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Joizy:
I must confes,ur stori z awesome,ur pattern is captivatin.i jux cud nt stop readin it.after readin brand of cain i was so bent on readin d paradox of abel.nd nw am done.ama try catch up wif black maria.u r d bomb larri.so lov ur workx 2 pieces.kip it cumin bro,mre ink 2 ya pen,mre grease 2 ya elbow.pix

Thank you so much, ma'am. I'm indeed grateful. I promise you, the third book in this series would be intriguing.

Bless you.

UjSizzle:
Larrysun, I think the "flaming head" is supposed to indicate a fever.

Yes, to indicate high temperature. I still think a better metaphor should have been adopted.

A brilliantly-written flash fiction. Well done, sir.

RICKYMARIO:
wow this is getting interesting, can't take my eyes off this story.

Thanks, Rick!

Kitme:
How many weeks/months now, and the story is very much in touch.
You're a fireball, I tell you

WOW! Isn't this the wonderful Kitty? Awesome!

It's nice to have you back, ma'am.

mhizISZY:
WOW just WOW WOW WOW

great work you have here larrysun..you have convinced me that we truly have literary geniuses here in Nigeria

Am glad that my trek into this thread is not a waste.
I am so glad that am reading your works later rather than sooner because the suspense would have been to robust to handle.

I love ur stories but the one problem I have with them is that you always make the circle to wide that it is hard to know who you met in the beginning(too much connection between characters that it now becomes a soduku to keep track of them)

you remind me of my classmate..you know
All in all-ten fingers up to you cos a thumb is too little an acknowledgement for such a great piece


WHEW*wipes off sweat* that was lengthy anyway
thanks for making me believe in Nigerian writers again..BIG GBOSA TO and also update

Wow! All these for me? I'm speechless. I feel loved. I think I'm beginning to have a family here. You guys keep me going. Your comments give me more strength to ride on.

Thank you, ma'am.

Jumizie13:
#singing# i want more of youuuuu

And I'll give you more, ma'am.

zyzxx:
At last I catch up
Larryson come update plsss

Updated, sir.

alabig:
Just imagining how suspensful and hilarious behaviour mr akanni would display.

LOL! I can truly imagine that!

But I'm not going to describe it.

RICKYMARIO:
Something told me he [black] had it all worked out when he was forming relaxed
still following.

It fills me with glee to still see you around, sir.

morsadh:
Now following...

Just looking through the Lit. Section and I came across this. A nice story with twists and turns so far. I almost never forgave you for almost killing off Basket, but was happy he came through.

The protagonist is one of the many whose lives have been altered at a very tender age, and for one whose brilliant and intelligent, it is sad to see him on the paths of crime and vengeance. I see many innocent people getting hurt in the future, because it is going to be ugly.

Anyways, I am returning to the background again, and I am awaiting your update. Your stories are all beauties, and I can only say more power to your elbow, more ink to your pen and more MB to your phone.

Morsadh said so!

Thank you so much, sir, for reading...and for you prayers.

mackzydon9:
If there would be an award for emotional story of dah year i would vote your story

I would feel honoured, sir.

Nickymezor:
My gudness, Blackie is really something else ...Well done Mr LarrySun...

He is full of surprises; tricky like a barrel full of monkeys.

heftycul:
Oga larrysun
Gat notin to say here but one thing
MAY GOD INCREASE YOU IN KNOWLEDGE AND UNDERSTANDING
U are more than Good

Amen!
Thank you, sir.

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Missmossy:
Terrific, following.

Thank you, 'Mossy. You're welcome here.

BobUg28:
Great one again from LarrySun, keep 'em coming please.

Thank you, sir.

nicholausian:
I think 'kidnapped without his parents' consent' was intended to be funny, because, of course... (Finally, someone noticed the intent.)
It's an excellent piece, but I worry it may become drab. I mean, the solemn, serious tone serves its purpose but isn't interestingness the go-word?. (It may not be drab if the writer is wise enough to maintain the height of suspense. And I assure you, sir, it's not entirely that seriously gory along the way.)
Please explain how Idris could have known the time the journey lasted, when his hands and legs had been tied together. I'm not going to mention that he was in a boot, assuming his digital watch had an LED backlight. (This is an intelligent criticism. Thank you, sir, for pointing that out; I didn't even see it.)
And what does the expression 'stringed up like a log of wood' mean anyway? (I used it to give a clear mental picture, sir.)

