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As u be plus one 2day, God win. happy birthday ma.

yet he promised to update every night till the story finishes. FoxyFlow, deris God o! in this thing u re doing!

FoxyFlow:
@Idiataqueen... No worry, updates comes in the night daily till I finish the story..

Slimzjoe:
As usual, this story has been abandoned.......Typical of Foxyflow

Idiataqueen:
U av start dis story of urs again dat u wont end &well nice story and a terrifying story

thanks larrysun for the explanation. keep doing the good work and thanks for the update.
pls check the last chapter u posted, chapter 1 -IX, the second line, shouldn't that be '...Black tried to slip ...' instead of '...sleep...'?

kingphilip:
as the reader who follows all good stories on NL

Come on don't gimme that face
Smile jor

@kingphilip, so because of her moniker u keep spotting her everywhere she goes.
@mourin, u don become 'MTN, everywhere u go' and kingphilip will always spot u.

LarrySun:
From all indications, I think it's Basket who wants to become that educated thief. Lol!

Thanks for reading, ma'am.

thanks larrysun for the explanation. keep doing the good work and thanks for the update.

candy:
Yes o...when eyes still dey knee

Thanks, they are all doing veeery fine, to the glory of God.

nice to know. well i served in gombe too (2012 batch B to be precise) and i am still in gombe south. was retained after serving.

thanks candy spicey for the deliciously delicious update, more grace to ur elbow. greed can kill a man faster, had it been Charles returned the money, i think he won't have ended up been in the police net. greedy fellow. serves him right.

SammyHoe:
CHAPTER EIGHT
My aunt and my mother are still in the euphoria of the great thing God did for us, even three days after the dream I had. Now I have begun to see that some advantages can be in being disabled. Well, I still don't fully agree to it anyway. But that woman I see in the dream calling my name, I have never seen her in real life before. Who can she be? I wonder. Rachael soon began to pester my mother to return to my father.

I come into the issue: "Aunty Rachael, daddy doesn't want us anymore, don't you understand? He used his own hands to throw our loads out of the house. Even if we beg him, he won't agree for us to return," I say. I wait[s][/s] for her to say something. Her throat is dancing to the gulp of the water passing through it. She[b] is[/b] drinking water in a glass cup. Aunty bangs the tumbler against the table and says, "Rose, it's not true, your daddy will accept you, at least you know that it is not possible to chase a bad child away for a tiger to tear apart. Just humbly go to him and kneel down before him, then he will take you back."
.......

When I look into her face she seems ageing. I rush to her. "Mother, don't think too much, you are ageing rapidly," I say. "Ageing?" she manages to ask in smiles. "I am not aging my daughter."
......

1. '....I come into the issue' should be 'I came into the issue'

2. 'I wait for her...' should be 'I waited for her...'

3. 'Her throat is dancing to the gulp of the water passing through it. She[b] is[/b] drinking water...' the bolded words should be '... was dancing...' and '...was drinking water...'

4 'When I look into her face she seems ageing. should be '... seems to be aging...'
'I rush to her. "Mother, don't think too much, you are ageing rapidly," I say. "Ageing?" she manages to ask in smiles.' The 'ageing' should be spelt 'aging' instead of 'ageing'

will get back to you on the remaining chapters. so far so good, you are able!.

SammyHoe:
Edit this
Chapter Five

"But aunty, why can't you be staying here with us [/b]so that that woman on wheelchair will not ill-treat me?"

When mother shared the experience with me, I wept sore and began to hate little Bode and his mother. How could they say such a thing? I will teach him a lesson of his life. Bode must become dumb like myself, I thought.

[b]I put a knife on fire and poured some red oil. I was going to push that knife down his throat. He would lose his voice forever, just like me.

....
Am I the one this small boy is calling a herbivore? I thought. The boy laughed and ran about when I wanted to catch him to deal with him. I wondered who thought this boy to be so heartless. Despite how my mother cared for him, he still did this to me. Why?

....

hello sammyhoe, hope you don't mind

1. ...'why can't you be staying here with us' should be '..why can't you stay here with us...'

