Chumzypinky:
See the number of people viewing this story, almost 20. But den i'll come back and see maybe two or three comments. Nairalanders, very fair of all you

Lol. Trouble in paradise, kasala over meat.

yorhmienerd:
Pardon Erm... erm

Hitmen are hired killers. Since you seem to know so much about gunning people down, I asked if you were one of them.

yorhmienerd:
Why did MIA hire people using Ak-47/pump action guns?

She should've hired people using RPGs and Automatic rifles that can clear 2 cars at the same time.

Lankyannie:
She iz so not nyc.she loves dike rememberi think litqueen is thinking what am thinking.TO LITQUEEN:tnx babe 4 seeing d devil behind dora's facade.i jst love chinny cus she knws wt 2xpect in dt so kald marriage.#teamdickshiv all they way.

Uwc. I'm #teamdickshiv too.

Chumzypinky:
Shiv coughed 'so what are you trying to say now?'

'that your sister is capable of plotting such an evil plan'

'and lets just say this is true. Lets say you're right this time around mom. But then, why would Mia want to kill us? Her only family? Doesnt make sense at all'

Stupid girl She wants your husband!

yorhmienerd:
Why did MIA hire people using Ak-47/pump action guns?

She should've hired people using RPGs and Automatic rifles that can clear 2 cars at the same time.

Are you a hitman?

Lankyannie:
Haaa,una 2lyk 2 dey misundastand me 4dz NL.I intentionally kald dora misha cus she iz goin 2be d 2nd in command afta mia i.e on2 wickedness level ni.dahz y i bracketd it stolen frm KOH so dt u wil undastand me beta.

I agree. Dora and Mia are both in love with Dike. If he falls in love with Shiv, it makes sense that they'll both work together to remove their common enemy.

Aww. It made me tear up

Mia is a b**ch. Planning the murder of your own family members? That's just cold.

kingofcasting:
I'm shaking

You should be. But seriously stop quoting everything like that. I know you're trying to prove a point or something, cause they insulted you last time, but it isn't your story, plus it's annoying.

kingofcasting:

You're in big trouble

Waiting for the story. And please update Blue

Chumzypinky:

hmm, LitQueen, i think this is the jackass we were talking about

Lol

Debbietiyan:


see...it wasn't that bad

Thanks

Chumzypinky:

lol. Wats d difference?

A jackass is a blockhead. Or in Dike's case: a rich, priviledged, cocky, block head. Which makes it worse.
A badass is an aggressive, cool, intimidating person who's bad side you do not want to be on.

'What do you think Harriet?'
I think you should shut up. She thought, but didn't dare say it out loud. Sandra's father owned this bookstore, alongside half the town.
'Lust wants, does the obvious and pads back into the forest. Love is greedier. Love wants round-the-clock care; protection; rings, vows, joint accounts; scented candles for birthdays; life insurance. Babies. Love's a dictator.' She said and relished the look of confusion on the faces of the three blonde idiots she was unfortunate enough to be working with. 'There's no forest around here.' Sandra finally said and Harriet had to work hard not to roll her eyes. Instead she glanced down at her clock and gasped. 'Well would you look at the time Sandy, it's 4:30, didn't you have a date with James by five?' Sandra paled and ran out the door, her two minions at her heels. Harriet smiled and looked back to the counter, and straight into the brown eyes of the boy she was ogling earlier. 'The Bone Clocks, by David Mitchell. You've read it, haven't you?'
Harriet frowned for a moment, then realized he was referring to the quote she'd said to Sandra just now. 'Yes I have. And apparently you have too.'
'Yeah I loved it. Hey, have you read the Orphan Queen Series?'
'Sometimes we hate in others what we despise in ourselves.' She quoted and he grinned at her.
'What's your favorite series?'
She had to think for a few moments. 'Well it'll definitely be the Percy Jackson series. I just adore Rick Riordan.'
'Really?' He leaned on the counter towards her.
'Yeah.'
'Well there's this book convention downtown on Saturday, and I hear Rick Riordan's coming.'
Her jaw dropped and he chuckled. 'Please say you're not joking.'
'Honest to God, he's coming.'
'Wow.' Her shocked expression changed to a disappointed one. 'I would have loved to go. But the amount for the tickets would no doubt be too much for me.'
He tilted his head to the side and studied her for a moment, smiling. 'I have two tickets, wanna be the Annabeth to my Percy?'
She beamed at him, eyes glinting with happiness. 'I'd love to.'



I was literally cringing as I wrote that. Please feel free to tell me how terrible it is.

I'm still debating on wheter Dike is a jackass or a badass

She better not do anything to Shiv

Divepen1:
Seriously... ?

Yep

Debbietiyan:


He had been staring at me since forever. I have every item of my list in my shopping basket but I’m still walking round the aisle, hopefully waiting for him to pucker up courage and come talk to me. I keep stealing quick glances trying to register his current position – I want to be ready with my knock-em-down killer smile when he actually does come. He’s with a friend – I only just noticed that. Screw it I’m leaving. I walk up to the counter. A couple of swiping and packaging later, I’m leaving, disappointment etched on my face to think I had imagined our first kiss.

“Natural light looks wonderful on you.”

His voice is everything I had imagined. “Hi” I turn, my face mirroring surprise and then shock and finally disappointment. He’s right there, the voice is speaking but his lips aren’t moving. I glance over to the owner of the voice – his friend, and my heart pummels to the ground.