Thank you, Nic. You're awesome.

prettydiva89:
Nice story as usual. MY INIOUITIES

Thank you, Diva.

TheSonOfMark:

The story starts with Idris being haunted by flashbacks from that gory scene. How then do the readers/listeners get to feel what Idris feels if that scene isn't graphic enough? I think the use of imagery there is necessary. That insight into the gore that took place helps us understand why Idris is haunted.
The author hasn't crossed that supposed moral line 'cause the description doesn't extend to the mutiliation of the corpse and how it was disposed off.
♦

Thank you, sir. I feel your command of the language.

zinylicious:
Nice one Mr LarrySun... Keep it up

Thank you, ma'am. I'm glad you find it nice.

stuff46:

JigsawKillah:
Nice. I like the thought of havin' to cheat to live. It happens everyday in the society.



Followin'

Thank you, Jiggy. The moral value of humanity is gradually pointing south.

manuel80:
nice story Larry bt wat of black maria. remember you've Nt concluded the story

Black Maria is still on. It's my latest favourite; I can't ignore it

llaykorn:
The audio's soundtrack is Westlife's Easy Way?

Lol! No, it's not.

llaykorn:
As usual, this is captivating! Everything of Larrysun's is.


However, I expected the episode to end at 'Boom!' as it happens in movies. The paragraph after 'Boom!' really took me with surprise. I never expected that. I didn't feel good reading it either, and I'm sure most people won't.

#Following...

I didn't feel good writing it either, but I had to write it.

I've decided to shield the graphic descriptions from the reading of the innocent minds. Any twisted mind like mine (as sweet Ishi has conjectured) can go ahead and download the audio.

Thank you, bro, for reading.

Ishilove:
Larrysun, lovely as usual.

You do have a delightfully twisted mind!

A teenager playing Russian Roulette. That is rather morbid, to put it mildly. The graphic depiction of the death of a child causes one's stomach to churn ulcer causing acids.

I do have a problem with Gwoza as the origin of Idris. And the date, 2008... Boko Haram began to metamorphose after the extra-judiciary killing of their leader in 2009. Before then they were a rag-tag assortment of ne'er-do-wells preaching against western education to poverty stricken and ignorant folks, so 2008 is rather anachronistic.

I also noticed a line 'kidnapped without his parents consent'. You don't need parental consent to abduct a person; that's why it is called 'kidnap'

All in all, very graphic and interesting, although I do wish you will edit the scene featuring Sanni's death. It's rather vulgar depicting the death of a child in so graphic a manner. It's just so... wrong... That's why it isn't shown in movies

Now this is that kind of honest, skin-tight criticism that is hard to come by in the Literature Section of today.

Thank you, Ishilove dear, for taking the time out of your busy schedule to read this work, and also criticise. I am indeed grateful.

My Iniquities (Episode 2)

I heard the men cheer loudly. Apparently, some men had won and some lost. I felt like someone having a terrible nightmare. The terror proved too much for me to comprehend. I had taken another person's life; I had been forced to commit a deadly sin. And sadly enough, no, funny enough, I had enriched the pockets of my evil abductors by my grievous deed. My stomach felt totally empty, my head light, and my vision became blurred. I could not look at the body of the boy I had killed; the gruesome image appeared too terrible for me to continue beholding. The noise of the joyous winners rang uncomfortably in my ears. I had nowhere to look; everywhere I turned brought me a part of the dead boy's brain—the table, the walls, the floor, even the ceiling. With the absence of visible sanity around, I shut my eyes, whimpering and weeping for the evil act I had been subjected to do. I thought about my family. Would I ever see them again? Had they been searching around for me? Would they find me? I knew the answers to all my questions as I asked myself; the answers were negative.

