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sosalekins:
Not the kinda stories I like reading buh you trying though.
With what have noticed so far,
- your story is centered in one direction (romance).
- its too predictable..
Add suspense! ( that will enhance your traffic)
- your events/scenes are not properly entailed and expressed.
You change events to quickly!
* also, in no condition should you make sarcastic irony towards God!
He's not man that you should tag Him to frivolous writings.
Be careful!
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Not yet following, may do so when you improve,
Have a blessed day.

gerrout if u dn't wanna read,lyk she didn't try..ptchw!..biffers always fink dy av pwoints

almacherish:
And pls does any1 knw d meaning of oniranu oshi..... Something lyk dat......

it means "a wayward person"

snowprince07:
I no hide oo na stress wan kill me oo.
am so so busy this days that I even forgot my phone.hope u good??

Am gud o n hope u r kul?

sophieabou:
gerrout if u dn't wanna read,lyk she didn't try..ptchw!..biffers always fink dy av pwoints

why are you pained?

sosalekins:
why are you pained?

GNS

Jennimma:
Eve is so high on dry gin! can you imagine? And Alma always resorts to crying. She should act jor!

yes nw,alma 2 dy dull herslf

Tnx dear

zyzxx:
I like ur writing skills,
keep it up ma'am, more ink to ur pen.

Ok tnx hun......... Tnx 4 reading too....... Jxt checked ya profile..... Ur pweetie

sophieabou:
it means "a wayward person"

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We went back to the the bank on monday, we were early so I got my printout fast and went back to okigwe.

My exam was in ten days.

We packed up and boarded a bus back to owerri.

There was terrible holdup on the road so we arrived around 3pm.

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we took a cab from ITC park to my mum' s shop.

"mummy goodafternoon...." we both greeted.

"ehen.... How are you?? Amaka how are you?" she asked us.

"we are fine oh...." we replied.

"wait let me get food for you people, i know you'l be hungry now...." she said.

She dished food for both of us and when I asked of Eve, she said she was home.

We ate up and left. On our way out, Kaka said she wanted to lick ice cream so we went into destinee.

We bought it and she also said she wanted us to go upstairs.

So I took the lead, we walked slowly upstairs. We stepped in and as a habit, I quickly surveyed the room.

My eyes fell on a couple sitting by the far end of the room.

The guy was backing the wall while the girl backed the door.

The were laughing really hard so they didnt notice me looking.

I smiled to myself as I remembered Ugonna... We were always like that outside.

Kaka and I sat down at the other end of the room. I was backing the couple.

We were talking when kaka suddenly went still.

"lets go...." she said coldly.

"why, i thought you wanted to stay here??" i asked.

"she didnt reply, she just got up and drew me up.

Her eyes drifted again and this time, mine followed.

They rested on the couple, I was still confused on why they bothered kaka so much.

Then he raised up his head to look the girl in the eye and I knew why, he was Ugonna. He was too engrossed in what he was doing that he didnt notice us.

Ah! Kasala don burst

Jennimma:
Ah! Kasala don burst

yeah, i'm always hearing that "kasala" word, pls, what does it mean?

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We left immediately but I wasnt bothered, the girl was probably his sister.

I mean I went on dates with Frank, so why couldnt he.

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we took a cab to Kaka's house, her parents travelled so there wasnt anyone at home.

We left for my house, on our way home, we decided to go to the supermarket.

We went to Maris, we kept picking chocolate, perfumes and drinks.

Eve loved Amarula and I knew she was going to crucify me If I didnt get her anything, so I bought a bottle.

I also saw a full set of knives and I knew my mum would love it so I got it too.
I also bought bottles of cashew nut, if there's anything like a cashew nut freak, am one.

Kaka bought some biscuits and makeup.

We left for my mums shop again, I told her kaka would be sleeping over and she was cool with it.

It was 6:30pm so she couldnt close up the shop, she wrapped up somethings for us and we left.

Outside the shop, we crossed over the road to get a cab, but kaka decided against it.

She said she wanted to talk to me so we were going to trek.

"bae, are'nt you bothered with what you saw earlier at destinee??" she asked.

