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Playing With Words--Poetry by Odillz: 5:14pm On Jan 27, 2015 |
Welcome to my cot. Read and assess my poems. Read and assess my random stories. I'm no expert, just playing with words |
Re: Playing With Words--Poetry by Odillz: 5:25pm On Jan 27, 2015 |
MISERABLE FOLA. Day chamelioned to night, And as he walked past like a bullock, The usual smells got up from their corners, Shook dust off their buttock, And attacked his nostrils like fore-runners. Physically miserable with saggy jean, Blotchy skin and dust polished sneakers. Another day lost,no job found. Pounding head and aching jaws, Redhot eyes,Fola is a mess. Dark cottage,no porridge,fowl stench. Knees on ground,body slowly lowers. "I quit". "I fold the day". "I am gone". Morning announces his repose, Neigbours gather for Fola's dispose. Dark dept,shallow pit,six feat. Dirgy cries,more mourn,no feast. Fola. Breath and scent undesirable, Miserable,Fola is miserable. cc: Scrypt. Standd. Laykorn. Herzumpther. Mynd44 3 Likes 2 Shares |
Re: Playing With Words--Poetry by Nobody: 5:26pm On Jan 27, 2015 |
Odillz, Let me book space first wo. I know who you are. This is........ Chai, why you like to dey change account like chameleon sef Ayamlaykorn |
Re: Playing With Words--Poetry by Odillz: 5:33pm On Jan 27, 2015 |
ICICLE. The spirit feeds on frame, Of hurtling fame. Dark ethos,coquettish game, Explore eugenics. Scream eureka! Life and icicle. Esteem weakens,courage fails. We become weak,we become faint. We destroy ourselves. We are evanescent, Like an icicle. Scream eureka! Life and icicle. When chips are down, We are repudiated. Living,hanging,searching for bailiff. Hanging,tapering piece of icicle. Scream eureka! Life and icicle. Dance in idyll, Wail in peril, Watch vicissitudes. Catch an ice, Toss a dice. Scream eureka! S-c-r-e-a-m! I, Life and icicle. Cc: Standd. Mynd44. Scrypt. Jamean. Laykorn. 3 Likes 3 Shares |
Re: Playing With Words--Poetry by Odillz: 5:34pm On Jan 27, 2015 |
laykorn:M back na oya judge me |
Re: Playing With Words--Poetry by Nobody: 5:37pm On Jan 27, 2015 |
Re: Playing With Words--Poetry by Odillz: 5:47pm On Jan 27, 2015 |
ASABE. Partaker in the Painted veil called life, Symbol of fruithfulness, Symbol of motherhood. Bent on fufilling destiny, While turning around Like a dog, Trying to settle on a rug. Thorny beauty as that Of modern witches, Asabe. Supressed by mute Echoes of pain, Her skin caressed by Fierce harmattan sun. Wrapped in painful Comfort of her Lord Enuch, Symbol of barrenness. Asabe, The once innocent Tendril. Torrential downpour On leaking thatched Roof. Hers is the tragi-Comic Schedule, For she continues, Dawdling as the call Of eagles on day old, Chicks. On face depressed With, Oily tears. Asabe reaches for Life, And desire, And dreams, And death. Cc:Laykorn. Herzumpther. Standd. Scrypt. 3 Likes 3 Shares |
Re: Playing With Words--Poetry by Odillz: 5:48pm On Jan 27, 2015 |
laykorn:Okay. Attend to my poems. |
Re: Playing With Words--Poetry by Nobody: 6:21pm On Jan 27, 2015 |
Odillz:I corrected some typos up there. I like your use of similies and your rhymes are awesome too. But sincerely, I read and re-read this but didn't get the message. My brain is dull. Please explain. I think, I think he committed suicide. Ayamlaykorn |
Re: Playing With Words--Poetry by Odillz: 6:35pm On Jan 27, 2015 |
laykorn:Thank you. Fola is depicted as a guy who doesn't live the comfortable life of having a decent job,a decent house and even a decent food...So he sees himself miserable enough and gave up after another wasted day of not getting a job and hunger.. |
Re: Playing With Words--Poetry by Nobody: 6:36pm On Jan 27, 2015 |
Odillz:You mean he commited suicide? Bad. Let me check the other two. Ayamlaykorn |
Re: Playing With Words--Poetry by Odillz: 10:05am On Jan 28, 2015 |
laykorn:Waiting o |
Re: Playing With Words--Poetry by Odillz: 10:12am On Jan 31, 2015 |
Lying alone. With my head on the Floor. Thinking of you Till it Hurts. Whatever tomorrow Would bring. I choose these words. "I'm all out of love. I'm so lost without You. I know you were Right, For leaving for so Long. I can't be too late. To say that I want so Much.." To NEKA 1 Like |
Re: Playing With Words--Poetry by Odillz: 10:25am On Jan 31, 2015 |
WHO DIED. Who died? The hunter. He died and left his Poverty to his gun. Who died? The blacksmith. He died and left his Poverty to his anvil. Who died? The farmer. He died and left his Poverty to his Plough. Who exactly died? Life. He. She. It died and left it's Copy to the original Copy. |
Re: Playing With Words--Poetry by Nobody: 4:53pm On Feb 06, 2015 |
Odillz: This one is deep wo. You just made me feel so vulnerable, like a piece of of icicle. Shouldn't the 'eurekas' be in upper case, Oddilz? Ayamlaykorn |
Re: Playing With Words--Poetry by Nobody: 4:56pm On Feb 06, 2015 |
Odillz: . Ayamlaykorn |
Re: Playing With Words--Poetry by Odillz: 5:20pm On Feb 06, 2015 |
@Laykorn,,give me an example of how "eureka" should be placed,I don't quite get that |
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