Han han! So fast?! Nice story anyway

Shay dis story end abi Nepa take light.....

Nice story, God bless you. Thanks for sharing.

No, no, no. It can't just end like that. Anybdy provoke u??

Kudos Bro...

The story finished earlier than I expected.nevertheless thanks very much.

Well done Boyo boy.

Nice story boyo. But the way you ended it wasn't pleasing to me (I don't know about others)
And the way you made everything seem so easy for funmi and dayo made the story seem so fake and unreal. I know it's imaginary fiction but there are ways you could have added some touch of realness in it. At first the suspense was captivating but at the end people's expectations were disappointed. For me, I was expecting things to happen that dayo and funmi weren't relatives after all, that way there won't be reason for the supposed "incest" relationship which is obviously the case judging by the way the story ended
Not unless it's acceptable in the West.
All in all, you did a nice job. I'm sure your next one would be better. Thanks for the ride through.

Boyo123 never fails. Very nice write up. I think u should make this your talent more of profession than hobby because u r truly gifted. More grace to u. Remember to mention me in the next. Gracias

Luckymay:
Nice story boyo. But the way you ended it wasn't pleasing to me (I don't know about others)
And the way you made everything seem so easy for funmi and dayo made the story seem so fake and unreal. I know it's imaginary fiction but there are ways you could have added some touch of realness in it. At first the suspense was captivating but at the end people's expectations were disappointed. For me, I was expecting things to happen that dayo and funmi weren't relatives after all, that way there won't be reason for the supposed "incest" relationship which is obviously the case judging by the way the story ended
Not unless it's acceptable in the West.
All in all, you did a nice job. I'm sure your next one would be better. Thanks for the ride through.

thanks for the comment Luckymay
i appreciate it.
but i want you to know that no matter how i end the story everyone cant be satisfied with it, and as you know, i like ending my stories in such a way that i leave room for continuation in case there is a need for it,

And the way you made everything seem so easy for funmi and dayo made the story seem so fake and unreal
wow, really hurts dear,i tried to make it as realistic as possible

I was expecting things to happen that dayo and funmi weren't relatives after all, that way there won't be reason for the supposed "incest" relationship which is obviously the case judging by the way the story ended
Not unless it's acceptable in the West. that was one of the main issue that brought about me writing this story

but i still really appreciate your comment , thanks soooo much , God bless you

Neroclassic:
Boyo123 never fails. Very nice write up. I think u should make this your talent more of profession than hobby because u r truly gifted. More grace to u. Remember to mention me in the next. Gracias

thanks bro, have been looking for connection on that o, but not seeing anyone,

boyo123:
thanks for the comment Luckymay
i appreciate it.
but i want you to know that no matter how i end the story everyone cant be satisfied with it, and as you know, i like ending my stories in such a way that i leave room for continuation in case there is a need for it,

And the way you made everything seem so easy for funmi and dayo made the story seem so fake and unreal
wow, really hurts dear,i tried to make it as realistic as possible

I was expecting things to happen that dayo and funmi weren't relatives after all, that way there won't be reason for the supposed "incest" relationship which is obviously the case judging by the way the story ended
Not unless it's acceptable in the West. that was one of the main issue that brought about me writing this story

but i still really appreciate your comment , thanks soooo much , God bless you

Sorry my Good friend, I wasn't trying to hurt your feelings. I'm sorry it I made my criticism sound hurtful.
You are really doing a nice job, please don't let anyone, not even me deter you or discourage you. I still remain your no. 1 fan.
Cheers!!

Boyo nyc job, nid to wrk on ur typo and use of tense though.
As for the end of the story, its ok, open to continuation while everybody has the liberty of writing his own happy/sad ending.

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nice story, buh me no lyk the way the story end o

benkazy1014:
Boyo nyc job, nid to wrk on ur typo and use of tense though.
As for the end of the story, its ok, open to continuation while everybody has the liberty of writing his own happy/sad ending.

Admin GIVE BOYO123 AN OSCAR!!!

thanks bro, appreciate

Short n intresting,Tanks boyo,i enjoyd it.

collins1895:
Short n intresting,Tanks boyo,i enjoyd it.

thanks bro

boyo123:
thanks bro

Bro i have tried contacting you, i really enjoy your stories here on Nairaland and i have a proposal for you.

Princezoi:
Bro i have tried contacting you, i really enjoy your stories here on Nairaland and i have a proposal for you.

thanks bro, i replied your mail, but i havent heard from you either

boyo123:


thanks bro, i replied your mail, but i havent heard from you either

I'm sorry i cant access that email for now, send me your email address and i'll fill you in.