"you mean ugonna" i asked.

"of course..." she replied.

"why would i be bothered, he has the right to go on a date with his cousins and his sister... Or doesnt he??" i asked.

"how sure are you??" she asked.

"i trust him and I know he's not doing any other thing with any girl. By the way, why are you so interested in ugonna?? I mean he's my boyfriend not yours, so what's your biz??" i asked rudely.

Immediately I asked her that question, i regretted it, but another thought came to my mind, why would she get so bothered about Ugonna, what's her business, so I got the regret off my mind.

I knew I was being insensitive towards her.

I saw hurt flash through her eyes but she covered it immediately and before I could say any other thing, she flagged down a cab.

We were already at Golden palace hotel when I said those things to her.

It was so obvious she didnt want to waste more time walking with me, it wasnt as if I cared.

"wont you come in??" she asked.

I was still thinking so I didnt know she was waiting for me.

I wanted to say no, but I didnt want to walk further alone so I got in and he drove off.

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He stopped us infront of My house, kaka paid and we got down.

There was someone at home, probably Eve, and she was playing very loud music.

We went into my room without saying a word to each other, well I didnt care, I still see the need to apologize.

I removed my clothes, took my bath and changed into a blue not-so-ripped bum shot.

I couldnt find any top to wear it with so I just wore my blue bra.

We still werent talking, so I brought out the stuff I bought for eve and dropped it on the bed.

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I went downstairs to the kitchen and saw oranges there, I took four upstairs to give some to eve but she rejected them, she was clearly still angry.

I'd finished the first and took up the second one to peel.

I decided it was no use staying there with Kaka when she wasnt talking to me, so I took the amarula and one orange to Eve's room.

The door wasnt locked so I opened it to meet the greatest shock of my life..........

Na so we see am o

Jennimma:
Ah! Kasala don burst

My heart in my mouth
alma wat did u see ooooooo

Make I No Leak out secret sha

nice update Alma Tnx for updating
can I have another tonight?

Hehehe kasala don burst ugonna is doing sometin hmmm

Wow! Just started reading ur story dis evening nd just couldn't stop reading, through wit it nw, nyc 1 bt please update ooooo

almacherish:
Ok tnx hun......... Tnx 4 reading too....... Jxt checked ya profile..... Ur pweetie

oh tnx.

Please tell us what you saw. Nice update

wow.. nice one alma baby.xoxo

Alma update nw, don't disappoint me
Read ur story 2days ago bt expecting more update, don't fall my hand o

@ april, trypa, princess, phil, bookj, and others.... Ma fone spoilt on wednesday, not repaired it yet, using ma fone to update now.... Sori 4 d delay.

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I opened the door and met Eve riding ugonna with her back turned against the door.

Ugonna's eyes were closed so he didnt notice my presence.

It was clear they werent expecting anyone. I opened my mouth to say something but no sound came out.

Their moans became too loud for me to bear. My palms became sweaty, and the knife and the bottle slipped off.

The sound immediately brought them back as Ugonna opened his eyes immediately and Eve turned around.

Immediately, my eyes held contact with ugonna's. He rushed forward to me.

I stopped him mid-way, "dont come close" i said as I closed my eyes.

The words i said to kaka immediately came to my mind and I felt like a fool.

I'd destroyed my friendship with my bestie because of these fools.

The slap at inner bar, the calls from Ugonna, the harsh words from Eve all came rushing to my mind as I opened my eyes immediately and picked up the knife.

continue Alma u r really doing great

awaiting more from u

almacherish:
@ april, trypa, princess, phil, bookj, and others.... Ma fone spoilt on wednesday, not repaired it yet, using ma fone to update now.... Sori 4 d delay.

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I opened the door and met Eve riding ugonna with her back turned against the door.

Ugonna's eyes were closed so he didnt notice my presence.

It was clear they werent expecting anyone. I opened my mouth to say something but no sound came out.

Their moans became too loud for me to bear. My palms became sweaty, and the knife and the bottle slipped off.

The sound immediately brought them back as Ugonna opened his eyes immediately and Eve turned around.