“You’re more beautiful – now that I am standing so close, I thought I had seen it all, but apparently…I haven’t. My name’s Damian” he stretches out his hand.

“Well you don’t look so bad yourself,” I lie, he looks terrible in comparison with his mute friend.

“Do you mind?” he asks, handling me his phone. “It’s my friend’s phone. I have a flat battery,” he explains “could you put in your number?”

I grudgingly type in my number. ”Nice meeting you.” I say, looking only at the mute friend and then walking away.

Five steps away, I get a text.

‘ I’m sorry I tricked you into getting your number, Damian is a good friend. You looked so beautiful, I thought you weren’t real. I was literally speechless as I fear you noticed‘

I look back and "he" is waving.

Really nice one.
My ex and only boyfriend was not into 'wooing' I'm afraid if I dare attempt to write, it'll turn out even worse than horrible. I'll just comment on other people's stories.

Saintthug:
i am a critic. U should be happy to have me here

Critics tell you the problems with your work like if you're having too many grammatical errors and things like that. They just don't say: Senseless story without a taste. You're a hater, not a critic.

ernesty20:
This story is very trashy

If you don't like it, don't read it. Nobody begged you.

yorhmienerd:
Quote a whole post again and recieve 50years ban

I reduced it! Like by half!

introvertme:


It isn't fiction,I just decided to assume it's a fictional story,cos it was wayyyy to creepy to b true.It's a true story

I'm also going for wayyyy to creepy to be true else I won't sleep this night.

yorhmienerd:
talk2saintify and LitQueen, behave na Spamming is a punishabe offence

Wetin I do?

Chumzypinky:
Tradition....
As he entered the air-conditioned store, he sighted a familiar figure on the counter, obviously paying for whatever she purchased. He would remember who he saw just the previous day no matter what. He just stood staring.

She looked elegant from behind. She was on a plain blue jumpsuit which hugged her figure so much from behind.

He didnt realise he was ogling till she turned and his eyes met with her hazel eyes. He saw recognition in her eyes. But she looked away as quickly as she had turned.

He was even more shocked when he realised she had come with his mum!

Bloody hell!

Why hadnt he taken note of her entourage from outside? Gosh!

'son?' Geez! His mother finally saw him 'over here!'

He went closer with a smile plastered on his face 'hey mum' He pecked her on both cheeks.

'what a surprise to see you here really. What'd you come here for?' His mother asked.

'i...i came to purchase something for Chinny. I...its her birthday' He lied. He wouldnt tell her about her shameless he had been the previous night. His mother would be so disappointed in him.

'wow! Thats so caring of you. You're finally behaving matured. Anyway, i suppose you already met Shivani. She's gonna be your bride tomorrow so you cant stop ogling her already' His mother chuckled. That was when he realised his eyes had actually rested on Shivani for way too long.

'i..uh,' he diverted his eyes immediately 'i...met her already. She's...beautiful? Yeah, she's pretty'

'i'm glad you realise that. She's going to give you a very beautiful child. I just hope you treat her well. Shower her with love and gifts. She's a treasure. I love her already. Infact, i brought her here to purchase jewelries for the marriage tomorrow'

'oh'

'maybe i should leave the both of you to talk for a while. I'll be at DD's office okay?' He nodded 'Shivani dearie, have fun' Her mother laughed and left.

He turned his gaze to Shivani. Then he swallowed 'hi'

'hi you too'

There was an uncomfortable silence between them 'i...'

'i'm sorry about yesterday' She tried to smile 'i shouldnt have spoken to you that way. I was a bit rude'

He just smiled 'so, your sister aint taking your place anymore?'

She looked down shyly 'no, i dont think so'

'i love your dress. It looks nice on you'

'thanks'

'you look beautiful today' He slapped himself. What was wrong with him? He never showered a woman with too much compliments.

'thanks. You look handsome today'

He smiled again 'so its tomorrow right?'

'yeah, tomorrow'

He looked at the showcase where the various jewelries lay 'uhm..i'm a bit confused as to which jewelry to pick for my third wife, Chinemerem. I'm really not good at stuffs like this. Would you help me please'

She grimaced 'you mean i should help you pick a jewelry for your wife?'

'yeah please?'

'uh...alright'

TBC

Aww. He already can't stop staring at her. But no girl likes being asked to pick out jewellery for another woman that isn't your mother or your sister. Trust me, it's downright annoying.
Congrats to Chumzypinky for getting to front page.

Nnnena:
This Dike surely needs love he would change if he falls in love

Hopefully

Wow. I didn't think he'd go that far to punish them, or that they'd go that far to defy him.

Nice Story. Plz update

Chumzypinky:
Question everyone:
Do you think Mia's to blame for the way she's acting? Do you think she doesnt have the right to fight for what she feels belongs to her as well? Dont you think she has a right to prove her mother wrong?

Well when you put it that way I guess I can see where she's coming from. There's no way anyone could grow up around such negativity and not retaliate. And putting myself in Shivani's shoes, I understand why her mother approval means so much to her. Her mother is a chief, not her father, and it just goes to show that her mother has been the one providing for the family so she sees obeying Freda as an obligation to make up for all the years she inconvenienced herself for the sake of her family.

Nnnena:
This mia sef abeg chumzypinky EPP me plan accident for her yes am wicked like that

Took the words right out of my mouth

Ghostwriter27:


I am guessing you loved it right?
You should check out her other books.

Yes I loved it, I'm reading the art of loving a Greek billonaire now. I'll check out her other books.