Then strong hands grabbed my shoulders. They held me so firmly that I felt pains around my shoulder bones. My legs felt too weak to withstand my weight. The men dragged me out of the room into the long corridor. We went down the long corridor and stopped at the middle of the passage. One of them opened another room on our left hand side. The room was dark, and just like the slaughterhouse I just came out from, this particular room, too, had no window. By the flick of a switch, the lights came on and I could see the room clearer. This particular room had no chair or table, but a big hook hung from the ceiling and had a strong rope attached to it. Confusion overwhelmed me as I contemplated about what terrible drama I would be fated to perform this time around. But what happened far outweighed what premonition I must have nurtured.

The men rid me of my clothings until I found myself totally n*de. Then they proceeded to tie my hands together with the dangling rope. They tied me so tightly that my feet barely touched the floor, I felt stretched like a smoked fish. Fear gripped me; the kind of fear that goes beyond the struggle for modesty overtook my personality. I knew what was coming to me. The men looked at me unkindly; their faces still remained shrouded with mask. I could only determine their wickedness by the cold stare their eyes registered. I began to beg them to let me go. I could as well have been begging a log of wood. None of them hearkened to my plea. They seemed too bent on their mission to listen to a frightened boy...

Listen to what happened to the poor boy in the graphic audiobook below, as emotionally narrated by KINGZPEN.

https://www.dropbox.com/s/07qpt3vi26t60l9/My%20Iniquities%20%28Episode%202%29.mp3?dl=0


Enjoy!

Finally, your favourite detective story, The Brand of Cain, has been published online.

The revised e-book is now available online for download in OkadaBooks at two hundred naira only...or $1.

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RAVES AND REVIEWS FOR 'THE BRAND OF CAIN':

legendprac:
I normally think ahead of the authors of crime/detective novels, and most times, I arrive @ d correct conclusions before I get to d end of d novel... But larry, u were so Ǧ☺☺ϑ, I didn't K№ω where to start from. I found it hard making a meaningful theory that will help me solve the mystery... (Maybe cuz I stopped reading novels abt 5yrs ago or just cuz u r damn too gud)...

I comot my cap for u joor... I pray u get published...

semid4lyfe:
WOW! WOW! WOW!

Just finished the novel like 5 minutes ago and all I'll say is "awesome and close to a masterpiece"

The plot was "tight" with it's many twists & turns. All loose ends were neatly tied up without actually being tied firmly. . .the reason for the sequel.

Obviously, a lot of research went into your writing of this book and it didn't all emanate from the brain. Still, I couldn't help feeling some of the settings, language and mannerism of some of the characters was "un-Nigerian". Another thing is over-description and over-explanation dey worry you the novel.

All in all, a very interesting and brilliant novel. To SMS, THE BRAND OF CAIN IS THE BEST LITERARY WORK I'VE READ BY A NLDer and I'm glad I voted for you in the poll.

Holla at me when it's published cos I'll definitely cop a copy. On to the next one - The Paradox of Abel

Lest I forget. . .Larry, you sabi English o

Calmdove:
Wow wow wow wow wow!!!!! Larrysun u are d bomb..omg!! U ar so blessed and talented,i av been eyeing ur story 4 quite a long time but never 4 once tryed 2 read it but when i read dis brand of cain... I was spellbounded with everytin. i never knew dat av missed alot with d twist, suspense and how connected everyone were.seriously larrysun u made me speechless and mesmerize by dis ur gr8t story*****i pray dat God wil take u 2 higher level..amen**if i didnt comment i wil just be ungrateful..muahhh

Memunah:
Wow!Wow!Wow!......Larrysun,I doff my hat for you
I have read almost all Hardley Chase novels and I really love crime stories......For this am dumbfounded,am a voracious reader,you had me glued to my phone all through......please publish this as soon as you can...can't wait to have a copy

texanomaly:
I just started reading this thread. I am only at chapter 3. I have to stop reading because I can't stop crying. I can see that this story is going to take me on an emotional roller coaster. My heart is broken for this boy/man.

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