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Hi Steph, please I am inviting you to take a critical look at some of the poems I posted on this section. Please criticize them for me. The captions of the poems are: Midnight Blues, Nostalgia, In Love With A Goddess. Please let me know what you think of them.

Riskie, please you can go thru some of my poems. They are here in the Poetry section. The captions are: In Love With A Goddess, Nostalgia, Midnight Blues et al. Please I need to get your professional thoughts on the poems. Thanks

Just like the poetry section, is there any DRAMA section in Nairaland where one can exchange views with like-minds? Any idea somebody?

I always marvel
At the loud silence of this place
By the freezing romantic touch of the breeze
Against my sumersaulting skin
I watch the mountain’s peak
Kiss the happy clouds
I listen to the songs of the butterflies
As they gyrate over the waters
I watch the wind as it hugs the trees
And shoves their hair backwards
Even the grasses would bend over
Muttering messages into my ears
The fishes too, would whisper fantasies into my eyes
As they perform their circus
Yes, I’m in love with the goddess…

I always melt
When the music of the free birds
Caress my tender, vessel heart
When serenity overwhelms me
And forces me into euphoria
When my mind walks away my body
And journeys to places
Places I never thought I could be
Beating into me the unfamiliar tunes of a familiar dance
Causing me a temporal insanity
As though I’m in a trance
As the river goddess seduces my thoughts
As my ink overflows my paper
Bringing forth the most romantic of all poems
Yes, I’m in love with the goddess of poetry.



Obinwanne Seaman Barry. Copyright © 2007, All Rights Reserved.

I always marvel
At the loud silence of this place
By the freezing romantic touch of the breeze
Against my sumersaulting skin
I watch the mountain’s peak
Kiss the happy clouds
I listen to the songs of the butterflies
As they gyrate over the waters
I watch the wind as it hugs the trees
And shoves their hair backwards
Even the grasses would bend over
Muttering messages into my ears
The fishes too, would whisper fantasies into my eyes
As they perform their circus
Yes, I’m in love with the goddess…

I always melt
When the music of the free birds
Caress my tender, vessel heart
When serenity overwhelms me
And forces me into euphoria
When my mind walks away my body
And journeys to places
Places I never thought I could be
Beating into me the unfamiliar tunes of a familiar dance
Causing me a temporal insanity
As though I’m in a trance
As the river goddess seduces my thoughts
As my ink overflows my paper
Bringing forth the most romantic of all poems
Yes, I’m in love with the goddess of poetry.



Obinwanne Seaman Barry. Copyright © 2007, All Rights Reserved.

Loud sound of silence steadily resounds,
as stillness reigns in full sovereignty.
Through vision the dimension has no end,
as darkness colors the world black.
Crickets hum away the Midnight Blues,
as the muse hugs the Poet.
Shortly, a sonorous smile of discovery,
as he achieves the maximum satisfaction.






All rights reserved seaman

Loud sound of silence steadily resounds,
as stillness reigns in full sovereignty.
Through vision the dimension has no end,
as darkness colors the world black.
Crickets hum away the Midnight Blues,
as the muse hugs the Poet.
Shortly, a sonorous smile of discovery,
as he achieves the maximum satisfaction.






All rights reserved seaman

Away from the sugary land of my birth
Of some million, million hills and mountains,
She stood calling.
The soothing voice of nostalgia,
With each wave of the ocean,
Beckoned me home to the land of abundant green.

Standing there by splashing waters,
I felt her in the ice-cold breeze,
As she hugged me in reminiscence,
Gripped me so strongly, luring me home,
Against the wishes of circumstance

I can hear your soundless voice
In the sonorous songs of these seagulls,
As they gyrate over the waters,
Flapping endless memories of you,
With each stroke of their wings
Like those black kites at home

I picture you dressed in green,
Just like yesterday
I imagine you dressed in visions and in voices
Voices of my childhood,
Of my peers and of the gardens,
Bidding me to my mother's orchard
Where life for me, was born,





All rights reserved seaman

Away from the sugary land of my birth
Of some million, million hills and mountains,
She stood calling.
The soothing voice of nostalgia,
With each wave of the ocean,
Beckoned me home to the land of abundant green.

Standing there by splashing waters,
I felt her in the ice-cold breeze,
As she hugged me in reminiscence,
Gripped me so strongly, luring me home,
Against the wishes of circumstance

I can hear your soundless voice
In the sonorous songs of these seagulls,
As they gyrate over the waters,
Flapping endless memories of you,
With each stroke of their wings
Like those black kites at home

I picture you dressed in green,
Just like yesterday
I imagine you dressed in visions and in voices
Voices of my childhood,
Of my peers and of the gardens,
Bidding me to my mother's orchard
Where life for me, was born,





All rights reserved: Seaman

Alright, alright everyone!
I urge you, come with me y'all and register at www.mypoetryforum.com
This is a website where you meet people (great poets) from all over the world.
They are there to review your work (without grudges or biase) and bring out the best in you.
I want you all to give it a shot. Right in this forum, you'D meet with great poetry teachers from across the globe, of course there are amateurs as well. They will all add their voices to your work and give your poem the shape, breadth and life that it may lack.
Give it a shot! No one knows it all. let the whole world assist you to modify your work to the best standards.

Registration is free. If you lack anything, come to me, I will assist you in any possible way. my contact is ugofantastik@yahoo.com.

There are other sites like voicesnet.com et al. The choice is yours. But i have never loved to visit any other site other than www.mypoetryforum.com

Come on somebody

Alright, alright everyone!
I urge you, come with me y'all and register at www.mypoetryforum.com
This is a website where you meet people (great poets) from all over the world.
They are there to review your work (without grudges or biase) and bring out the best in you.
I want you all to give it a shot. Right in this forum, you'D meet with great poetry teachers from across the globe,  of course there are amateurs as well. They will all add their voices to your work and give your poem the shape, breadth and life that it may lack.
Give it a shot! No one knows it all. let the whole world assist you to modify your work to the best standards.

Registration is free. If you lack anything, come to me, I will assist you in any possible way. my contact is ugofantastik@yahoo.com.

There are other sites like voicesnet.com et al. The choice is yours. But i have never loved to visit any other site other than www.mypoetryforum.com

Come on somebody

Riskie, you sure are a poet with a difference.
I love the excessive outpour of emotion in this work.
It can make any heart tingle with love.
Do some more Riskie

Fellow Nairalanders! This idea is a bomb! I am game!!!
Which way forward? How do we get it started?
Let me be put on notice the second we kick it off.
My contact is ugofantastik@yahoo.com

I couldn't believe that something like this ever existed. To make my day, I started with Stephen's poem and got it worth the whole while. Frankly speaking, Stephen put down much more than my heart could contain. I had goose bumps and swollen head as I read down. This is fantastic!

But the big question is: how do we rate these poems? We need to know how well or badly we are performing. We got to get other great poets review our works and criticise them. For me, that's much more growing than reading for the fun of it. What do anyone say?

Because Nairaland is a free forum does not give you the impetus to murder 'because' because I am really getting pissed off.