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Be expecting more updates i will also appreciate your comments and if not then i think i will drop my pen because i think the story is no more interesting.

nice update op

nice one. more grease to your elbow

iamgprince:
nice update op

thanks so much

Peterdrumz:
nice one. more grease to your elbow

thanks for that comment

ezeknov:
thanks so much

and come and continue oo

iamgprince:
and come and continue oo

don't worry more updates are coming.

ezeknov:
how about this current update?

if you are talking about your updates, they are great. The updates you have posted pave way for a mind blowing story. Knights and warlords don't exist - at least not in this age. You are writing a fantasy and a fantasy requires you to put the pictures in your head into explanations. Writing a fantasy means you can twist your story the way you want. Anything is possible within the limits of your fantasy so nobody should define your story. Its yours to write. Keep imagining Eze. I'm solidly behind you, waiting with baited breath for your next episode

Tygold1:
if you are talking about your updates, they are great. The updates you have posted pave way for a mind blowing story. Knights and warlords don't exist - at least not in this age. You are writing a fantasy and a fantasy requires you to put the pictures in your head into explanations. Writing a fantasy means you can twist your story the way you want. Anything is possible within the limits of your fantasy so nobody should define your story. Its yours to write. Keep imagining Eze. I'm solidly behind you, waiting with baited breath for your next episode

Thanks for that then i think i will change the topic

Tygold1:
if you are talking about your updates, they are great. The updates you have posted pave way for a mind blowing story. Knights and warlords don't exist - at least not in this age. You are writing a fantasy and a fantasy requires you to put the pictures in your head into explanations. Writing a fantasy means you can twist your story the way you want. Anything is possible within the limits of your fantasy so nobody should define your story. Its yours to write. Keep imagining Eze. I'm solidly behind you, waiting with baited breath for your next episode

thanks so much for that comments then i think i will change its topic.

ezeknov:
Thanks for that then i think i will change the topic

don't even think of it. The title is the main reason anybody is reading it. Why should you change it? It is a befitting title!

Tygold1:
don't even think of it. The title is the main reason anybody is reading it. Why should you change it? It is a befitting title!

ok then thanks again for the comments

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I was just saying that you should let the time of knights and warlords influence pictures you imagine.

Tygold1:
I was just saying that you should let the time of knights and warlords influence pictures you imagine.

ok i understand be expecting more ups

ezeknov:
ok i understand be expecting more ups

sure! Can't wait

Continuation


"Argad..! The special advisor to the former king.!"

The entire Hall almost blew up because of the shock written on many faces. That mysterious man.
They all looked around expecting him but couldn't find him around.

King Gareeb feared him secretly.As he could only fight the anger emitting from in his heart.Since the beginning of his reign,Argad had never advised him concerning any matter or issues.
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Argad was an old sage who served under the former king lancelot v and vi.He was quite a mysterious man.Everyone avoided his penetrating gazes as he would stare into one's soul.And infact he was an expertised driud.
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Harik and his father increased their speed as they ran.Suddenly his father stopped in his track"harik please continue i can't continue go anymore let me buy you some time."

"c'mon father they are reaching us here."

"No son.you have a bright future and destiny and i want it to come to pass but remember this i am not your real father. I'm your grandfather!!"

harik froze as he turned to face his grandpa.

"I'm sorry for not telling you the truth but remember look for them! Now GO!"

Harik hesitated before he turned to run as he unknowingly cross the boundary into the "wilds"

Guys i have done some changes

ezeknov:
Guys i have done some changes

I believe you are using the 'stream of consciousness' narrative style. I don't think adding exclamation marks to the narrator's words is very cool. It makes the statement kind of uh.... childish. (In fact, he was an expertise druid!!) I think the exclamation marks should be used to express a speakers emotions, not the narrator. There are other ways to relay solemnity or surprise to your reader. Apart from that, awesome update. More grease to your elbow.

Continuation

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"I said come out from your hideout NOW! Helen"
Helen hid behind the tree breathing heavily as she stood resting behind the tree quietly as tears slowly came out as she thought about her whole life.