Immediately, my eyes held contact with ugonna's. He rushed forward to me.

I stopped him mid-way, "dont come close" i said as I closed my eyes.

The words i said to kaka immediately came to my mind and I felt like a fool.

I'd destroyed my friendship with my bestie because of these fools.

The slap at inner bar, the calls from Ugonna, the harsh words from Eve all came rushing to my mind as I opened my eyes immediately and picked up the knife.

Aww feel like crying babe so sorry

I'v been followin ur work since yesterday nd all i hv 2 say is AWESOME... 9ce work Alma, keep it up

Ive been followin dis story nd dis is d first tym nd commenting on it. Nyc story. I hope alma would nt do anytin bad

Whoa! The knife thingy? It's scaring me already.

feeling sorry 4her bt dat Eve is devilish nd ogonna too is wicked nd heartless bt please don't do anything stupid
Pls more update

Alma, show dem what u are made of, but don't fight and don't kill

Welldone miss

pls don't kill anybody oo...

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I picked up the knife and walked slowly towards Eve as she backed away.

"i'm not sorry...." eve said.

"you should be.... " i said.

With the knife in my hand, I was still confused as to what to do with it.

Something in me told me to stab Eve while another told me to walk out of the room, but I wasnt listening to any.

I was past angry, it wasnt anger anymore, it was rage and it was evident on my face.

I thought of all the times i spent with Ugonna and I shed tears, because to me, it was all lies upon lies.

"its all your fault... Spending time talking to Godson... Did you ever tell Ugonna what you were doing" eve asked.

"you were talking to Godson??" ugonna asked.

By this time, i was infront of Eve.

"one more word from you, and I swear by everything I hold sacred, I will stab you and gladly go to jail..... Just one word..... What didnt I do for you? I loved you like a sister and what did you do in return? You turned around and slept with my boyfriend.." i yelled while she lowered her head.

"alma, i love you...." Ugonna said as I ignored him.

I raised up my hand to give Eve a cut on her face when a hand held mine.

I turned around and saw kaka.

"whats all this.." i asked.

"dont do something you'l regret.." she said.

"i'l regret not doing it, so leave me alone...." i said but she still held on tight.

She tried dragging me out but I kept resisting. I turned to Eve again.

"today, I denounce all ties binding the both of us as sisters... I do not know you, neither do I have ties with you. There is no bond what so ever between us. You dont know me, and I dont know you.... We will not speak to each other, neither will we eat from the same pot...." i was saying.

"enough!!! Dont say things you'l regret..." kaka screamed.

I walked out and into my room, i fished for the chain inside my purse and found it.

I went back to Eve's room, this time, my focus was set on Ugonna.

"I loved you but you made me a fool.... I was ready to do anything for you.... I thought you loved me.... But everything between us was just a lie.... I should have known... Starting right from the accident...." i said.

He wanted to talk but I cut him off.

"dont say anything, because it'l probably be a lie.... I love you and probably always will... But we are over.... Take back your chain and give it to Eve if you want... I dont give a fvck.... Dont say a word to me ever again.. We are strangers from this moment." i said and shoved the chain into his hand.

He tried to hold me but I shifted immediately.

As if to seal my words, lightening shone, and thunder struck... It started raining immediately.

I knew that moment that the solution to my problem wasnt in bottles or sex..... It was in the rain.

I went into my room, changed my clothes and set out into the rain.

I didnt cry, i didnt talk, I just walked.

I wont o... 4 ya sake

Shebarh:
pls don't kill anybody

oo... Lol, i'l make sure i do.... N i wont fight or kill

zyzxx:
Alma, show dem what u are made of, but don't fight and don't kill

tnx hun
welldone miss

Ellidude:
Whoa! The knife thingy? It's scaring me already. Dont be o

Mercyesse:
Ive been followin dis story nd dis is d first tym nd commenting on it. Nyc story. I hope alma would nt do anytin bad.
Nah i wont.

snowhyt:
I'v been followin ur work since yesterday nd all i hv 2 say is AWESOME... 9ce work Alma, keep it up

tnx hun.