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|Win by sonnie10: 9:15pm On Feb 26, 2019|
|Re: Win by Ishilove: 9:23pm On Feb 28, 2019|
Ifyalways, below are the first three entries:
The story is fun and she kind of reminds me of Naija Single Girl, except for the fact that the image she painted of the Director was a bit confusing. When I think of the Director, I see an Ostrich in my mind's eye.
He is a 'guy' with a long neck.
Some paragraphs later, he is a 'fat belle man'.
You see why I think of an Ostrich when I try to picture the director?
Asides this inconsistency, she has good control of her language, is able to use imagery and creative exaggeration to stir up our imagination, and most importantly, seems to have had fun while writing it. Love what you do, even if you don't do what you love. It is also a narration of 'what I ordered for vs what I got'
I wonder if there are really people with so much Favour.
Asides that, as finicky as I am when it comes to all things writing, I couldn't find a single fault with his essay. He went straight to the point, narrated in clear language suitable for a simple narrative essay and finished it like the pro he undoubtedly is.
Reading his essay cast my memory back to my days of reading 'The Adventures of Nackson' and 'Ikebe Super'.
Ify, you asked for real life experiences, he gave us Super Story.
He was also meandering and I must confess my eyes kinda glazed over briefly before swimming back into focus (skipped a couple of lines in the process too, but I doubt I missed anything spectacular )
He is obviously a porn fan but that doesn't mean he should needlessly spice a simple essay whose central theme is job hunting experience with so much sexuality. From begginning to end is sex, while only a negligible number of sentences is devoted to telling the reader about the job he went to look for.
|Re: Win by Ishilove: 10:22pm On Feb 28, 2019|
Ifyalways, the next three-
She committed the 'grave sin' of using shorthand, as far as I am concerned. I saw red when she used 'Juz', instead of 'just'. I often wonder why people use shorthand, especially when the so called longer form is longer by just a letter or two. It beats my imagination. Shorthand invariably trickles into your formal writings, even at the most innocuous times. Imagine writing 'juz' in a formal assessment. The result would be unpalatable.
She also used verbs wrongly, and misspelled a couple. You shouldn't use words whose spellings you're unsure of.
Be that as it may, she described a typical day in the life of a Nigerian graduate job hunter. It's so sad
It seems she got carried away and forgot that using informal slangs is very tricky, especially in a multi-lingual, multicultural society. It is not even advisable to use slangs in competitions because you don't know the social orientation of the judge(s).
What on this green earth does 'speaking turenchi' mean?
Her youth is evident in her essay, and her narration of the destruction of naivete is particularly touching and poignant.
I'm not sure if this essay is up to 400 words, but if it is, it's a simple read and very straight to the point. The 'nodding like an agama lizard' part got me. I sense that what she wrote is far lesser than what she did not say. I sensed so much current in her write up. It's not artistic or particularly compelling, but it says a lot if you can read between the lines.(I am guessing she wrote it in a hurry)
Shocking narrative. I kept hoping I would read 'i slapped the baba' or 'I punched him in his balls with my fist of fury.'
It's well written, funny and sad. Really galling.
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