Hi all, just thought I'd share another poem with you all, if you like it and would love to see more pls follow the link at the end.
Cheers!

PS:
Comments woul be appreciated.

Citizen of the world

Khaleefa ©2005


I’ve heard the winds howls
Countless bells’ chimes
Far in the Savannah, Lions growls

Crossed many rivers
Slept in the wild, endured many shivers
Skiied and snow-boarded many a slope
Surfed, rode the waves, oooh, how dope

I’ve travelled the world
From Jersey to Johannesburg
Lagos to Luxemburg
Heard its each and every word
I’ve stood under the stars
Marvelling the vastness of space
Wondering the day we’d make it to Mars

I’m a son of the Earth
‘Been that …right from birth
I’ve eaten its fruits, drunk its wine
Read its poetry, line after line
Its tyrants, its statesmen, their story word for word
Held its daughters in carnal embrace
And celebrated the beauty of their body, their face
Yes, I’m a citizen of the world

http://poet-khaleefa..com/

I like it. . . a really nice piece. i like the theme and really dig your cipher!

but i think it has a lot of "loose ends"; some of the verses like the first are still hanging "open" and thats as a result of the fact that you used the the rhyme.
some of the line placements take out some consistency, but all in all its a good piece. . . one worth listening to time and again!

Thanks for the feedback RuuDie. 
Points noted too.
Cheers!

Khaleefa:

I’ve heard the winds howls
Countless bells’ chimes
Far in the Savannah, Lions growls

It is wrong grammatically to use the plural "howls" and "growls" the way you have done {within the lines/sentence}. I'd advice you to take out the "s" in both and leave them as "howl" and "growl"