2. When mother shared the experience with me, I wept sore and began to hate little Bode and his mother. How could they say such a thing? I will teach him a lesson of his life. Bode must become dumb like myself, I thought. I put a knife on fire and poured some red oil. I was going to push that knife down his throat. He would lose his voice forever, just like me..
i think the bolded part should be 'I will put a knife on fire and pour some red oil oil and then push the knife down his throat....' and it should be a continuation of Rose's thought of what she plans to do to Bode, not a new paragraph.

3. 'I wondered who thought this boy...' should be 'I wondered who taught this boy....'

hope i've been able to help.

SammyHoe:
Edit Chapter 1


CHAPTER ONE

They understood each other—[b]it’s only we, the special one[/b]so called, who couldn’t understand them.
"You are able, Rose," mother said.

hi sammyhoe, 'it’s only we, the special one' should be '... we, the special ones.....'. you are good to go in chapter two.

oga sammy i'll point out all the errors i decover when am on my laptop pls. hope u'll bd patient with me?

throneKid u no go killi me with laugh abeg. so her lastest bf go borrow to belong. who come beta pass - baba tolu weh be himself and the bode-sikiru weh go borrow? women money is not everything o! her bode self dey work unda baba tolu, no be small duping.

Mourin:
lol, am thinkin of addin it very soon

@kingphilip u tell u say she be footballer? abegi free the babe

@candy, did u serve in gombe state? just curious u know. thanks for the mention & how are ur soldiers and hubby? hope they are doing great?

McJANNY:
Morning..I just noticed but I'm not sure how rectify that, trust you slept well too..

ok thanks for this update. do u see the 'modify' buttom, simply click on it on the second post and it will take u back to where u posted it then u can delete it and just type 'to be continued' since u ve already posted thi one here. hope i've helped u a little

gudmorning sammyhoe, longest time. i was wondering why u brought the story back here and even starting from the beginning. hope all is well? pls correct the line where Hannah called rose and her aunt 'gossipers' it should be "gossips" cos there's no english word like 'gossipers'. hope u dont mind.

thanks candy for the update. charles no try at all,so much revenge and hate for ur own friend for many years. tade pls dont die o!

gudmorning mcjanny, how was ur night? thanks for the update but it is a double post. pls check it

will be patiently waiting sire

McJANNY:
I thought 'bout it and I decided i'd do my updates on Mondays, Wednesdays and Fridays..unfailingly. Btw, ah dey salute you and JollyJoy oo...nt to forget my readers too***una2mushhhh***

ok, more grace to ur elbow

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touchmeder:
Hello dear. Happy Easter celebration. I'm still very around; mostly as a guest

oh i see, so when r u writing another one? waiting patiently

repogirl is back! wow thanks for the update. i hope all is well with u and ur family? i missed u so much. update at ur own convienent time, cos i know u have a life outside NL. welcome back

tade, serves u right. but charles ....... is still unbelievable that he would do such 2 his friend and still appear like a gud friend on de outside. a player being played. i guess he had already return all the money back 2 de williams.

touchmender where art thou? its been long o! abey who has seen touchmender?

McJANNY:
Yes it is

wow thats lovely. u re doing a good job, no grammatical error, proper use of tenses, etc. am impressed. ok now come and update pls

toykathy:
candy ma'am, yes! Today is my bornday.

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sis ur 'bornday'? ok o, happy 'bornday' 2 u.

thank u candy for the update. charles of all people! i guess he had his reason for doing that and i want to believe he planned this out with joe. sleeping with his close friend ex and helping the williams to recover all their money. let the cats keep coming out from the bag. tade sorri o ur father warned you earlier.

black wants to be an educated thief or a one with goodvgrammar, even when he cannot go back an finish school, he still wants to upgrade himself ehmmmmm lovely. nice work larrysun, keep them coming

hi mcjanny thanks for the story. glad to know u still write and post despite d fact dat commentors are few but hey we got ur back, u re doing great. is this ur frist story?

wow thanks mj for the update but where have u been hiding all this while?

where are those people who saw wande as being weak? when a person like wande acts, it is usually disastrous. she played along with tade, endured all the slaps and beatings but now she decides as a boss where he should sleep. something tell me that tade
might be sterile. lets watch and see. thanks alot mummy candy & congrats in advance cos u re indeed the best writer of the month

hapi birthday humblebygrace. i'll find them to read ur works. pls cut the cake below and send my own. one love sister