Flashback¤¤
Helen a thirteen year old quiet but beautiful tall girl rush inside her uncle stone but long hut with a tall chimney smiling happily.
Her uncle a man in his fifties was a wealthy wool merchant who owned a thousand sheeps and five hundred rams.He was among the top fifty richest men in the southern kingdom.
Helen was an orphan but her uncle though married with two younger children took responsibility of her.
One day he sat her down and questioned her;
"what did think you wanna become in future because you will not be under mine care when you grow up?"
As Helen heard this words her face lit up in surprise as she quickly shouted"i want to be an archer knight that is what i want to become!"
Her uncle freeze he had seen most women who are archers but not knights because only men are made knight but he do not want to cut her dreams to shreds.
"ok then i will enroll you at the archery school at the central kingdom."
"uncle you will do it?" As she raised her head up as she stood up expecting that three letter word Yes.
Suddenly her uncle was quiet. She shook her head in disappointment as she sank back to her silver chair.maybe her uncle was joking
"YES! of course!"
"yeepee!!! Finally i would own a bow after my training and if i win the grand southern kingdom tournament then i will be rewarded with two CROSSBOWS!!"
"but uncle the enrollment is terribly costly!.i made enquiries and the management said it cost fifty thousand pieces of gold coins"
"Ah! Its so costly its not in silver but gold well i will save for the enrollment"
"thanks uncle!!" As she rushed outside to tell her friends happily.
The following week she was enroll into the archery school.Well the practice given to her look strange but she was a fast learner and and by one year she graduated from the training and she was famous as the youngest trained archer and epitome of complete beauty.
Now she wanted to enroll in the grand southern archery and she was looking for a sponsors because her uncle had exhausted all wealth on her and his two children.
She had many sponsors but their aim were to marry her at this tender age of fourteen years old and other immoral aims promising her huge wealth ranging from five hundred million gold pieces and upward.but she rejected them all.
Till she found a sponsor who gave her no conditions she was happy as she burst into the room to tell her uncle
"uncle i have finally found a chosen sponsorer who gave me no conditions."
"do you trust that person?"
"ok go ahead!!"
"thanks father!!!"as she turned to go
"Helen be careful!!"
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As last those words spew out of her heart the tears pour endlessly.
She could remember when she met the sponsor who shockingly told her
"haha you're now my slave am about to sell you to a man at the western kingdom for eight hundred million gold pieces"
As she couldn't believe those that had been utter before she knew what happened she was tied and had covered her face.
"so Helen bye and don't ever think your father or uncle would save you because he had just been just been kidnapped and properties seized!"
And soon she was sold to slavery as she thought whether are dreams might come to pass.Since then she had a bow and a bundles of ten sharpen arrows and escaped into the forest and had made her master followed her with a fully armed guards
soon dense anger seep out from her as she heard her master shouting this time behind her
"Helen come out.......!"
As her master walk toward the tree he saw a flowing gown by tree root he smile as he quickly pulled out his sword

Tygold1:
I believe you are using the 'stream of consciousness' narrative style. I don't think adding exclamation marks to the narrator's words is very cool. It makes the statement kind of uh.... childish. (In fact, he was an expertise druid!!) I think the exclamation marks should be used to express a speakers emotions, not the narrator. There are other ways to relay solemnity or surprise to your reader. Apart from that, awesome update. More grease to your elbow.

thanks i think i will correct that

More ups arriving in the evening or maybe in the afternoon

I will also appreciate your comments

Eze we are waiting for you

Getting interesting

Eze! You said updates are coming in the afternoon or evening the day before yesterday! Are you thinking of dropping your pen? Please don't. Or else.... Never mind. Just update pleeeeease?

following

op hope you are not in South Africa

iamgprince:
op hope you are not in South Africa

also wondering

I am back again viewers and followers. Sorry for the long time I had been on standby. Pls accept my apology.

Tygold;
skyblueking;
enm;
iamgprince;
hardes;
peterdrumz;
and yet to be known viewers and followers. i greet you all.

Tygold;
skyblueking;
enm;
iamgprince;
hardes;
peterdrumz;
and yet to be known viewers and followers. i greet you all.