dennismukoro: Continue. No mind dem

Lolaabokoku: #Subscribingggggg# *second Τ̅Ơ̴̴̴̴͡ comment* dancing alingo

Lolaabokoku: #Subscribingggggg# *second Τ̅Ơ̴̴̴̴͡ comment* dancing alingo

IZUKWU: Very good story ,you have there. Thanks for sharing with us. It's obvious that you are a learner but don't lose hope . Practise makes perfect. Keep writing,you can only get better and improve and your growth will be very evident to you. Don't insult people. Pick what you need to improve from people criticism and response and better yourself. But try to edit your work before posting. And even your earlier posts ,you can still read through then and make corrections. More power to your elbow.

vivian chinaza: Seriously? The written English is horrible, so horrible that it almost damaged my brain box, pls work on that. The tense, verb agreement, punctuation and all, the sentences lack structure. The story has potential but ...........

vivian chinaza: Seriously? The written English is horrible, so horrible that it almost damaged my brain box, pls work on that. The tense, verb agreement, punctuation and all, the sentences lack structure. The story has potential but ...........

immortalvoices: Continued now...

"So what department are you going into?" Vivian asked.

"Political science," I answered with a smile. "What about you?".

"Same."

"Wow," I said, as I looked directly into her eyes. I noticed a mischievous glint there.

After spending some time trying to locate the place, we met a good samaritan (student) who showed us the way.

"Megwo," I greeted the man we met in the office, who I later discovered to be one of our lecturers named Mr. Benedict. (Megwo is a form of greeting in uhrobo dialect)

I was screened successfully and I went outside to wait for her. Not long afterwards, she came out together with the lecturer smiling.

"Kevin, let's go, I'm hungry," She said to me. I felt this sudden rush of jealousy in me, maybe it was because of the way they were smiling at each other.

...wait o dis one na lecturer na, wetin make am dey shine teeth wit dis babe and dem jus meet for d first time o...

"Hmmm all dis lecturer no dey take eye see fine girl o" I muttered to myself.

"Are you through with your screening?" I managed to ask her, for I was already getting tensed and angry.

She laughed out softly and replied "no".

"Like seriously, you dey behave like possess child o," I nearly said.

"I'm not in your department, Kelvin" she said.

"What?" I couldn't believe my ears, I became confused, with so many questions running through my mind.

Just then her phone rang out in her purse and she quickly fished it out.

"Hello... Who's speaking?.... Oh! Ok sir... ermm yes sir...I will save d number sir."

...your guess is as good as mine... it'sTHE LECTURER...

So many questions, no anwers, I need answers fast, hmmm we all need answers fast....

To be continued after comments.....

VanTee20: The above post is an edited version of your last update. Looks different huh? Well the few differences lie in some edited words, punctuation and paragraphs.

I'm not saying I did a perfect job (I'm a learner too) but you'll admit that the edited post is more readable... Your story is interesting but you have to watch your use of punctuations, tenses and paragraphs, if you want your story to appeal to readers.

Btw, I saw my name on your honour roll, I feel so honoured, thanks ...

Foxybone: Walks in silently and picks a sit.... Why this dude never start d main thing abi u dey fear sexuality section? [b][/b]