giving you that sleepless night.

In addition,this line caught my attention

A night that gives more strength to humanity

How does a sleepless night give strength to humanity? I'm sure it's by working on your thoughts, ideas and plans and make them fruitful for humans to enjoy.


In all its a nice poem but you can do better.

funny man
u want us to test proof ur poem b4 presenting to ur special sum1 abi

anyways

d poem kinda too short and not very descriptive
no head no tail
am still trying to get d point from it
I will suggest u complete it