Princezoi:
I'm sorry i cant access that email for now, send me your email address and i'll fill you in.

ok bro,

uthman.b123@gmail.com

boyo123:
ok bro,

uthman.b123@gmail.com

Bro i already sent you a mail to the address you sent, and i am yet to recieve a reply. Pls find time and reply as soon as possible.

Princezoi:
Bro i already sent you a mail to the address you sent, and i am yet to recieve a reply. Pls find time and reply as soon as possible.

i have replied you

number of views keep increasing but am not seeing comments, what is happening guys

Hi nix write up. short and concise but u need to connect with your characters and d places u are using.am not so sure that incest is practiced in nigeria and espiecialy in yoruba, the relationship between dayo and funmi is a taboo. and then funmi seems to me to be a staunch village and so she would have being bothered about her losing virginity and d consequeses attached to it than love. pls connect with the characters and then dayo's father should still be worried about his son's education since dats d only one he had. you can as well increase d suspense . there are somethings u should not add immediately thanks

Precial419:
Hi nix write up. short and concise but u need to connect with your characters and d places u are using.am not so sure that incest is practiced in nigeria and espiecialy in yoruba, the relationship between dayo and funmi is a taboo. and then funmi seems to me to be a staunch village and so she would have being bothered about her losing virginity and d consequeses attached to it than love. pls connect with the characters and then dayo's father should still be worried about his son's education since dats d only one he had. you can as well increase d suspense . there are somethings u should not add immediately thanks

thanks for your observations madam

but do you think if dayo knew funmi was he's cousin he would have slept with her? i hope you will agree with me that such can happn to anyone

also i will disagree with you on the issue of funmi being a staunch village girl ,am sure you know that village girls are far easier to swindle when it comes to issue of sex,

i hope u get what am saying, thanks for the comment ones again madam

boyo123:
thanks for your observations madam

but do you think if dayo knew funmi was he's cousin he would have slept with her? i hope you will agree with me that such can happn to anyone

also i will disagree with you on the issue of funmi being a staunch village girl ,am sure you know that village girls are far easier to swindle when it comes to issue of sex,

i hope u get what am saying, thanks for the comment ones again madam

Yes i get what u are but in a normal africa setting, the families would be more worried at d abomination committed than hatred since it could have led to their death a terrible but u made d hatred between them to surpass traditions unless u r choosing an advanced yoruba africa setting. even if it was jux sex, they have needed to go for cleansing. incest is a taboo in most of the world not to talk of the yorubas in nigeria they have one of d best and strict cultural practices and traditions in africa.

Relationships between cousins are possible but it is still a taboo dats wat u ignored

Precial419:

Yes i get what u are but in a normal africa setting, the families would be more worried at d abomination committed than hatred since it could have led to their death a terrible but u made d hatred between them to surpass traditions unless u r choosing an advanced yoruba africa setting. even if it was jux sex, they have needed to go for cleansing. incest is a taboo in most of the world not to talk of the yorubas in nigeria they have one of d best and strict cultural practices and traditions in africa.

hmmm, madam u are going spiritual o

boyo123:
hmmm, madam u are going spiritual o

No am not spiritual that's why i said connect with the place-their culture and tradition. sori if it seems am going spiritual but this is not d first story i hav read about relatives getting married but the culture allowed them to. such a suggestion though it would make d story much more realistic

Precial419:

No am not spiritual that's why i said connect with the place-their culture and tradition. sori if it seems am going spiritual but this is not d first story i hav read about relatives getting married but the culture allowed them to. such a suggestion though it would make d story much more realistic

thats why i ended it that way so there could be space for continuation

the way it is now anyone can conclude the story the way he likes, for example u can imagine them going tru the spiritual bath and eventually leaving each other while someone else who is cool with the whole event might like see them marry each other

my opinion as the writer is not stated yet, based on demands and maybe some other condition i can decide to reveal my opinion

thanks again, pls dont forget to check my other stories on my profile , would love to see your reviews on them too

boyo123:
thats why i ended it that way so there could be space for continuation

the way it is now anyone can conclude the story the way he likes, for example u can imagine them going tru the spiritual bath and eventually leaving each other while someone else who is cool with the whole event might like see them marry each other

my opinion as the writer is not stated yet, based on demands and maybe some other condition i can decide to reveal my opinion

thanks again, pls dont forget to check my other stories on my profile , would love to see your reviews on them too

K thanks i undastand and how do i check ur stories cos i got to know about d literature section about 4 days ago